Unity - Abandoned - The Secret of Hokwiton [v0.4.0] [AlpineBiscuits]

I enjoyed this game (0.4.0) enough to give a review to help balance out some of the negative-ish reviews.

Basically it has nice quality renders, good writing, and is bug-free - at least I encountered no bugs. Based on that alone it would be nice for the game to keep going.

I'm not a big fan of using Unity for this type of visual novel, but as implemented here it works ok. I personally prefer Ren'Py but then this review is about this game, not my engine preferences

I wish that saving the game would save your progress at the exact point in the game where you invoked "save" instead of reverting to closest previous checkpoint. However, the save system in the game isn't too horrible and I was able to tolerate it. It didn't take away too much from the game.

The writing needs a heavy dose of quality proofreading to fix typo and grammar issues but again for me the writing and visual appearance mitigated the poor spelling and grammar.

To summarize:

Good:

• Story (i.e. plot) 4/5
• Writing quality/dialogue (not spelling) 4/5
• Visual quality 4.5/5

Bad/mediocre:

• spelling/grammar (2/5)
• save system (3/5)
• use of Unity to implement a convenient VN player experience (3/5)

Nice renders and a good story. Now I am just waiting for the next update. I hope it will come soon. I was pleasent surprised after playing this game.
I like the models and the wide range of characters.

It's a nice story. A little too clumsy storywise but it's alright. The erotic scenes could use some more images, they're over pretty quick.
I like this, not gonna lie. But as others mentioned, the lack of backrolling, saving and loading at different points really annoyed me. In order to get to a specific scene, you'll have to play it again from the start. Or at least some sort of gallery in order to jump to specific scenes.
Also no auto-progess.

Aside from that i really enjoyed it, although at this point it's more of a kinetic novel.

I'm really liking this! Good story that isn't just about sex. I wish more were like this. It makes the whole experience far more immersive. A few spelling and grammar mistakes, but that's ok. Great job so far! I can't wait for the next update!

There is a lot of potential the models are cute and the story is fun but I'm afraid it would turn into a school simulator. only 3 scenes of "sex" is a little too little. Honestly you should start to steer the story in a certain direction because spending the hours between the different lessons after the 3rd time becomes borin.

If this was a comic, it would be pretty above the average but its a game and as a game, its actually below.

It has a few but heavy problems, like someone already said in the review, this game LACK the basic options and tool that any visual novel.
If your visual novel does not have that, then its not a visual novel or a game but a comic. In fact, instead passing page like you would do in a comic, you just click in a bottom to go next, so yeah, i cant call this is a game.

You cant even avoid scenes or skip text which is the most basic action in a game.

If i review this as a game, this would deserve 2 stars for sure. Any other who gives more is probably because they like the genre, the art or the fetish but then again, this is a game or visual game and its no really work mechanically.

I will give an extra star just because i dont want to be too hard, i didnt found bugs and the music is nice (also i cant give 2,5 stars) but the game is a 5/10 i could not finish this.
To solve this is actually pretty easy, just add the basic things! godspeed.

I admit I did not progress very far in the game at v0.2.0. Simply because I grew frustrated that several universal functions I've found in the majority of the VNs are not present, or do not work as expected. The first is that you can not HIDE the dialogue window and it obscures the images behind it. There is no Rollback function. The Save function only allows you to save at at previous key spots in the dialogue, and only the last key spot. You cannot go further back.

Positive things first, i liked the graphics and i was able to get some boner..! I guess writing is alright, considering what others are saying? Hard to judge for me.

But, that's about it. The system is horrendous, it has a lot of pointless clicking before you can progress, despite having only one option at 95% times. Other 5% it has two or three, which is completely pointless too. If it has only one option, why even make it a clickable choice? If it affects nothing? Also, this is what basically is a kinetic novel - it has choices everywhere, yes, but considering it has only one option in them it's not a choice, it's just a tedious clicking.

Why make us click on ingredients? Why make us brew a potion by actually following the recipe fully, without it having any other point but to just be there? You can't lose either, seeing some funny scene, it'll just start it from the beginning.

At this point you have a novel full of pointless clicking and basically without any choice. I REALLY hope author will reconsider with all the clicking, useless choices, and just remove it. I can give it 3 stars, but only out of compassion, in hopes this is just a mistake.

Has a plotline that heavily reminds me of Harry Potter, Renders are quite well done, though the Monster tag is more of a Bestiality tag. Writing isn't a slog to read though or boring. Straight forward game play with little sandboxing.

Im not giving 5 stars cause maybe there is a little too much of that bestiality thingy, but even with that you have to admit that the scenes are well sold, quite convincing despite the fact that they give this "holding back" like trying to not put much on the table vibe. Or maybe they decided to make some scenes that short for no special reason.

Another thing that lowers the rating is the save system. I just cliced the circle thing and i reseted the game progress twice. Being short is not a problem if you hold Escapeand skip everything, but later it could be a serious issue. Not being able to find, if it exists, a menu with options and maybe the saves stored, a gallery and stuff is not good at all.
Also im not a fan of the text font and the window color, even if it fits the theme and the overall look, but is a little hard to read.
For the rest of the game, i think is decently enough structured to keep the interest, and it looks quite good, its pleasant to look at.

