VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - Offcuts [v0.3.1] [stencilbits]

Fucking hell, I... kinda don't wanna do this.

This IS a good AVN. I wanna start with that.

The reason I'm rating it 3 stars instead of more is because the writing is infuriating, because it's quite solid, even excellent most of the time... except for the relationships themselves.

It's as if characters fucking forget they did stuff together all the fucking time. MC outright fucks someone, then acts shy and like an absolute fucking retard and like he's never seen this girl before the next day and it makes no sense. It pisses me the fuck off.

And that's a goddamn shame, because when not regarding relationships - actual conversations, plot, the progress and changes the characters experience, all of those ARE well written.

Another point, the art is really good and it's visible that there was love poured into those illustrations.

That's why it pains me to give this rating to an otherwise VERY good AVN, but the writing in the relationships themselves is TRULY infuriating, even more infuriating when in the context of the rest of the game.

If the creator of this ever revisits the project and wants to improve something, I'd recommend vastly improving the writing of the relationships themselves, if that was at least okay, I'd have given this one a 5 out of 5 easily.

One of the best. Its writing is better than a lot of entertainment, I could name like 5 animes that couldn't even compare to how good this is. For now Melissa is best girl, Amy second. Can't wait for kate and alice's ending, hopefully Jane has one too.

A VN with lots of multiple choices and paths that are not clear at all.

Pros:
Decent but short story full of goofy events
H art looks amazing
Soundtrack is ok

Cons:
Normal gameplay features mostly the girls and little else, barely no side characters or environments
It's a chore to unlock the gallery and there's no tips, even the walkthrough is complex
There's no animation whatsoever, only images, so you have to imagine most of the stuff that happens
The endings make no sense whatsoever
Two of the main routes portray the girls completely wrong

Decent game to play for one of the routes. If there's a girl you like you need to use the walkthrough since it's quite hard to get what you want on your own.

The game would have been much better if you could have open relationships and could play it out with every girl in the same playthrough. Amy and Melissa should not be portrayed as 40 years nymphos in their paths, Nina's path is the only one that feels natural.

Review of v.0.3.1.

Note: I wrote most of this as I played the game.

Despite the numerous grammar errors the writing is really good. Each character has a well written personality. Both the wit and character interaction are well done. I loled quite a few times. I actually found myself relating to the MC more than once. Although he is much more embarrassed when it comes to sex jokes than I am.

When it comes to the characters themselves there are some archetypes that I am personally kind of sick of. There are a couple of tsundre girls, another who is timid and embarrassed when it comes to sex despite basically being a senior in high school, another who is extremely shy to the point of afraid to make friends. The only character that feels…Real???...Not over the top???...is the MC. However, I am still enjoying the game since the great character interaction kind of balances out the exaggerated archetypes.

The sex scenes are just still images, but I can forgive that since I’m enjoying the art.

I played Nina’s path first. Nina is one of the tsundre girls. I liked the event that happened with Devon. It was something you don’t see much in VNs and it let you see Nina finally stop being a bitch long enough for you to see how much she actually cares about the MC.

I played Amy’s path next. She is the one who is so timid about sex a lewd joke will make her faint. This kind of personality trait tends to annoy me because they are exaggerated. I know girls who tend to be shy about sex, but never to this absurd degree. I do like Amy. She would just be a better character without this kind of personality flaw. Amy’s path showed me that each girl’s story has a different major event that effects the MC. I liked that. It tells me the dev put a lot of thought and work into their game. I really appreciate that.

I finished with Melissa’s path. She’s the other tsundre, but her attitude stems from her family situation. The event in Melissa’s path and to a lesser degree the events in the other girls paths all seem to stem from Melissa’s family situation. You have issues with the same antagonists in the different paths, but for different reasons. The antagonists in the different paths just happen to have side issues with the MC and the other girls while their main issue is with Melissa. It was kind of cool how they all seemed to intertwine in certain ways.

If there was one con for me, it would be the inability to name the MC. I also find the name of the game rather unique. It has nothing to do with anything in the game as far as I can tell. lol

I’m really looking forward to the Kate, Jane, and Alice routes in future updates.

I will end the review with an excerpt from a conversation between James (Melissa's driver) and the MC:

James: “Oh yeah, sorry. Anyway, he’s a solid one, even if he’s from the commieland.”

MC: “What, do you mean Russia?”

James: “No. California.”

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Legend.

This was the game that started it all for me. It was my first VN and in no manner of the word a let down. The character artwork is unique, it's probably my favorite style by far. And dev has the whole eye for cuteness thing down pack.

