new game brainstorming
- Thread starter joedirt
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- Jun 10, 2017
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Règle 1.5:
Nous sommes une communauté en langue anglaise. Veuillez fournir une traduction avec votre publication si elle n'est pas en anglais.
Rule 1.5:
We are an English-speaking community. Please provide a translation with your post if it's not in English
Do you know what he is talking about? I could only understand names of some female pornstars, such as Julia Ann, Brandi Love, and that's it.
- Jul 27, 2022
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Nope, I don't understand any of the thread poster's language. He needs to translate his post, so we can understand what he is talking about.Do you know what he is talking about? I could only understand names of some female pornstars, such as Julia Ann, Brandi Love, and that's it.
- Jul 27, 2022
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I am not sure if this is okay or not, but I put "Chapter 1" of his post in Google Translate. Translated most of Chapter 1 description for days 1 and 2. Couldn't translate all of it, tried, and there is a 3900 word limit for Google Translate. At least we know some of what he is referring to.
Translated thread poster's post for Chapter 1 days 1 and 2:
Chapter 1
"Born of a brief moment of pleasure, Dakota from birth to 8 years old, lives with her confused parents. Braving the illusion of freedom, her mother leaves home in a hurry, but ironically, she causes a road accident. Mutually injured, mother-daughter will be separated from their family rights. Mother finds asylum with a friend at the other end of the country. Dakota remains alone with her father wearing the image of the little princess. until she comes of age, she is her father's sole project.
Sentenced for abuse, finally freed, Dakota joins her mother. Couldn't life be better?
The short answer is no. The journey strewn with events at the same time subject to all human beings, our first experiences, our successes and our failures forge our personality. In her case, she will know only submission, breach of trust and loss of her humanity.
Welcome behind the mirror of horror and cling to its misery.
The game is designed as follows:
Day 1
A straight line of events without hitches or else suicide follows (bad ending). She meets her mother, her friend and mother-in-law, a boy and meets a girl.
Day 2
More relaxed, the mother-in-law and Dakota are shopping for the coming week. Among others, the albums of Jean Leloup and an alarm clock. In the evening, she settles for 7 o'clock with an excerpt from her favorite song (the singer's reproachful choice of reply according to her mood (from happy to bitter))."
Translated thread poster's post for Chapter 1 days 1 and 2:
Chapter 1
"Born of a brief moment of pleasure, Dakota from birth to 8 years old, lives with her confused parents. Braving the illusion of freedom, her mother leaves home in a hurry, but ironically, she causes a road accident. Mutually injured, mother-daughter will be separated from their family rights. Mother finds asylum with a friend at the other end of the country. Dakota remains alone with her father wearing the image of the little princess. until she comes of age, she is her father's sole project.
Sentenced for abuse, finally freed, Dakota joins her mother. Couldn't life be better?
The short answer is no. The journey strewn with events at the same time subject to all human beings, our first experiences, our successes and our failures forge our personality. In her case, she will know only submission, breach of trust and loss of her humanity.
Welcome behind the mirror of horror and cling to its misery.
The game is designed as follows:
Day 1
A straight line of events without hitches or else suicide follows (bad ending). She meets her mother, her friend and mother-in-law, a boy and meets a girl.
Day 2
More relaxed, the mother-in-law and Dakota are shopping for the coming week. Among others, the albums of Jean Leloup and an alarm clock. In the evening, she settles for 7 o'clock with an excerpt from her favorite song (the singer's reproachful choice of reply according to her mood (from happy to bitter))."
I confirm this.
Jokes aside I tried to grasp something with google translate.
I'm ESL so my English may not correctly express all I think about it, I hope it's clear enough.
Right now it just seems like a tragedy, I don't see much "porn potential". The general idea of a heroine who could commit suicide or be killed is an interesting one, though.
I would attenuate everything, starting from the title, using some metaphor: "A life of shit" is not captivating if it is not ironic.
The drama should be developed during the story, not imposed as a premise, and I would transform the heroine from the main protagonist into the protagonist's love interest.
Usually the MC is used as a tool to lead the reader through the story and to the other characters, which are usually more interesting than the MC itself.
A depressed/depressed MC isn't alluring, a troubled love interest might be. I'll shorten the game, instead of following this unfortunate girl's whole life I'll focus on that cool idea of heroines possibly dying (suicide or murder).
Time of 1-2 weeks in a predetermined location (a hotel? a remote island? a tourist village in the mountains?) something happens, no one can leave and MC has to fix it. There he finds the MC, probably polite and nice, and then he learns about her past, and she could kill herself or be killed or whatever. Add 1-2 other possible love interests, maybe all exclusive, 3-4 hours to end up successful (even without having any relationship) and so on.
You should not self-insert. It's not inherently bad, we actually enter ourselves in all the characters we create in one way or another, but you'll carry your own biases and lose focus on the story. I bet you have many interesting things you want to say about the topic you have proposed, but you should focus on your readers and think about how to convey compelling stories by talking about what you really want to communicate to them.