- Jul 5, 2017
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Hello! I'd like to share a concept of screenplay and a part of a story of a game which I'm trying to make, and also I'm requesting feedback if anyone is interested to read. I've based some concepts on Divina Commedia and some personal reflections.
I've show for some people and they had different opinions about it. But since I've been working on this for almost a month and there's no unanimity of opinions, I decided to share here and look what kind of opinions you would have.
Honestly, I was de-motivated to continue, but at least I could show around here.
Well, saying that, the english isn't my main language, but I did my best to let the script in as best as I could.
PAST FEEDBACK
_Doesn't look to be a porn game, but a book with a small scenes on it. And a bad book for what I heard (
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_The MC is bad/without personality.
_Doesn't look a free-roam game, as I was pretending, but a streamlined novel.
_There isn't any motivation for the player to continue reading/watching.
_The main concept seems confusing for a VN.
For this project, I'm trying to learn Daz3d and Ren'Py and I'm having different levels of success and failure. But my friend
And even if the project doesn't go foward, I had lots of fun on it anyway, and it will work as an experience.
I've show for some people and they had different opinions about it. But since I've been working on this for almost a month and there's no unanimity of opinions, I decided to share here and look what kind of opinions you would have.
Honestly, I was de-motivated to continue, but at least I could show around here.
Well, saying that, the english isn't my main language, but I did my best to let the script in as best as I could.
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PAST FEEDBACK
_Doesn't look to be a porn game, but a book with a small scenes on it. And a bad book for what I heard (
)_The MC is bad/without personality.
_Doesn't look a free-roam game, as I was pretending, but a streamlined novel.
_There isn't any motivation for the player to continue reading/watching.
_The main concept seems confusing for a VN.
For this project, I'm trying to learn Daz3d and Ren'Py and I'm having different levels of success and failure. But my friend
You must be registered to see the links
said that if there's a good team behind the project, he'll be open for being part as a main or support artist.And even if the project doesn't go foward, I had lots of fun on it anyway, and it will work as an experience.