VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - Revenge or Love [v0.7] [totallyoklad9348]

Renders are excellent, and with regards to the constant shifting dialogue between the characters, I strangely like it, probably won't work with a more complicated storyline but the story is pretty simple so it works for me. The render for Athena is definitely one of my favorites among all the VNs I played.

Review for Version 0.7

The best I can say about this game over all is that it is OK. The renders are good enough, but the story simply kills the experience. IF a person is willing to grind through the beginning of the game, then it does get better. However, the story jumps back and forth between stories that it was a headache to keep up with. There was ZERO transition. I almost stopped playing the game. However, I stuck it out. I gave this game three stars because I believe it has a lot of potential. Maybe the next update will improve my opinion.

Renders are nice and everything but as the other people have mentioned here, right off the bat there are two unparallel branches with no point of convergence, no matter which path you choose you are gonna lose a big chunk of the story not just content.
There are too many characters introduced all at once without any way of getting to know them or get invested in them. You have no idea who is who and what is what.

The dev produces really nice renders but I think the story and execution really needs a revamp.

This was beyond bad. Figuring out the plot is as fun as completing a jigsaw puzzle with missing parts. Everyone keeps jumping into different conversations while not explaining how or when anyone even got to that point. Some of the renders look good though and that's about the only good thing I can say about this.

Bottom line is don't waste your time on this crap. Even if you are a NTR fan (I'm not btw) you're better of looking elsewhere.

Been waiting to try this one out for a while, the renders looked nice. And if that's all you care about, that's all this game has. The render quality is really good. but the posing, angles, and writing are just all over the place. EVERY scene is 2 or 3 people having a conversation, then a complete non sequitur cut to another two people that have nothing to do with the previous group. And I read the description, but there is absolutely build up or warning when you suddenly jump to another story. And there are times when people are talking or being introduced, and the "camera"(because it's all still shots duh) isn't even focused on that person so you don't know who is talking.

So the characters are all completely unrelatable. All one trick ponies that have one thing on their mind. The "MC" just suddenly starts saying "GRR IM ANGRY DADS DEAD" (obviously I'm paraphrasing) And there's no backstory, flavor text, or anything substantial to make me wanna feel anything for anyone in this story. And before you say "But it's a porn game, you're only supposed to feel yourself." There's about 4 TOTAL scenes in this game. (I didn't do ntr route because that doesn't do anything for me) And the scenes are poorly lit, have an abrupt flashing light, so someone with epilepsy had a good time, and most of it is just looking in on a shower scene. Once again, they are well rendered and animated okay. But if this is following the usual "0.x per month" I'm led to believe there's 7 months behind this I'd feel ripped off. Just saying.

All the dialogue is "IM VOICING MY CURRENT THOUGHTS" very abrupt and bad pacing. My advice to the Dev is buy a few months of Skillshare and learn how to write. And make the writing match render quality.


TLDR; Game pretty, words bad.

GOOD A game with many possibilities, I hope the options to choose are not too complicated. What I like least about these games is that they stop being visual novels to become video games, there may be several important choices, but within them it is not good to allow several choices again every so often. The important thing is the history and credibility of your game characters and the different choices should only be a small help to adapt them to the players.

This is a sexless game. Don't expect to find anything of the sort. The dev is trying to win a noble prize in literature.
The one fault is too many characters straight of the bat.
There are NTR choices but as i said no sex.

Although not finished yet, I quite like the premise, but fails to keep my attention focused.

Locked on two separate paths, not connected with each other and switching between paths with every update really takes a person out of the experience.

It would be better if the paths were intertwined with each other or finish one and then the other.

All in all, the story is intriguing and the quality of renders is decent, but I fear it will fail, or at least not be very successful if the story telling isn't focused.

Quite a bit of good here. The renders are top notch. So if that's your primary concern then this game is probably a 5/5. The story is a typical university setup, but it appears there will be quite a few fetishes and choice when it comes to girls so that's a plus. The MC has a unique appearance and isn't the typical creep.

The only drawback is all the side eye renders. I don't know if these characters all suffer from severe neck sprains thus cannot turn their heads, or if they've all gone to the Telenovelas over dramatization acting course. Regardless, it's very distracting. On the bright side, I laughed a lot whenever the story transitioned to another set of people and they were all eyeing each other like they were plotting to murder one another.

All in all a decent game. It's probably really a 3.5/5, but the developer has put in work and the renders are good. I also enjoyed the negative, since I laughed a lot, so I'm actually rating the game up to a 4 due to that.

Most of the ppl here seem to have advanced capabilities to keep up with everything flying around in the plot.....

I always hate giving critical reviews but my brain's becoming just as scrambled as the game itself. There are a grand total of zero transitions and explanations with regards to who all the different characters are and what the overall plot is. I tried hard to understand the gist but my brain got way too tired trying to keep up after about 5 min.

We're just being violently ragdolled to different points in time. One second we're on a couch, next we're at school, then at a dorm room, then back to the house, then dorm room, and so on and so forth. Suffering from enough motion sickness that it might make me stop playing for a little while...

Dev spent way too much time trying to introduce as much intrigue and differing characters as possible that he forgot he was making a game. He's instead just created a pile of different ideas and plopped them all together.

Only reason for the additional star is because of the solid renders. Otherwise, the script needs a HEAVY revamp

You jump around with no narrative or explaination.
Learn to tell a story. Focus. These things might help. It looks good. But character motivations. Or history might help. ESPECIALLY for a demo where you're supposed to be intro'ing people to your game.

Well, I know it is just the first version and it's early, but I will probably not be playing this after this and frankly, this should be only 3 stars, but the dev has really put a lot of work into this .

Let me just say, the quality of the renders are really well done. The Dev has put a ton of work into this and it shows. Really nice models and settings. Everything seems really well thought out and again, it is easy to see how much work has gone into this.

There are, IMO, several issues.

Scenes:
What is with all the sideways and angled camera angles? It was distracting and I found myself turning my head to have to look and appreciate the images. I guess it's a style choice like JJ Abrams Lens Flares or something, and I think I would have been okay with a little of it, but there is way too much and it took me out of the story.

Models:
As I mentioned, the render quality is top notch,. The problem I have is with the scene blocking. Everyone's face is turned from the camera at a sharp angle. And I mean Everyone. It's weird. Plus, look at their eyes. All of them are looking at things out of the corners of their eyes. 90% of the scenes are that way. It's crazy distracting and it makes it seem like they all have something to hide.

MC
Can't stand him. What a brooding little bitch.

Anyway, the dev is clearly talented and they have certainly set themselves up for a lot of work. The proposed detail and multifaceted paths are going to be challenging but if they can pull it off, it should be really great.

I really love the concept and I hope this continues to grow and improve as the project progresses.

EDIT: Update for Version .06
The dev really went all in on the sideways looks and odd scene blocking. I guess it's a style they want to stick with, but nothing to see here. Knocking this down from 4 stars to 3.

Won't spoil to much :

-Integrated walkthrough, so you know what to choose and not make a mistake, big like from me

-Lot of girls, milfs as well, big big like

-Story is interesting and reminds me of some tv show that i watched

-Renders and characters, judge for yourself and play the game. Definitly recomend you to try. From my part it's good

For now i'm giving 4/5 for a very good opening and demo