What really hooked me too this game was the story. Very story driven VN which makes for a great pull to suck you in. There's some deep down and low scenes that bring your sad emotions into play and there are comical scenes that will literally have you laughing. And I mean literally because even though this is my third or fourth playthrough through every character, I still laugh (yes out loud) at some scenes.

It's just so well written I keep coming back even though the updates have halted for the time being. If a VN can keep me playing it to roll back through the exact same story with no updates, you know it's a damned good one. That being said, I surely am looking forward to more stories! Namely Alice. Please. Please. Please. Please Dev. Please.

Haha! Great game. 5 stars all around.

See, these are the kind of deep, story driven experiences that truly leave a lasting impact throughout this site. I hope to see more of these from time to time. Love the art and the soundtrack- and a fantastic job with the character development. Also, Melissa is best girl.

I played through it, loved the writing, laughed out loud, immediately played two more paths. It's less sex-focused than most of the games here, but it takes the time to build characters, events, and emotional weight. A game I could actually recommend to my irl friends.

This game is excellent. The art is unique and the substance is quality, including the adult content. The one catch to note is the massive amount of time between updates, though this isn't actually a negative for this game. Each update brings the entire arc of a character rather than piecemeal additions, so it's satisfying in its own way. I suspect the time between updates is the reason for the lack of attention this game gets. It deserves a lot more support.

First off, if you want a hyper sexualized game then you're looking in the wrong place.

This is a very story driven VN and while there's quite some amount of sex scenes those are scarce compared with the overall story.

While the end game doesn't change the way we get to ot vary very differently depending on the path you choose.

Every girl so far (of the six there are only 3 who reach the ending) is very unique and recognizable despite all being also very cliché (the tsundere childhood friend, the cold rich high society girl, the kind mentally balanced one,etc).

Every relationship feels natural and satisfying to pursuit.

The music is good and fits every scene very well.

If i had to complain about something it would bw the textures used while very different and overall pleasant sometimes feel jerky and awkward, specially the faces during some of the sex scenes, but nothing really grating to the eyes

I'm giving this five stars because it definitely deserves it, even if it's not exactly my cup of tea. This is a true visual novel with pages upon pages of story and dialogue. It will take you hours to finish a single route of the game. There are sex scenes, and although they are just two or three stills with more narration and dialogue, they are grade A. The art throughout is well-done, even though it's all still images and cinemagraphs.

If you want a quickie or something full of smut, this isn't for you. However, if you desire a good story, give this a try.

This has a very long slow start, but the story is interesting enough to follow along. Actual Porn material is very limited in the beginning chapters, but picks up towards the end. While I didn't understand it on the first play through I like that the developer finished one story then went back to add in the others. I'm not sure what all it will have in the end, but think it is worth exploring if you have some time and aren't just looking for some quick interactive porn.

One of the best VNs I've evere played!
The art is a bit unusual but also extremely expressive and I have come to love it. The writing is great and while the story is a little whack, it's also hilarious.

Based on version 0.3.1

I was a bit hesitant to try this one, because it seems like a standard "guy in school" type story - but the art style kinda intrigued me, so I gave it a go. I'm very glad I did! Sure, it's a "guy in school" story, but it's also mixed with like... an action crime story. For a game with only static pictures it conveys fast-paced action scenes very well through a mix of imagery, sound effects, music choices, and text.

Each of the branch paths are also really engaging - out of the three currently available, I didn't have one I disliked (though I certainly have a favourite). Interestingly, some things that happen in one path can give you insights to things that happen in other paths (such as character backstories and existing relationships). I'm very eager to see the rest of these paths come to fruition.

Also, Alice is a perfect, precious angel and I would kill for her.

I might not belong to the targeted audience of this game. That would explain why the school setting with a MC cockblocked by everybody (even himself), as if sex was some dirty thing, doesn't appeal to me.

In spite of an A+ realization and some interesting plots with the rich girl, the game remains boring, without much originality. The story comes straight from an erotic shonen like Love Hina, with a bit more sex and far fewer interesting plots.

For example, twice the MC has a naked girl at home, twice the "sister-like" girl comes. And the moronic MC has the same teenager reaction with the same outcome. I might have enjoyed that when a was a teenager.

But as a grown ass man, that's when I knew i had to drop the game, to write a spite review here.

Too bad, with a bit of originality, this top notch realization skills would make a very nice and enjoyable game. However, for this to happen, the archetypal childhood-friend-secretly-in-love, arrogant-rich-girl-but-still-sensitive and energetic-cockblocking-stepsis should not be used. Or at least with a MC that wouldn't be a moron...

