VN - Ren'Py - Short Dark Stories [v0.7.0] [It's Not Real]

Obviously, NTR fight against a lot of people who don't like this kind of games, and i respect that.
But iam on the other team, the ones who likes a lot this kind of games.

And this one is great, not to long, (thanks to that title ) and pretty enjoyable.

Heavy NTR that is very exciting and i would like to see other stories like this get a release.

Thanks to Dev !

The title is misleading, there's only one story here and it's not short and doesn't seem to be finished yet.
The story at first looks interesting, two couples, one older and experienced, the other young and inexperienced, their relationship. But it seems to me that everything develops too linearly, all four immediately accept their roles and then act according to their position in this pyramid of dominance. I think there should be drama here, but there just isn't. Especially annoying is the young guy and how submissive and spineless he is.
Scenes are the strong point of this visual novel. I don't like female domination but the first scene between the girl and the boy where she establishes a relationship was pretty hot. I'd especially like to note that unlike most other games with AI art, the developer tries to show both characters in a sex scene rather than the usual girl and dick or a man's body part without a face. This is a problem for AI, interaction of two consistent characters and it is clear that the developer has put a lot of effort to show full scenes. That's what I liked the most here and what makes this game stand out. But the problem here is that sometimes you lose consistency in the portrayal of the characters.
Maybe it's just me but I found it too wordy, everything is explained in too much detail, it's just annoying and I started skipping the text towards the end. Some of the scenes and conversations are going on too long.

This a 14years old power fantasy fanfic.

There isn't a single redeeming quality to it.
The narration is terrible, the quality is terrible, and the power trip tropes for teenager in heat are all checked.

Excellent VN, super exciting. Without excessive intro and background and directly to the fun part!
Nice drawing and good length of sentence.
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Very good ratio of number of words and story progressing.
Maybe a little too short and with little updates but compensate with strenght. A Great Start.

A comic, this is, a comic with a ridiculous story, the size of the 4 characters are horribly disproportionate, 2 giants and two dwarfs, not only the genital shape, but a ridiculous proportional scale. No excitement in the story, a simple dominating couple against two passive useless boys.

I love the idea for the first story, but the execution isn't great.

So what's currently here?
Like the title says there will be multiple short stories, but right now there is only one. More specifically, there is only the beginning of the first story, with a playtime of around 5 minutes. And sadly not all the preview images are actually in the game yet.

The good:
The idea for the story is nice. A young, innocent and naive couple are going on their first vacation together, where they are corrupted by an older more experienced couple. I also like the models for the young boy and girl.

The bad:
The dev doesn't seem very proficient in storywriting and as a result both the story and the dialogue are very incoherent. Writing a short story doesn't mean you should just skip the introduction and not give the characters any personality. The conversation with the older couple is very strange, but even though the young couple is supposed to be shy and insecure they don't seem bothered by it at all.

The artwork is decent but it also has some inconsistencies. The older couple seems to have a different art style than the young couple, and the young boy has a different appearance during some of the bed scenes. It often feels like the story was written based on the images instead of the other way around.