HTML - Abandoned - The Root of Lust [v0.12] [YOGG]

Great first draft. As mentioned the story line is interesting and divergent. Not a VN where you click for half an hour with no substantive fork. Good real pics and not just brazzers .

Looking forward to next release.

[Rev @ The Root of Lust [Release .01]

Art's real pics and the pictures are in focus, so about as good as it could get. Choice of material is fine.

Writing is unpolished, and needs an editor. Scenario's novel enough, voice is midgrade but the characterization is weak. The erotic song-fic aspect was a bit cringe.

Porn was fine, but there wasn't an overwhelming amount owing to this being a 0.01 release. Vanilla thus far, but nothing squicky.

Saw a couple points where sequential images showed up before whatever text passage addendums involved them; that and the occasional editing stumble let the whole tone down a bit.

TLDR: It's a .01 of a twine porn game.

It has a pretty good mix of story and porn so far. We get an urban fantasy mix based in mesoamerican myth, and the story isn't afraid to dip into horror (though not graphic) when the MC aquires his power. On the porn front, a lot of variety and two seperate branches right out of the gate.

It's also not a clickfest either, nor does it require you to stop and do logic puzzles or trivia (so far)