The writing is top-notchlayful and funny, with interesting plot and twists,memorable characters and complete routes.Just for that it deserves 5 stars! But original 3d art style is nothing to sneeze at either.

Definitely support this if you into good VNs and have some disposable income.

This game for me personally is the most well made on all fronts that I played on this site, great fun writing that is easy and pleasant to read, great diverse characters with different personalities and looks, really unique good looking models and graphic with very well made intimate scenes. Enjoyed that this is a one romance per playthrough with an ending, reminded me of a good old Japanese game True love. Overall a fun game, that actually managed to get me to laugh, and invested in story and characters.

I really didn't expect so much quality and quantity from under 400 mb. Really good vn, absolutely worth. The story is well written and the character are believable, the route change the story quite a bit too.

I don't understand all the 5 star love for this game. It's not terrible, but it's not THAT great. It's average AT BEST.

The Good:
- Renders are nice and the style is pretty unique.
- Each girl is cute in their own way and interesting enough to make you want to pursue them.
- You can fap to this if you want

The Bad:
- The writing.
It's atrocious. The writer for the dialogue has a very poor skill in giving exposition , it takes pages of text to say basically nothing or the most minute, inconsequential detail. Conversations are basic, yet long. I don't mind a lot of text, but I want it to mean something and add to the story or a character's development. I don't think the author does even a mediocre job of that. This whole game is a click fest with little payoff.

- Storyboard and linear flow problems.
The story in general is fine. It's sort of original I guess, but that's not my issue. It's the lack of proper setting.
First, there's no separation between days so not only do you not know what day it is, you don't really know when one day ends and another starts. You have an idea, but there are times where you're just not sure. Some days your day will end at home, some days you end at school. Some days you start at school and it always feels like you're plopped into the middle of a scene, missing some info.
Second, MC is made to go on tangents that are unhelpful at best, and confusing at worst.
As an example that confused and irritated me early on, MC goes to school and is dodging Melissa, meets Alice, Melissa comes in, scares off Alice and you and Melissa chat. Cool, I'm with you so far... Suddenly (with no prior dialogue warning you), MC is back at home. Oh, ok, I guess school is over...after lunch? Wait no, he came home... to randomly start looking through boxes? Ok... sure whatever. He found a phone, oh more story behind it. Fine, I guess. Now he's back at school?! Wtf? Did I just come home to grab a phone, or did I just start a new day? Now he asks this random geek dude to hack the phone. Ok I guess we're on the phone task now, wait no, now Amy is coming over to your house. What??
There is absolutely NO breathing between events or tasks. The way the events are set up give you absolutely no explanation why things are going the way they are. For all the words the author uses, for all the boxes I have to click through, the simplest things go unexplained or leave you to fill in the blanks, which is easy to do if the writing is decent, but it isn't.
There is no linear "flow" to this game. Don't expect it to make sense as far as linear games go.
Now, I know some of you may say "It's easy to pick up," "it doesn't have to make sense," or "it'll all make sense later."
Yeah. I know. But it made this game a much less enjoyable experience than it could have been. The potential was there, but I suppose it didn't rise to my expectations.

In the big scheme of things, it's a nice game. It has a lot going for it, especially as far as art style goes, but to give this game 5 stars is ludicrous. If it were re-written and set up way better, I would upgrade my rating. Until it becomes better written and more engaging, 3 is the absolute best I can give it.

The banter between the MC and the driver are amazing. The renders are crisp, the characters are great. and the story so far is interesting. I have noticed some grammar hiccups, but its not enough to ruin the experience trying to be, and succeeding in being created here. Amazing job. This has just moved into my top 5 favorites here. Keep up the good work, and don't lose the humor angle.

This is one of the best VNs I have ever played.

The unique art style combined with animated shaders make this one of the prettiest games ever, it really stands out from the DAZ crowd and I personally love it.

The choices you make up until a specific scene in the game will lock you into one of 3 current main paths in the game, each focusing on a different girl's story. The same events play out in different and clever ways depending on which girl you get involved with, each has its ups and downs, dramatic moments, funny moments, sexy, romantic... Everything you could want out of a game like this. This is one of the only games that I have made the concious decision to go back and play every route in, and I have to say I was gripped to the very end playing each one of them, I was never bored or burnt out with the world or characters. I honestly think I played nothing but this for 4 or 5 days straight till I finished every route.

Every character has a distinct and unique personality, and their respective arcs are all incredibly well written. It's honestly criminal that this is not up there as one of the premiere games of this genre, and I cannot wait to see what happens in the remaining three story paths