VN - Ren'Py - Rave [Ep.1 v0.1.1] [onemc]

Impressive renders, decent animations, but held back by rough writing. The English is very immersion-breaking at times. Fixing this would go a long way to improving the flow and enjoyability.

Not enough build-up with the girls as they can't wait to jump MC having known him for all of an hour. Needs to slow down a bit. and build a tiny bit of tension first. Also, having to make choices about which girl to be with when you know almost NOTHING about them is not good. I appreciate the realism aspect of that, but it just doesn't feel good in AVN format. At least introduce them more than their appearance before choices have to be made.

AI music: Some meh, some good, and a few great songs. Pro tip for devs: instrumentals are your friends. Much less jarring than vocals.

Overall decent, but the writing needs a serious proofreading pass by a native speaker before it's worth playing again.

Edit:
Dev is very passionate and committed to improving this novel. Also, very receptive to feedback. Many of the issues I brought up, especially regarding the writing and grammar have already been addressed and will be included in the next release. Bumping up the review to 4 stars for now and will adjust in the future as new content is released

There isn't much content yet, but Rave has a pretty solid start overall. Visually, it looks good. The environments and characters are nicely detailed, and the lighting and posing give it a polished feel. You can tell a lot of care went into the presentation. The MCs face felt a bit off to me. It’s not a dealbreaker, but it did stand out compared to how well everything else looked.

What really carried the experience for me was the writing. The dialogue feels natural, the characters are distinct and fairly well-written, and the story kept me interested from start to finish. Overall, it's a good start and I'm looking forward to future updates.

What hits home with me is how much of a real persons all LIs seem. Initial “everybody is into MC” vibe to each have own reasons was breath of fresh air imho. Only thing I only hope that crazy friend will prove to have some depth and won’t be only quote generator.

Not impressed but a really good game The Cg's are top tear except from the mc who is kind of weird, but that's ok/ The story at this point is unclear, meaning it will either be a no story college game where you meet teens and.. you know or there is something else here. I will probably follow up on this since it has the potential

PS..I edited the scripts to play all paths, since I consider having paths so early in a game a mistake

My Honest Review for Episode 1 (Subject to Change with Future Updates)

1. The Story
   At first, the bar scene and overall intro were a bit confusing. Part of that came down to the grammar, and the story felt a little all over the place (maybe that's just me IDK). But once you get a bit deeper into it, it starts to improve.
   
   
2. The Love Interests (LIs)
   I'm going off Moni and Zoe since those were the paths I chose. They’re cute especially Moni with her hair tied up. Zoe… let’s just say she’s a little weird, but still cute. Not as much as Moni, in my opinion.
   
   
3. The Renders
   They were good overall. The only thing that stood out was the MC’s neck it could use some adjustment. Other than that, no complaints.
   
   
4. The Animations
   Honestly, not bad at all. I liked them they were well done, and I have no complaints there.

Overall, there's not a whole lot to go off yet since it's still pretty short. But anyway, my review will likely change over time as more content is released. So, I think 3 stars are fair for now.

For 1st version it feels surprisingly polished.
Music is excellent!

I did not mind only 1 lewd.

Choices with keyboard - omg yes!

It left lots of questions, but it makes sense to me the way it’s told. Hopefully it’s well thought out. We’ll see.

I can't wait for explanation of last scene. Joined Patreon. Keep it up