VN - Ren'Py - Suburban Sin [v0.4] [Marshall 77]

okay milf game. let's give it a chance. people who gives a low rating because of a tag they don't want but don't filter is is weird. this has a lot of improvements but it's okay for the version. the creator speaks with the users as well so it's a good sign

Version reviewed 0.1

A very short, poorly written incest game. Not much happens in this preview but from what I have seen this doesn't look very promising.

Pros:

1- A handful of nice renders.

2- One of the females was cute.


Cons:

1- Ridiculous story. The MC is lusting after his mom during the very first scene and what's even worse is that she's teasing him, wearing see through lingerie while she eats breakfast. Come on, where's the build up?

2- The dialogue was simply awful. I'm not even sure this was a machine translation as there were way too many errors. Why release a game to the public in such a bad state?

3- The majority of the renders were very plain.

4- There was one scene where he acknowledges being kissed by a girl but you don't even see the render showing the kiss. I had to go back and make sure I didn't miss anything.

Final Thoughts-

For a first attempt the renders were good enough, just a bit boring. The main issue, as is the case with most VN's, is the writing. It is really poor and the awful dialogue makes it even more unbearable.

If the dev is serious about making AVN's he/ she should seek help with the story and the proof reading.

For a Dev's "Second AVN" this is still a complete mess. The introduction is missing an image. The AVN has no choices and is kinetic through its first release. Dev changed name of AVN but left old name on loading screen. Dev basicly recycled old AVN into new AVN it appears.

Cannot change MC's name.

School sequence doesn't even have a some time later or transitions. Grammar is missing Capitalization and punctuation. Characters are sloppily introduced.

This is a lazy slop of an AVN. its not ready for even a technical demo IMO. DEV needs to do some serious Quality Control or they will never make any money.