VN - Ren'Py - Sweet Home Magic [v0.2a] [FictionStories]

Harem games that include NTR content are basically just cuckold games:
In the romance route (slow-burn type), the heroine pretends to be a pure and holy nun (the protagonist can't creampie her, can't force her, can't fuck her hard—basically, this isn't allowed, that isn't allowed).
In the NTR route, the heroine switches on her slut mode (allowing other men to creampie her, abuse her, humiliate her). It's always this same clichéd, cookie-cutter script.
Who would like this pretend-pure-nun romance character? Once you've played the NTR route, and then go back to the harem route, you'll find that woman pretending to be a pure nun absolutely disgusting.

Optional NTR harem games? There was never any choice to begin with—once NTR content is included, it's decided: your romance character will become even more slutty and submissive in the NTR route.

Disappointing game with pretty graphics.

The characters are cliche and have room temperature iq, the writing is atrocious, story sleep inducing and it is actually a chore to finish playing it. Not even great tits could keep my interest, tahts how bad it is. And dont get me started on the mc who looks and acts like an autistic kid, theres no doubt that he will be the one looking from the corner because thats how he is written, awful protagonist for any kind of harem/romance game.

tldr

renders 4/5
characters 1/5
plot/writing/dialogs 1/5
No sound. Boring and lazy all around

VERSION: v0.2a
SUMMARY: Impressive on most fronts, but not much here right now.
RATINGS: (out of 5): ⭐⭐⭐

NOTE: The following categories and scoring method are my own criteria and may require more context. Additionally, scoring is based on the state, and what is in the current version and not what may or may not be introduced at a later point.

1. Character (Model) Visuals......... : ⭐⭐⭐⭐
2. General (World) Visuals........... : ⭐⭐⭐⭐
3. Animation Quality................. : ⭐
4. Character Personality(Persona).... : ⭐⭐⭐⭐
5. Story & Dialogue.................. : ⭐⭐⭐⭐
6. Writing & Grammar................. : ⭐⭐⭐⭐
7. UX/UI, Game Type & Mechanics.......: ⭐⭐
8. Playtime & Pacing..................: ⭐⭐
9. Music & Sounds.....................: ⭐
10. Adult Content & Fetishes.......... : ⭐

Average: X of 50 possible points giving a X% rating i.e. X stars.

PROS: - See my opinions section for details.

1. Plot and general story are actually fairly interesting and intriguing. There is a bit of everything, some drama, suspense, thriller even horror aspects and more that are strung together well.
2. Dialogue is good, written and structured well. The dialogue itself is also thoughtful and not just rubbish thrown together, actually has context, logic and natural.
3. LI's are very well designed, the MILF is maybe a little bit on the bimbo side but its still pretty good. Characters are not OVERLY beautiful, which makes it a bit more realistic.

CONS: - See my opinions section for details.

1. UI/UX sadly do not have opacity setting to remove the dialogue box which is in the way.
2. No sounds of any kind are very disappointing, especially considering you have so many elements going to this AVN that can be emphasized with good audio.
3. Jarring with how the player is just dropped into the "world" of the MC, but not a bad thing per say, just that the player will be playing catch-up initially, this may not even be a CON but a PRO as it adds to the intrigue of the plot and what is going on with the MC.
4. MC is tiny, not sure why the dev made the MC so small, he is short, very short, the milf is 2x his size in height and width, her daughter is also 1.5 times larger/taller than the MC. Why did the developer choose to make him like this?
5. Slow build up and little to no content worth mentioning, save the regular normal, everyday dialogue, which just slows the AVN down even more. No lewd content at all either, while the story is interesting and writing is good, its very tame.
6. No animation of any kind, this is probably compounded by the fact that there are no lewd scenes that usually have animations.

OPINIONS, SUGGESTIONS & FINAL REMARKS:

NOTE: The following remarks are my personal opinions and thoughts, which may provide more context and could be useful to the developer. (Read them or don't)

• While not written that way, I am sure there was some degree of thought put into creating an incest game. More often than not these stories where a random young man (MC) end up or are living with a (random) family make little to no sense to me. This is not considered very normal, unless the MC was adopted, a student or person letting a room in a house. So I would say that it could have been better if the developer created the option to set the relationship at the start or perhaps someone will add a patch. While not for all, I just get this feeling this AVN had incest in mind...but could be wrong?
• The MC being so small makes me wonder about the motivations of the developer, was he designed small so that he can look younger? Like a child, underage? He looks like he could be 15? Most young men have there growth spurt around 15/16 yo and then they put out to 90% of their eventual size, so whats with the MC or is he just a small short guy? Bit disappointing honestly, not that he needs to be a beefcake, but really he could at least have looked the daughter in the eye...

TLDR:

I am still forming my opinion on this AVN, but off the bat it actually is good, I like the ideas, the look, the characters and the writing is very good. Slow though with nothing to show for it right now and at the pace its going, I doubt there would be much anytime soon.

