Team Work [MandoLogica]: Chapter 01~15
Pros
Cons
In summary, the story could have been well portrayed with proper more generic social type rather than a cheap whore-ness. From genre description sounds like scope for relatives (Auntie) in the further chapters. Hope the future chapters will be good.
Pros
- An excellent incest story theme.
- Mom Caroline’s love affair with her son is better expressed after chapter 12 onwards.
Cons
- Missing naturality and more of makeup story. Encouraging/entertaining the sex for money is a bad portrait of story; that part of it even though it is common in life but for story/drama/movie it is natural to expect heroism/some superpower/some fictional aspects helping for better life; That part of life no one will enjoy the naturality/the sufferings. Mom Caroline willing to have sex with a stranger Henry for the sake of money is the biggest flaw; that too openly declaring to her husband Steven and adult/grown up children (Son Martin and daughter Emma).
- MC involving with neighbor lady Alesha who is forced for live sex show being filmed and MC is supporting for such live sex filming are all kind of utter nonsense.
- No emphasis or poor expressions of partial and full nudity.
- Poor expression of boob size and rigidity/erectness between old and young. For example, the Alesha’s boobs are well expressed compared to MC’s sister Emma’s. Over all, the best fit/beautiful/attractive female figure is Alesha.
- MC’s picturization is not very attractive, at least the introduction with the funny small shirt is ridiculous – no justification for such scenario.
- Lack of Seductiveness.
- Lack of differentiation of texts for normal dialogues vs the whispering/secret dialogues
In summary, the story could have been well portrayed with proper more generic social type rather than a cheap whore-ness. From genre description sounds like scope for relatives (Auntie) in the further chapters. Hope the future chapters will be good.
