Since this game is text only I'll not use the lack of art as an argument to give it a bad rating.
What I like about this game:
- Premise
- Sprites
- Character diversity
- General idea
What can be improved:
- The writing is incredibly basic. It's blatantly obvious that English is not the dev's first language.
- The formatting is horrible. It's so difficult and boring to read.
- Some buildings are extremely basic and without text you wouldn't even recognize them as such.
- 100% scripted theme park game. Go there - go there - go there. It's boring. Why choose RPG Maker as your engine? Could have used Renpy, which would have done wonders for your writing possibilities. It's a stupid decision since the battles are so awful; nobody cares about them anyway.
- MC is overall unlikeable and comically stupid. It's such a waste to have such an MC. You won't even root for him because he's such a narcissistic, cheating, insecure loser; it ruins the whole idea of the game. This isn't a Femdom game you expect; this is a game for people who are SADISTIC and want to punish this retarded MC. If you are submissive this isn't for you.
- Usually, you mostly hear thoughts and have to actually think of scene descriptions. The terrible writing style uses the character's thoughts to actually tell you what's happening. It reads extremely badly, and combined with rare and shallow character texts, it doesn't work. The writing itself is relatively bland; the characters are extremely shallow and nonsensically stupid. Every situation is like a slow hook that takes 30 seconds to execute, and anyone with half a brain could avoid it. It's partially so stupid that it's not tolerable. Since the scenes nearly completely rely on this writing, it just doesn't work at all. It's worse than a poorly written fanfic... why? Because it's an original story, and you instantly get lost in the cringe, and since the text is practically your game, you can't even skip because you'd be essentially skipping the game. The worst scene is, without a doubt, the scene with the fan club president because you can't rely on something crazy like piss drinking to distract from the writing.
What I like about this game:
- Premise
- Sprites
- Character diversity
- General idea
What can be improved:
- The writing is incredibly basic. It's blatantly obvious that English is not the dev's first language.
- The formatting is horrible. It's so difficult and boring to read.
- Some buildings are extremely basic and without text you wouldn't even recognize them as such.
- 100% scripted theme park game. Go there - go there - go there. It's boring. Why choose RPG Maker as your engine? Could have used Renpy, which would have done wonders for your writing possibilities. It's a stupid decision since the battles are so awful; nobody cares about them anyway.
- MC is overall unlikeable and comically stupid. It's such a waste to have such an MC. You won't even root for him because he's such a narcissistic, cheating, insecure loser; it ruins the whole idea of the game. This isn't a Femdom game you expect; this is a game for people who are SADISTIC and want to punish this retarded MC. If you are submissive this isn't for you.
- Usually, you mostly hear thoughts and have to actually think of scene descriptions. The terrible writing style uses the character's thoughts to actually tell you what's happening. It reads extremely badly, and combined with rare and shallow character texts, it doesn't work. The writing itself is relatively bland; the characters are extremely shallow and nonsensically stupid. Every situation is like a slow hook that takes 30 seconds to execute, and anyone with half a brain could avoid it. It's partially so stupid that it's not tolerable. Since the scenes nearly completely rely on this writing, it just doesn't work at all. It's worse than a poorly written fanfic... why? Because it's an original story, and you instantly get lost in the cringe, and since the text is practically your game, you can't even skip because you'd be essentially skipping the game. The worst scene is, without a doubt, the scene with the fan club president because you can't rely on something crazy like piss drinking to distract from the writing.