Pretty impressive start! Even for a first version, it looks really good. If you are looking for a MILF, you will get one of the best out there. No relevant cons so far, only Pros: renders, narrative (altough it just started), pacing (which could be a problem, but some hints and expressions here say otherwise).

Kinda hard to rate right now since there's little content and there's I think only one choice total, but what is here is really good. I'm digging the whole portal/other realmish thing. One thing I really have to credit here is the graphics and artstyle. The girls look very, very good but I also really like the art for the portal realm stuff. It looks like it's a blend of realism mixed with fantasy. I thought the leprechaun knight looked really really good. The writing is also pretty decent, but it's hard to know how good since there's not too much going on right now. Overall, a really strong start, looking forward to more.

I absolutely love the way that milf is made to interact with everything. The glances of other man, the way she represents herself (not too slutty, but a innocent and lovely "landlady"). 10/10 did way better than other games I've played (and I played probably 90 % of this type games).

Other characters are amazing too, but it's not what I'm interested the most.

I hope developer will explore more ideas with some kind of innocent flirting with other males than MC, and it's for him to decide if he do some NTR, but I think it would be amazing route (few routes for different folks , I would be interested in both). Also, it would get a lot of more exposure for this project.

There is a lot of potential to do it better than "AAA" games on this site. Just don't make it too fast with whoring and don't ruin it . I'll subscribe and don't forget to interact with followers, create a discord!

This is the type of games that I really like and it really hits what I want. REally good so far and hopefully it keeps up.
For a first draft, this game looks very promising.
Renders are beautiful, especially the female characters and notably Rachel who is one of the most gorgeous woman.

So far amazing! Focus on the story because it has suspense in it, make me wanna know more about the background story. Character models looks really well done! Keep up the good work and please don't abandon this like other dev's do!

The pacing is really decent, Gfx are very nicely done, the writing is decent and hope to see it gets frequent updates and not a lot of characters so thats a good point because too many characters and the game just feels lackster , this looks very promising.

Good luck to the dev, think you have a decent game.

0.1v

love it so far the story and especially the renders are fantastic not many games as such great renders like this one. realistic look and also looking great.
waiting for more keep up the excellent work dev

Renders look fine, no music or sound yet.

The story is filled with uncertainty and looks a bit unfinished. Dialogue switches in tone for the MC as if he is an extreme gen-z reject that suddenly lapses into normal interaction patterns back and forth.

MC is stated to be 18, but appears to be a dwarf with progeria. He simply looks like a 12 year old.. no way around it. Gives off too many creepy vibes.

The main fetish appears to be MILF... and the MILFs appear a bit worn out and around mid fortyish in age. Not much interaction nor interest is shown towards any of the other female characters other than older MILFs.

If anyone has a liking for middle aged MILFs and an MC that jumps from a gen-z poser identity to that of a relatively regular boy that appears to be 12.. so be it, but this one is not my cup of tea. I will leave it at average score for now as there is room for change and improvement.

In the future, let's hope that the story may actually go somewhere with more diverse LI interests that may be developed. The MC could age a few years visually and begin to stabilize in personality and dialogue without all the slang., that would help immensely.

0.1a Review

Great start.

The models and renders are seriously fantastic, and the story has enough hooks to keep me interested in where it's going.

Keep up the good work dev! Very excited to see what's coming next!

Renders:

Definitely carrying this story and the only highlight of the project to me.

Story:

The MC is a baby-faced midget with apparently a big dick and some kind of powers. He appears to have some kind of amnesia(Shocker!) about what happened to him. It looks as if he were in some kind of hospital for treatment before being released to his Landlady.

He's trying to come off as this Zen like person that's disciplined but it's just comical to watch. He then resorts to the usual peeking, spying on his "Landlady" within the first night. Just the usual rehashed garbage with a element of magic added to it. It's really heard to take this MC serious. Also nearly every model looks like they should try out for the WNBA as they all tower over him.

Characters:

Giants and a midget. Typical delulu Milf that's getting creeped on by everyone and is too stupid to release it. Typical pervy MC. Typical liberated side Milf/friend that's going to show the delulu, dimwitted Milf how to let it all hang out. Just more of the same.

Overall:

I'm good. Unless... the MC hits puberty, the story gets better and the MC doesn't creep on everyone he sees which I don't see happening. Best of luck to the Dev.

Lots of potential, reminds me of True Bond, let's hope it goes smoothly. I like the slow burn, I love the mother's physique, and hopefully the protagonist has a nice member for them, with lots of erotic scenes like erections under clothes or sheets, etc.

For a first draft, this game looks very promising.
Renders are beautiful, especially the female characters and notably Rachel who is one of the most beautiful MILFs I've seen in a game. The story also looks exciting, and I can't wait to see what happens next.
Keep up the good work, developer.