There is little of the plot right now, but i dont find anything i dislike in the writing. It will have to offer something more in the future, cause its a little fanservicy (if that word exists) and later when there is more content that will have to dissapear or be balanced to keep the interest. I dont know.

It has a good potential, if it doesn't screw up it could be a top of all times.

0.2
If this game could offer 10 hours of gameplay in 3 years development...But at this rate it will offer 3 hours in 3 years, but only 15 minutes worth of "sexy" scenes. Thats where this is heading right now cause the game is basically a lot of text, and fanservice on the side.
Also making a potion that I belive its useless in this update....That potion should come with a scene attached so you dont feel like you are wasting 5 minutes of gameplay. The update is too short already.


I still think this game has awesome potential, but i am really doubting it will reach it.

TLDR:
- Nice graphics, and weird but decent face expressions.
- Weird mix of fetishes biased towards bestiality.
- Too much text (hold ESCAPE if you feel the story is going nowhere).
- Weak lesbian.
- Proportionally a lot of spanking.
- Proportionally a lot of potion making.
- Save/load system OMG please do something about it.

For the reasons above, 2 stars, basically the graphics and the world building. But the game is full of "miss", and way too little "hit". Considering the claims of the dev about developping time, Its hard to see a future for this one.
(DISCLAIMER: Consider the game 5 stars if you are really into bestiality, at least first release is solild for that purpose, and I guess very fappable.)

v0.1.0 review

It's an overly sexualized Harry Potter world, in case that was not clear from the title and description. Really, that's it. There's not even a shred of originality. Everything about Hogwarts universe is literally copied, sexualized and then pasted.

CGs are quite good, characters look really rather nice, although they look rather young, depending on whether that's your thing or not.

Gameplay is, well, not existent pretty much. Plays out more like a kinetic novel in which you have to click at a certain place on the screen to advance scene instead of anywhere.

Characters are walking stereotypes and quite shallow. Story is very basic and a rip off of a side story in the HP novels.

Use of unity is really not justified at this point. The game could have been a simple visual novels and it would have worked better. Right now, saving and loading is rudimentary, you basically only have quick save and quick load.
Text can get cut off at the bottom of the text box, there's no option to adjust text speed, transitions are slow.

CG: 5/5
Story and characters: 2/5
Mechanics: 2/5

... which averages to about 3/5 total.

Hopefully mechanics get improved upon. I'm not expecting and great leaps in quality of the story and characters, but if you're into sexualized Harry Potter, I guess you'll find the it bearable.

A promising start. It's technically far from what we would expect, but not the worst game I've seen (save/continue doesn't work). Adding usual VN options (text speed, rollback, hide text, etc...) would be most welcome.
The models are really good (girls look almost natural and not like dolls or bimbos and the renders are really nice. I hope animations will be added in later versions.
The story is not bad so far and events are quite fun. I just wish that it would have been a bit more progressive.

I have lots of expectations for this game.

For a first upload, a really promising 5-star version.
The characters are interesting, but could still use some fine-tuning.
A bully also has a soft side that he/she tries to hide.
I would also like to see a little more freedom of choice, especially when several locations are already accessible.
So why give away 2x the evening pointlessly just to wait for the nightly event, when you could also visit the library or search for new ingredients in the forest. The alternative would be a fixed timetable, because currently it would be possible to attend the same lessons all week and leave the other two out.

Unfortunately, there are deductions for the user-friendliness. First and foremost, the memory function, which only allows one score at a time, so that there is no possibility to try out different branches.
Furthermore, you end up in a black screen when you press the back button. You can only end the game.

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[v0.1.0]
Pros
Graphics/Models (5/5)
The character models look good and show the effort put in. There's a good variety in faces & hair styles giving the game more depth. All the settings/background used in the game look incredible, interact with the characters well, and work perfectly with the scenario.
Story (4/5)
The games story is interesting and show enough of a promising premise in it's initial release. Its obviously based off of the H.P books and follows a similar premise with its own characters.
Cons
Game Engine (1/5)
Making the game in Unity seems to always be a mistake in porn games. The engine is horrible in being user friendly. There's only 1 save file and it saves before the point you wanted to save. It also cuts off text and/or blocks it from being seen. Unity also gives you 0 accessibility settings such as text speed, text size, fast forward, etc. Other engines like Renpy are always the better choice for these types of games.
Character Writing (3/5)
In fairness to the game the characters themselves aren't bland or boring, they all show their own personalities and traits. The downside to this is that they're all overbearing to the point of being annoying. They pigeonhole the main character into doing what they do. Of course as a game this is necessary to lead the story but the way it's done is too much. It makes the M.C seem "useless" and gives no sense of autonomy.
Conclusion
All in all the game looks impressive and is written well. While the engine makes it annoying to play it's not too horrible. Even with my complaints I still say give it a try and form your own opinions on it. For a first release its definitely above average.

ok this game is nuts, it doesnt have that much of p*rn content yet, but is truly awesome concept with good mechanics (im hoping for more quick time events), characters that are hot (but a little juvenile for my tastes) with good developing and many scenes with good kinks that I hoping to see, totally a 5 stars for this 0.1 version.

Honestly Has some bugs and I want to be able to save my games permanently in files but besides that the game is actually pretty good for a initial release. Hopefully a walkthrough would be nice also just to make sure we don't miss anything but it looks like this game has a nice future if he keeps on this pace!