VN - Ren'Py - Suburban Sin [v0.0.45] [Marshall 77]

200 clicks in and you've seen only cock. 300 clicks in and you finally get to make a decision....not a game. Just a click fest. Premise is great, art is decent, but good lord its a slog fest of clicks. A visual novel for sure.

okay milf game. let's give it a chance. people who gives a low rating because of a tag they don't want but don't filter is is weird. this has a lot of improvements but it's okay for the version. the creator speaks with the users as well so it's a good sign

Review updated for v 0.45

More added but not much was actually improved. Changes noted below.
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Version reviewed 0.1

A very poorly written incest game. Not much happens in this preview but from what I have seen this doesn't look very promising.

Pros:

1- Some nice renders.

2- A few of the females are cute.

3- Might appeal to fans of incest and MILF's


Cons:

1- The mother seduces her son during the opening scene. Why? Unless you are here just to fap, this makes zero sense as far as story development is concerned.

2- The dialogue is simply awful. I'm not even sure this was a machine translation as there were way too many errors. Why release a game to the public in such a bad state? This is the primary reason why I give it only one star.

3- Overall, the renders were very plain.

4- There was one scene where he acknowledges being kissed by a girl but you don't even see the render showing the kiss. I had to go back and make sure I didn't miss anything. Fixed. The dev must have read this and added a render of them kissing. Yay!

5- There was no option to change the opacity of the dialogue box making it hard to see some of the renders. Also, the dev used black text over a white text box, making it worse.. I would suggest going back to the traditional white text over a black box with an option to change the opacity.

Final Thoughts-

For a first attempt the renders were rather plain but passable. The main issue, as is the case with most VN's, is the writing. The story is not well thought out and the number of dialogue and grammatical errors is cringe worthy.

If the dev is serious about making AVN's he/ she should seek help with the story writing and especially the proof reading. IMO, the game could be salvaged if it is re-written.

Good luck.

For a Dev's "Second AVN" this is still a complete mess. The introduction is missing an image. The AVN has no choices and is kinetic through its first release. Dev changed name of AVN but left old name on loading screen. Dev basicly recycled old AVN into new AVN it appears.

Cannot change MC's name.

School sequence doesn't even have a some time later or transitions. Grammar is missing Capitalization and punctuation. Characters are sloppily introduced.

This is a lazy slop of an AVN. its not ready for even a technical demo IMO. DEV needs to do some serious Quality Control or they will never make any money.