The bones of a story are there but visually its not, there's too much going on on each page. Too many colours on the text, not enough pictures, too much text on each page. Please try not to have the reader always having to scroll down the page, eyes can glaze over with so much text as you scroll. AVN's are a visual medium so why describe the bedroom in so much detail? Who cares, just show a picture and be brief and cut to the action or get on with the drama. You could have had many more choices in the demo that led to a clip or picture. Less is more is better with HTML games - less text, one picture or clip and a choice. I would point the dev to Apocalyptic World, The Monastery, Becoming Prom Queen and the Lust for Life twins. None of them do anything crazy, just a little story in clear simple text with good visuals on each page with lots of choices. It has potential to be good as more characters get introduced to the house later. I would love to see a mix of female and trans characters in the house as no one seems to do this.
