Ren'Py - Abandoned - Sorrow [v0.96.2f] [LustFight]

Pros:
Pretty things.

Cons:
Unnatural dialogue, narration and grammar.
The story is hard to follow.
Sandbox map confused me.
The sex scenes look like one of those 5 second ads you'll see on pornhub while you're waiting for your video to play. There's no, fourplay, teasing, sensual kissing or anything, one second you're talking and the next you're fucking someone and that's sums it up. Sad, because it looks good it's just not well put together.

This game is just awful.

The translation is so bad that I can't fully understand what's going on at any point in the story. I'm fine playing games with poor translation, but not to the point that I can't understand anything at all.

Well, This is Most Poorly Arranged Game Like Ever ?

Well Dont Get me wrong Premise is great but confusion and Language problems are bigger than game and well lets just say game has bigger issues than bunch of grammar issues

also game having lots of anime problem i think its something going with the dev and game is a GIGANTIC MESS for what is otherwise could be great game but i'm not going to play ever when game quickly ended like click this choice then Goddess like character comes to you and kills you like you not going to play this game and did i mention game's disarrentment ? no i tell you game is a gigantic mess otherwise great potential and play time its great when will be fixed otherwise do not waste your time game's gigantic mess than daily manic bipolar patentients.
dear god i dont want to even write game's faults to just shoot dev in the face but such a mess like i'm not playing i'll quit.

I feel like this is an ambitious project taken on by the dev, who's doing this for the first time. So, I understand. The plot makes sense in their mind, since they already know the series of events that are going to happen.

So, what we get is a disjointed mess of a story with dialogues that sound like a weeb's fanfic. However, I would suggest the dev to get a better translator or if they are English speakers to learn a bit more about storycraft while they polish their model animation or model making skills. They can always reboot the story when they are confident. This way they can reatin their players as well as get some breathing time.

Just my two cents. If my criticisms seem harsh, then know it comes from a place of love. I too, write super edgy-characters and unpolished backgrounds and weeaboo dialogues. I will change my review as quality improves.

Good stuff
1) Some nice looking women.
2) Fresh creative story.

Meh stuff
1) Sex scenes are below average, but they got potential. The writing ain't hot enough and it'd be better if the protags cock was thicker.
2) Multiple very different routes. Too ambitious?

Bad stuff
1) Writing and translation needs improvement. The story jumps all over the place and it's difficult to understand the intent and logic behind characters actions. Was Google translate used? "Genetic water and pencils entering me." That sounds ominous af.
2) MC has a man bun.

May adjust rating if quality improves.

3 solely for the modles (modles are 5 star) and whatever I missed, which is most of the game.
No strong hook. I guess there was underboob but that wasn't strong enough. infact it probably weakened the the opening scene by detracting from the situation ( the stabbing) and shifting the focus to her physical appearance.
There is alot of text right off the bat in this game, I didnt read it, I ALWAYS read the text normally. The main issue with this game from my understanding is that its philosophical or trying to be, either its just not that interesting or the translation job didn't do it justice, which is understandable since you need to word philosophy well for it to be interesting and make any sense.

Game version: 0.7

I've already tried this game on version 0.3 and while it got more content, it still lacks a good or appealing story. Even worse, it's PURE CHAOS! I didn't understand most of the story, because it just jumps from one scene to the next and I'm missing the idea of the plot completely.
The scenes are nice, but the story telling failed hard.
P.S.: There is too much text and too few scenes, too.

Nonsense story, no continuality, everything just randomly skips. I still have no idea what is going on. Just going back and forth with no explanation and also terrible grammar. Not a single thing about this "game" was enjoyable and everything was just half-done.

[v0.6]
So far I find this game very promising. It is rather immersive and the story is very good so far (of course it is easier to start a weird mystic supernatural story well then to continue and finish well, but we will see).
The English Translation could be better, but if you can get over that then the writing is good. Characters (LIs and MC) are interesting. Models and renders and music is fine.

[update: v0.9]
I am not very happy how the game progresses; psychedelic and confusing story can be fine but things get a bit too unclear for my taste; and due to the nonlinear and weird branching it is also completely unclear where to look for new contents in a new update and things get for me increasingly indigestible...

I tend not to write reviews, due to my busy schedule. However, I'll leave this here because of the potential I see in this game.

Please fix the English translation! While trying to read the story I noticed the grammar was all over the place. I would suggest getting a better translator or have someone help you with the English parts, because it really throws off the story-telling aspect. The reader should not have to auto correct almost every sentence in their head, it takes away from the immersion of the story.

Love the animations, I know they'll only get better from here. They're near perfection.

My last point has to do with the writing. A lot of the women come off as children, their way of talking is terribly childish. And the small talk is much worse. I know adults laugh and giggle but is it really necessary for every girl to go "hihi" or "hehe", while also lacking any personality. The girls all need their own personality, which includes the way they speak. I should not be able to tell one person wrote every character. If you need to take some time to watch how real people interact with each other, do it! Also pay attention to how people mannerisms change (tv shows can help with this as well) while speaking with the same/opposite sex. You're selling a story with sex, not a porno with crappy dialog, so make the reader believe in the goal the main character is setting out for, while also making them feel something for each character(love, hate, envy, bored) whatever the case may be. Ask for help if you need it, but this could be something really great. Keep up the great work!

This is a delightfully different experience, for those open to something other than the usual fap-fare.

You find yourself in purgatory, unable to clearly remember your death or much of your life. You quickly discover it to be a confusing and dangerous place, and it may be broken as well. On the plus side, the other residents are mostly hot women....

Armed with your super-powers of save-point and roll-back, you try to advance far-enough to acquire allies and figure out what the hell is going on.

There isn’t a huge amount of content yet--maybe an evening or two’s worth of play--and the English translation isn’t great, but I thoroughly enjoyed the game. I give it four stars for now, but I think it has the potential to make five.

Wow, what a mindbender. First of all, you should know that this game is actually really different from most games on this site in both positive and negative ways. This is a narrative-centric game but it's also extremely confusing. Things don't seem to happen in any form of intuitive order and it appears that that's what the game developer is going for. On the positive side, there are quite a few hot female characters and there are a few sex scenes already. Quite a bit of content has been made considering how new the game is, but I don't necessarily know if this game is the one for me. I'm giving it 5 stars primarily because of how much effort has clearly been put into the game and also to support a developer who is trying to really think outside of the box/push the envelope.

This game is really unique...
...and it doesnt really fit right into this site however.
Because there's a very convoluted story going on, while its not necessarily a bad thing, unless you care about story so much, game doesnt let you fap comfortably even when there's a sex scene going on. Im here long enough to know that folks in this site prioritize porn over story. There seems to be deep thinking required in order to understand it as well.

My reasoning to give it a 4 star is i actually wanted to give 5 because from music to story and graphics quality, everything seemed top tier, but i saw quality dropping a lot especially in graphics in latest update, idk why, hence i dropped it to 4.