VN - Ren'Py - The Outong [v0.1.8] [Gon D. Eser]

TLDR: Game is mediocre.

Story : 6/10 Story is pretty decent but the name issue is the writing seems some what childish which takes away from how the story plays out.

Characters : 5/10 The models lack consistence with their appearance. It looks like multiple people each made one character.

Animations and UI : 1/10 Pretty much absolute trash. The animations seem to be rendered at 10 frames and at 144p. (its not my pc these are pre rendered animations and I'm using a 3080) Also there is no opacity to the text window which in certain seen make the text illegible

Really like the game so far. FIrst off, there's no sandbox elements which is great. There is a story if you're into that, I like a story I can loosely follow with straightforward choices, which this game delivers. This game also gets one of the most important things right and that is pacing. It's not too fast, not too slow in regards to the scenes which keeps me engaged. The other thing it gets right is the models. The models for the female characters are very attractive.

Keep up the greak work author, I was pleasantly surprised by this one.

Review of [v0.1.0 Public] Wow Wow Wow! This game has a mix of all the workings of a good fantasy show rolled into one. I greatly enjoyed seeing the graphics improve from the first release through the most current version. This game has a good balance of fantasy, action, and romance. The sex scenes are well done, and as I mentioned prior the graphics had great improvement from the first release.

This was a huge impact on my rating as the beginning graphics reminded me of Renpy Games from 4-5 years ago the animations would be very grainy, as if it was a gif on loop. However, as later chapters released you can tell the DEV put a lot of effort into the storyline as well as the character development. I found myself annoyed I had to wait for the next release as the story was fast pace and truly engaged me in the story.

I highly recommend this game as there's alot of content in game that's great on top of a good foundational plot and storyline development. I hope many more games by this DEV are made in the future. Only recommendation I have for the DEV is perhaps try to include animations in this game? It was thrilling with just certain stills but I believe more animations during fight scenes would elevate this game to top tier status. This game has great potential. Until the next update DEV!

Surprised by the lack of reviews given the amount of content so far (v0.1.0).

Love the game so far. The renders are alright and the plot is whimsical. The MC's powers are growing too quickly imo, but can't complain about the number of cute girls to interact with. The power dynamic scene with Cil is really hot, Lucy's my fav, and so excited for more scenes with that maid Erina!

Really hoping for regular updates once the dev gets settled in with a new job.

Review for v0.1

The positives in this game - renders are good , average at the start of the game and it improves as the game progresses and the girls look amazing and nice fantasy story and the animations are great . Game has music and lots of interesting female characters . No sandbox which is good , no error or virus or bugs while I was playing . The only negative is the English in this game could use some help at least for gender mistakes and some minor typos but it's okay I don't mind it much as it is not my first language either .
Overall a fun game to play with a nice fantasy story , loved the ending for V0.1 , looking forward to next update .

i never really like games like this .. but i have to say ... the story is amazing .. the renders are cool as well i like how you've done them ... i hope this game doesn't not suffer any problems .. i would love to see it till the end ... with all that being said .. overall i say this is one amazingly great game .. i would suggest people try out

[ as of version 0.0.7 ]

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when playing (or reading) “The Outong,” i had the impression the developer tried somehow to turn a novel into a game, and has so far (unfortunately) failed on both.

don’t get me wrong: “The Outong” has the right elements to become a good novel; nonetheless, it needs a deep overhauling — as for example:

• rewrite the entire text eliminating the overbearing redundancies (too many unnecessary explanations);
• in that sense, rewrite all dialogues in order to make them more natural;
• since it’s a visual novel, improve the graphics’ quality;
• give it a more cinematic timing by eliminating the overuse of the ellipsis and fade to black;
• [a bit of a spoiler] Alice seems to suffer from Impostor Syndrome; even so, her guilt is a tad too exaggerated;
• and so forth.

the story itself is quite solid, though, hence it would be really nice to see “The Outong” turn into a great novel or game. or both.

good luck with your project, Gon D. Eser; i wish you the best.

yeah im definitly agree with the first rating, need grammar to be fix or maybe make story not so rush, its like u make this game with a deadline, if this really ur game take ur time make every thing is comfort dont be a rush,
and yet thought i love the story of fantasy but in this game like again its rush/speed?(my bad english)i dont like it, keep it up dont ever give up pal
i really like the model of art n yes its low quality but in future can be more better

hope not abandon this game, if yes give the reason on a posts

The Only thing I would like to suggest is getting an editor for the english script. The English is Horrible.

If I am not mistaken, this VN is heavily taken from Naruto Concept. However, that iss not a bad thing rather I enjoyed it thoroughly. Let's see where you take us in the Journey. Best of Luck.