VN - Ren'Py - Shades of the Past [v0.5] [Booty Call Studios]

The first thing i question is why bother with the orphanage back story?, the MC isn't mad about it as there is apparently no one to blame and it hasn't changed the way MC views his family, there is literally nothing that couldn't have been explained without it.

The text obviously needs work but if the creator is not english then you should just be thankful it is even badly translated and I'm sure going forward it will get better.

The art is good for a first game, story wise there is not much to say as the current content is still short.

Overall its an ok start and as it develops I'm sure the quality will improve.

Story 2/5 (too early to tell)
Art 2/5 (ok )
Sex 2/5 (ok)
Fetishes N/A (only one so far)
Choices N/A (none yet)
Characters 2/5 (basically just introductions)

Pretty bad overall.

Character models and textures are terrible, all faces look very dated.

Story isn't anything to write home about, you have seen it before and it's very basic.

The writing is the worst part of the game. It incoherent at best and straight out shit at worst. The language use is so bad it's almost funny. The vocabulary use is tiny and it's pretty clear that the writer can't grasp basic English grammar.

At least it's short. (so far)

The writing is terrible, not just the grammatical errors or the Spanglish, but the conversations and thoughts of the characters are simply bad all in all and doesn't sound like they are supposed to be things actual people say/think. More like what a horny 14yo boy wishes girls around him was thinking or talking about. He doesn't even want to think of the characters as people seeing as you are not even made aware of the name of your family, they are just mother, sister and aunty, I shut it down after the aunts 2nd visit so I don't know if you get to know their names at some point but I probably won't touch this again to find out.

(Review of v0.2)

The storyline is perfectly forgettable and the writing itself is bad enough that I started skipping almost from the beginning as it's clearly just an excuse to fill in the blanks. The models aren't exactly great, in fact some renders show a deformed body. I'm all for believable, everyday characters instead of seeing top models the whole time, but these come out as vulgar and not exactly erotic except for the forced poses to show pussies and panties at every occasion, which again make them look vulgar.

Not exactly a good start.