VN Ren'Py The Lusanti Chronicles [Ch.3 v1.03] [Grumpy Old Aussie]

[Grumpy Old Aussie]

Good luck with your game, GOA.
As a famous benefactor once said: we will watch your career with great interest.

Thanks Ceolag, I could have gotten this far without guys like you giving me advice. I appreciate your help mate.

 

[FatGiant]

Short Review of V.1

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In general it was a good experience, I'll play the next update.

Peace

 

[Tyrranus]

I'm always open to constructive criticism. Feel free to DM me any specifics.

Alright Ill send you a conversation with a few ideas

 

[ASLPro3D]

Congratulations on your release Grumpy Old Aussie !!

 

[badtimetales]

Congrats Grumpy!

 

[Juerhullycin]

Fair enough, people like different things. Thanks for trying the game.

I would only add:

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should have taken a page out of the great tragedies of Rome and the Greeks, like Lucretia or Antigone, then we had at least a reason to hate MC's brother. So it's just honorless behaviour.

 

[ChubbyFatBoy]

Not finished yet and it's decent overall... but I gotta ask. Are the faces and the poses on purpose?

Spoiler: Because it's like funny, goofy, and horrifying at the same time.

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While it seems like the game is aiming to be more serious. I'm kinda conflicted

 

[Maviarab]

Not finished yet and it's decent overall... but I gotta ask. Are the faces and the poses on purpose?

Spoiler: Because it's like funny, goofy, and horrifying at the same time.

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While it seems like the game is aiming to be more serious. I'm kinda conflicted

They are not good...but Goa is well aware of this.

 

[Saphfire]

I´m pretty sure that it will get better in time. He´s still new to this but he is dedicated.
Story is already awesome.

 

[Grumpy Old Aussie]

Short Review of V.1

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In general it was a good experience, I'll play the next update.

Peace

Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it. Going from novel writing to VNs has been quite a challenge. I have enjoyed it though. There are certainly improvements to be made. The Tome of Insight will change with time. At the moment it's more a reminder for people than an encyclopedia. Constructive feedback will help me shape that going forward.

Not finished yet and it's decent overall... but I gotta ask. Are the faces and the poses on purpose?


While it seems like the game is aiming to be more serious. I'm kinda conflicted

I know, I have work to do on expressions, I've been chatting with a couple of other devs and working on resolving those issues. I think I looked at these renders so many times over the last 12 months I became blind to them. Anyway, working on it.

 

[Greebz]

For royal families heritage and Succession is very important. Will there be pregnancy and breeding content in this game? Thank you so much!

 

[YogSothoth1982]

Is lesbian content avoidable?

 

[ChubbyFatBoy]

She is my favorite character so far. I have never understood why people have a problem with these kinds of things in adult-themed games. She clearly has a thing for our Prince, but because of her life and position, she has been treated unfairly and poorly—fiction meets reality.

Ok see nah. I just gotta slide in right quick. I'm curious about what's hard to understand? Like I'm not arguing for or against her. But that bit I bolded is weird. Someone plays a porn game and that means what? They must automatically be open to whatever happens? Is everything on the table? Like agreeing to play "adult-themed games," does not mean everything under that theme.

Especially in this case where it involves family. That one detail alone can flip the scales.

 

[YogSothoth1982]

Fair enough, people like different things. Thanks for trying the game.

I would only add:

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I agree, send her wherever and let her start a new life far away of the MC.

Her story will stop a lot of people from playing this. I get what you are eluding to, but, when I see "I only fuck your brother and you, but I love you..." you need to throw up the "unavoidable" NTR tag. I did the bathtub thing with her then went back and undid it, then went to a whorehouse where it only got worse then deleted your game an hour in! Not interested in her station in life, not interested in further character development, just not interested in sharing or going any further! I wish I knew that in advance as I would have just passed over this game...

Is it possible to avoid sex with prostitutes? Even if you decide you're not interested in Livvy?

