Fun, short story about "That Night in College"...
The major negatives I have about this one are personal preferences, so I'll generally leave those out.
+ the story is upfront, content is not avoidable, so don't ask and don't get upset. You'll only have yourself to blame for seeing something you don't want to...
+ story is succinct, but detailed enough to understand the characters.
++ it's refreshing to see a "healthy" relationship depicted in these types of stories with a "supportive" gf for the mc.
+ not an art critic, but it's "easy on the eyes", so good enough.
+ fairly "realistic" looking characters for a porn fantasy game. "Normal" folks aren't so "perfect" looking...lol
++ Elizabeth, hot, but not just talking about the looks (one or two too many random tattoos for my taste, the quote on the wrist. Most are really hot though, I don't know what it is about script on the torso...
). She's supportive, willing to indulge in a fantasy, but genuinely concerned about Steven's mental well being... She's clearly not into it just for herself, it's rare in these types of stories...lol
- objectively, while the characters' ages aren't really mentioned, typical "juniors" in college are in their early 20s. I don't buy the two MCs are in their early 20s... Not a big deal to me, they could be mid-late 20s and started college later... just a small negative.
- there are some finer, technical details in the art work and animations that could be scrutinized and improved, but they're good enough for what seems to be a first work, so not worth tarnishing the overall rating.
Overall, very good short work with only a few minor negatives. Excellent potential to build from for future work by the dev.
