Update 3
Great world building, great characters. Can tell the writer knows a lot about this stuff (I liked the whole pulse reading thing from firearms, its one of those sci fi things that just borders on reality and seems feasible)
Just 1 point to improve on for now;
The consistency of in person and message interactions:
- I love the concept of messaging, as it feels like that is something that would definitely happen in real life. However, sometimes the messages with the crewmates seem a bit...out of character for most, it feels like they are cordial in person (which is absolutely fine), yet on messages the characters are suddenly sending selfies, emojis, and being informal with the commander.
- Imo, the messages could be more formal initially. I mean the MC is the commander, and he is also a stranger. So messages from his crewmates (who are also his subordinates) should feel cordial and formal. This imo would add more to the realism, and will make any future sexual encounters more fruitful and meaningful.