Ren'Py - The Evil within Her [v0.25] [TheEvilWithinHer]

I like where this is going. However, It does have problems.

Pros:
I love the theme and the graphics. I like the possibility of multiple story lines (Dom V vs Sub V). The rendering is amazing.

Cons:
I am really not a fan of the repeat a scene multiple times to get the next step. For example I want to accomplish goal A, to do that I have to get to step 5 with NPC1. However, I can only interact with NPC1 once a day towards goal A. This means that day one I complete step one with NPC1. Day 2 I repeat step 1 to get to step 2 with NPC1. Then day three I repeat steps 1 and 2 to get to step3 and so on. What makes that worse if if you can only get to step 4 after you have completed yet another task with a different NPC or resource. You are introducing needless and maddening grind that isn't needed. What makes it worse is there are only four parts of the day for actions to be done. Too many can only happen in the morning, thus to complete two four-step goals that can only happen in the morning, you have at least eight game days to do them. When you add a needless hurdle of having to get a medical checkup every three days,that can only be done in the morning, one of its steps is broken,and you have to do the multiple visits in successive days to get to the goal ofgetting a successful checkup. It is maddening!

More excessive grind: reading books to get skill. Some skills have three books and each book can have up to 15 parts. You can only read one time a day. That eats up A LOT of days to gain skill levels to move forward in different quests.

The pro's of this game are the great looking renders of famous cartoon girls, unfortunately that's where the pro's end. The writing is really bad, either filled with grammar errors or simply just not making sense at all. The sandbox elements are very poorly done with the inter-room navigation especially annoying. I'm sad I had to rate this so low as I really hop the author improves, but as is this is not good.

Tried it, scenes and story are as flat and uninteresting. I just don't see any salvageable way to make this worth the download. However, I do hope the dev keeps creating and learning. Play with different scenes, test the waters, but above all, write your imaginations truth.

Scene animations have been greatly improved. Sound is definitely a problem.
As I understand it, the author does not want to cram in 20 hours of plot until he adds enough 18+ content. Let's see what it leads to.

Points for the good cartoon 3D models, decent actual animations and using Helen and Cass who are top tier lesbian milfs. The setting of corrupting them as Violet is very appelaing as well.

But... the current execution is mediocre at best. Awkward grammar (clearly non-native speaker) and also poor writing and pacing. No music or sounds at all (not even some generic music) and then suddenly some misplaced moans play during some scenes... Either go all in or don't. The "corruption" is instantaneous. The interface to move around is poorly designed.

Sadly I have no hopes for this one even tough it has some of my favorite tags with lesbianism. The overall game design is piss poor and I don't see this having any chance of improving. Wasted good characters and animations, basically.

When the English isn't completely broken the writing lacks any sense of character and the pacing is nonexistent. Before the premise can even set in you watch two awful softcore scenes in a row then almost immediately start riding Helen's face. I'd think making a game where you're corrupting someone from the inside would let you experience some of it or lock the porn behind a little work.

If you want to jump right into the smut, I'd really recommend just going to r34 and scrolling through the 3D Incredibles tags. If the dev want some advice, make textless sequences instead or hire a writer and start this shit over.

PRO(S): Nice animations, lesbian fem protag, Violet/Helen (nothing now but that's a nice pairing to look forward to), interesting story (however badly written).

CON(S): Very little content, confusing travel interface, weird progression, very bad writing with rushed storyline.

I want this to good so I'll be watching and rooting the dev on from the sidelines. If things look like they are going in the right direction, I will consider being a supporter. Till then, good luck.