VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - The Time Tinkerers [v1.0] [Naptime Interactive]

Review as of v1.0

This game looked pretty intriguing from the outside. It's pretty shameless AI art but the 90s Disney-esque style on the female lead seemed interesting, as well as the fantasy premise. While I still think there's a lot of potential in the future, the game's current offering has a lot of flaws in my opinion.

There's barely any content so far but this is a first release so I guess it's not too big of a deal. I will say that although I like certain elements of the banter and narration, there is just way too much banter. No line of dialogue can just stand on its own. Each thing a character says has to turn into some prolonged exchange of jokes. I don't dislike the banter, I think a lot of the dialogue is quite charming. There's just way too many jokes at the moment and it makes the dialogue unnecessarily drawn out.

The quality of the artwork is also very inconsistent. Every character in the current version has a different artstyle which makes it incredibly jarring. The sound design was also quite jarring. I thought the game was simply going to be silent, which is fine. But there is an uncanny laughing sound effect that is played over and over again, and it was distracting to the point that I considered muting all volume.

I've been a bit harsh in my criticisms but if the developer reads this, I want them to know that it comes from wanting to see this game succeed. I think the game has a good concept and I can tell that real effort was put into crafting the dialogue, but the presentation is off the mark right now. I would love to see your completed vision because I'm sure all of the current problems can be addressed with more time. I'll be following the game as it gets updated and will happily change my review and score accordingly.

Excellent start, attractive couple, attractive neighbors, and the story follows a movie-like structure: introduces the characters, they’re selling old items from the house, and find a mysterious artifact that, during sex, sends them to 1800s London.


Fantasy-themed stories like this were missing in this niche. The dev can really have fun with this idea, since it could go to any era or world (it's not defined yet).


It would be good to keep the English in the dialogues simple, without slang.

V1.0

5/5

Man that game looks good ! I really enjoyed the story and as an enthousiast of AI art, this is quality content =)
I look forward to your futur developpement, thank you so much for this excitement !!
Keep it up =D

[v1.0 Prologue]

I liked the banter between the husband and wife. They both played off each other well in many conversations throughout the entire play through.

I did not like most of everything else. At times it felt as though someone took an existing novel and is converting it into a visual novel. There are just screens and screens of text describing something and I am getting bored because it means nothing and I have been staring at the same screen of a table or even the floor and nothing else. There are many grammatical issues and even a random name is used that has not been introduced or just incorrectly used. A small gripe was all images of the men looked odd to me; like they were wearing clothing two sizes too small. Another gripe leading to my next issue was the wife kept mentioning how she "needs to keep it spicy" meanwhile husband is all like "I'm so lucky, she is all I need".

My biggest problem was the preview images at the end of the update. Soon as the game starts there are messages saying what type of game this is and what type it is not. I am pressing X to doubt. 1. The Whorehouse (wife front and center) 2. Netflix presents Upper Society (wife with the bbc on the face). There were a few more without main couple. There were none with husband. They are only teaser images and could not mean a thing but paired with past notes about desires from the couple I feel like this heading into cuck territory like so many other "Sharing" titles.

Definitely a big fan of the loving, consensual, respectful Netorase genre. Netorare can go pound sand. This game is off to a good start. The writing is solid. The art style choice is definitely appreciate. Joel and Abigail (great names by the way!) are interesting and funny.

I hope this remains an NTS game with no NTR elements and two happy people are just out having fun together instead of the incredibly cruel stuff that happens in these genres almost 100% of the time.