I am writing this review after playing through Chapter 4.
Firstly, Manuela(the mother in law), she quickly became one of my favorite characters in lewd fiction. To be honest she is the reason I am writing this review as she more or less carries the game with her personality and facial expressions.
This game is worth playing just for her.
I'll give the rest of my review numbers so it is easier to digest and I'll start with the Bad.
1) Like many other players before me I wasn't a fan of the prologue characters but the dev is working to design new models so I can't say much about that.
2) I don't like the fat short ugly lecherous step father, he'll win if there is any contest for a worst character poll of this story... Which is somewhat due to the prologue characters not really being in the story all that much.
HOWEVER(!) I would like to point out that I really liked the manipulative corruption angle the Piercing Blonde has towards him. It is unique, logical(not porn logic but actually logical, of course she could manipulate him so easily), and would be hot if the character didn't look like that. Yet I don't think the dev should change his appearance because doing so would diminish his character.
3) There is optional cheating route for the girlfriend, with the Futa character, but choosing to go ahead with the cheating results in the girlfriend pretty much completely okay with the idea.
The dev should add more lines to the girlfriend to clarify that 'It is girl on girl, MC would like that' and then maybe 'She is gorgeous, I can convince MC to give her a try' when she learns that the Futa Character is a futa.
And that is it for the Bad. Onto the Good.
1) Manuela, like I said before, carries the game with her facial expressions.
2) The Futa was hidden well rather than hidden via Porn Logic.
3) The girlfriend jumping onto the bandwagon of 'Oh she has a cute cock' when she learns the Futa is a futa can be explained away as the alcohol talking.
4) The whole idea of getting stuck in a cabin with a hot MILF whom you've to take care of, and you are a buff manly man that can take care of her effortlessly, plus the taboo bit of her being the future mother-in-law of MC... That is HOT.
5) The whole dynamic between the two blondes... It is intriguing. Their connection is mysterious and makes me want to learn more about their past.
6) The Futa character is attractive. She has a mommy-big sis vibes with the girlfriend, but then you add the taboo angle again, it becomes very HOT too, even without the futa bits.
7) The whole idea of Piercing Blonde manipulating and corrupting the step father, as a theme, is great. It is just the appearance of the step father, and his personality, that turns me off. If the players can overlook that then the whole thing is quite hot too.
8) I like the dialogue in general.
It is still early release so there isn't much else to praise the game for but I have some Suggestions to the dev.
1) Keep Manuela hesitant and ashamed, not all the time, the alcohol has a way of lowering inhibitions, but let her feel remorse and guilt for cucking her only child.
Don't let her 'I want to pursue my happiness' decision be a one and done thing but something that repeats. Make her backtrack, make her second guess, and let MC be there as her rock through it all.
The theme of heroic MC and damsel Manuela is hot enough, but keep Manuela's background (as MC's future mother in law) in mind when developing their relationship. Because otherwise her likability will diminish.
Maybe add a few dramatic scenes of conscience strikes where MC has to convince her to continue their relationship, maybe give the excuse of sex being good to increase blood flow and heal her leg faster?
2) The shift from 'I can't cheat on my lover who might be in mortal danger, lost in the cold with my mother' to 'It is girl on girl, it isn't cheating if MC likes it' to 'Oh her cock is so cute!' is a bit fast.
It would be better if the cat and mouse game had continued a bit longer but the girlfriend was drunk so that reaction can be rationed away.
However I think putting a few scenes of panic over what she did, and drama between her and the Futa, would be better. Especially about a morning after pill in the next release.
I would suggest you make her out to be greedy, wanting MC, the Futa, and wanting both at the same time, so she hatches a plan to have all at once.
By seducing the Futa into getting turned on by the idea of a threesome, and brattily thinking she can convince the MC on that.
Idea here is to make her appear devoted to MC, so she isn't labelled as a cheater thus disliked by the players.
The Futa, preferably, should be passive or utterly receptive of the girlfriend's idea of a threesome, so rather than the Futa stealing MC's place and MC becoming a third wheel in this situation, he is the missing piece that would slot right in when he returns.
Or you can go the generic route and turn her into a cheating slut, so MC has justification to sleep with the better model, her mother.
3) The timeline is a bit hard to follow and will likely become harder to follow as the story progresses due to the split attention between MC, Girlfriend, and Piercing Blonde, so it would be great to have something pointing out at which point we are at every turn, like the characters saying 'X many days since the crash/MC and mom suppose to have came here'.
That would also give a proper time progression beyond the relationship dynamic, and might help with the constructing of the story's pacing.
4) There is a slight time skip when MC helps Manuela exercise, to the point of her getting thinner... How long has it been? Logically to lose weight visibly you have to work out for a few days...
There are multiple options for this.
A) Manuela lost weight due to the sickness.
B) Multiple days has passed since the crash.
C) The dev changed the character model and wanted to justify it by saying MC helped Manuela exercise.
If A then that makes sense, and MC wouldn't want to remind her of her sickness, so he would shift the credit to the effort she put into exercising to motivate her.
If B then MC should've thought of going out to put a sign on the road to point to where they are.
If C, then the dev needs to give us the missing exercise scene because I wanted to see MC lovingly helping her, hovering over her, grabbing her mid fall, and Manuela blushing from the close contact and exertion.
The dev should lean into the helpless damsel and heroic main character dynamic more, at every opportunity, while also giving Manuela a personality of her own.
Like getting bothered by MC's hovering, feeling guilty for lashing out at him, deciding to pursue different -more pleasurable- ways to apologize.
Because the 'apology' is merely a paper thin excuse for her to let go of her guilt and enjoy what they both really want. Maybe do this after their alcohol runs out so can't use that to suppress her inhibitions/as an excuse.
5) I came expecting another low quality game but found a gem in the form of Manuela, please keep polishing her rather than cracking what made her shine.