 

[Alex5280]

Overall, a pretty good start to this one. It has a lot more content than I was expecting. Some of the facial expressions early on are pretty exaggerated, but it seems to get better later on. The one real nitpick I have is that the scenes that autoplay go way to fast to read the text during them and that is coming from a native English speaker. By the way, does anyone else suspect that James is the MC's real father and that is why the King hates the MC so much.
I am looking forward to seeing how this story unfolds.

 

[Maviarab]

Is it possible to avoid sex with prostitutes? Even if you decide you're not interested in Livvy?

Yes. Pick not interested/too tired (bottom option). You spend the evening on the sofa talking with Liv until you fall asleep.

 

[ASLPro3D]

Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it. Going from novel writing to VNs has been quite a challenge.

It was the same way with me... a BIG CHANGE... still, I am finding that I still keep the flavor of my game as if it is a novel, not quite as wordy if it was one, but still more wordier than a lot of VNs found here... if people don't want to read a lot or just looking to spank their monkey, there's other games out there they can go and play... I prefer to keep my game in MY STYLE, that's why I am creating the game in the first place.

So, find your groove, Grump, get it to what you want it to be... don't let OTHERS tell you how you should create YOUR game... take advice, sure, but always keep your creative vision first and figure out if other's advice matches that vision, keep what you want, ditch the rest and keep making YOUR game.

Someone plays a porn game and that means what? They must automatically be open to whatever happens?

Going to chime in here... and say: YEAH they do...

There are only TWO things that players can do when playing a game:

1.) Be 'OPEN' to whatever may happen within that game according to the creator's vision for that game.

or

2.) If they don't want to or can't handle the vision of the creator of that game, then they need to move on and find a game that is more suited for them...

There are NO OTHER OPTIONS other than those two.

Now, there are some out there, who'd disagree and think: "Well, I will just bitch, complain, harass or make a fool out of myself by 'demanding' that the creator changes things to suit what 'I' want..." and, sadly, I've seen my fair share of them... even with AAA Gaming.

And, sure there is nothing wrong with requesting, I guess, a change... but, don't be surprised if the creator says "NO".

When I do my games, I have the story completely laid out... things (that players aren't privy to yet) happening for a reason, requesting a change could completely screw up everything planned.

It would be like coming to a party thrown by someone that has told everyone that the meal for the party is going to be Spaghetti, and someone who doesn't like tomato sauce still comes to the party and tells the host that they need to change the meal because they don't want spaghetti, because they hate tomatoes...

Me, as the host, would tell you... sorry, then don't eat and still try and enjoy the party; if that isn't good enough for you, then... please... leave.

So, yeah, if you are going to play a porn game, then you need to be open to whatever happens in that game. If you can't be, find a new game... simple as that.

 

[ASLPro3D]

Her story will stop a lot of people from playing this. I get what you are eluding to, but, when I see "I only fuck your brother and you, but I love you..." you need to throw up the "unavoidable" NTR tag. I did the bathtub thing with her then went back and undid it, then went to a whorehouse where it only got worse then deleted your game an hour in! Not interested in her station in life, not interested in further character development, just not interested in sharing or going any further! I wish I knew that in advance as I would have just passed over this game...

Actually, as previously mentioned, it isn't NTR.

Will it stop some people from playing it?

Yeah, some... as for some reason, some people seem to think that in a game they play, the only dick that should ever enter another female is their own... and, interestingly enough, seem to think that if that isn't the case, it is suddenly 'NTR'.

I also find it strange that, those who get terribly upset with the idea of another character getting their dick wet or shown in a game, that they need to dramatically express how terribly offended they were by this fact and how they feel slighted or victimized and that the creator needs to know how they just had to 'delete' the game!!

Jesus, it is just a game... not a fucking airport, you really DON'T need to announce your departure!

Oh... and and Scooter_Tramp, some advice... DO NOT play my games, you think what you experienced here was bad and 'NTR'? Then you are REALLY going to want to AVOID my game... because *gasp* I have ACTUAL 'NTR' in mine!

So, let' me just save you the trouble in advance.

You're welcome.

 

[ChubbyFatBoy]

Going to chime in here... and say: YEAH they do...

There are only TWO things that players can do when playing a game:

1.) Be 'OPEN' to whatever may happen within that game according to the creator's vision for that game.

or

2.) If they don't want to or can't handle the vision of the creator of that game, then they need to move on and find a game that is more suited for them...

There are NO OTHER OPTIONS other than those two.

Now, there are some out there, who'd disagree and think: "Well, I will just bitch, complain, harass or make a fool out of myself by 'demanding' that the creator changes things to suit what 'I' want..." and, sadly, I've seen my fair share of them... even with AAA Gaming.

And, sure there is nothing wrong with requesting, I guess, a change... but, don't be surprised if the creator says "NO".

When I do my games, I have the story completely laid out... things (that players aren't privy to yet) happening for a reason, requesting a change could completely screw up everything planned.

It would be like coming to a party thrown by someone that has told everyone that the meal for the party is going to be Spaghetti, and someone who doesn't like tomato sauce still comes to the party and tells the host that they need to change the meal because they don't want spaghetti, because they hate tomatoes...

Me, as the host, would tell you... sorry, then don't eat and still try and enjoy the party; if that isn't good enough for you, then... please... leave.

So, yeah, if you are going to play a porn game, then you need to be open to whatever happens in that game. If you can't be, find a new game... simple as that.

Cool. But you're missing the context of why I asked my question. The person I asked made a general statement about adult-theme games. Plural. And them saying they find it confusing why people have a problem with certain content. As if just because you play porn games. Means you're supposed to be ok with whatever. So I asked them. Obviously if you don't jive with what a game's content is. You can move on. But that's not what I'm seeking an answer to.

But even with your response. Wouldn't the answer actually be no? As a dev, I'm sure you have content in your games that people don't like. But they still played anyway. Maybe you made some of it optional. Or they just sucked it up. I have plenty of games with tags I dislike. But I pushed through or it was optional so I avoided it. So I disagree. You don't have to be open to whatever.

 

[Grumpy Old Aussie]

Congrats Grumpy!

Thanks BTT for all your help. Most of the improvement between this and the next update is thanks to you and Ceolag.

For royal families heritage and Succession is very important. Will there be pregnancy and breeding content in this game? Thank you so much!

It is a theme throughout the story starting with the next update and the MC will father several children through the story, it won't be until ch15 and ch16 that there will be "pregnant sex" if that is what you are asking. I don't want to give away much more than that.

Is lesbian content avoidable?

Yes, girl on girl scenes will be avoidable. There will be flirting among the women though. The only scene is in the introduction. I didn't intend it to be a 'lesbian' scene though. It was a hetero maid messing with her hetero mistress and revealing the mistress' naivety and voyeuristic kink.

I agree, send her wherever and let her start a new life far away of the MC.



Is it possible to avoid sex with prostitutes? Even if you decide you're not interested in Livvy?

Yep, there is no sex with the prosititutes, choosing any of the girls will lead to a non-sex conspiracy scene. That slack ass dev GOA forgot to remove the reference made in the following scene . By the time I finished the Fell scene, I had completely forgotten about that reference. The Fell scene was the last scene included. Lesson to me to write shit down. That reference has since be fixed and won't be part of the script in the next update.

Ok see nah. I just gotta slide in right quick. I'm curious about what's hard to understand? Like I'm not arguing for or against her. But that bit I bolded is weird. Someone plays a porn game and that means what? They must automatically be open to whatever happens? Is everything on the table? Like agreeing to play "adult-themed games," does not mean everything under that theme.

Especially in this case where it involves family. That one detail alone can flip the scales.

There won't be any family sex scenes unless cousins count

Overall, a pretty good start to this one. It has a lot more content than I was expecting. Some of the facial expressions early on are pretty exaggerated, but it seems to get better later on. The one real nitpick I have is that the scenes that autoplay go way to fast to read the text during them and that is coming from a native English speaker. By the way, does anyone else suspect that James is the MC's real father and that is why the King hates the MC so much.
I am looking forward to seeing how this story unfolds.

I'll make a note of that and extend those times.

MC's heritage - What did Xavier have to do that was so distasteful?