VN - Ren'Py - Thirsty Society [v0.1] [Obsidian Desire Labs]

Good start. Renders are very good. Seems hot story. Wish the developer all the best. Hope to see more content. Hope the developer will continue his project. This is really a promising game. Best wishes to the developer

i really like the game, ntr , old man, and maybe incest is nice and not common on this site. renders can get better but that will happen with time, dont worry.
if you keep the updates regulary im sure this will be a very good game . and dont let people who hates ntr reach you, you have to know that you are making a game that is not for everyone.

Version 0.1 reviewed. Minor spoilers

Unoriginal story about a father who is away on business while his hot wife, son and daughter have to deal with pervy grandpa, who decides to pay a surprise visit.

I assume this is a prologue or demo as the story is only about 15 minutes long and ends abruptly.
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Pros:

1- Some very nice renders.

2- The mom and daughter are very attractive.

3- If the writing was better pervy grandpa might actually make this game worthwhile.

4- Pervy grandpa Paul feels up every woman he hugs, and apparently put semen in the special sauce he made for dinner. Is this a bad thing or a good thing? I'm unsure.

Cons:

1- So poorly written that it becomes difficult to follow.

2- Numerous bugs. In one scene the teacher/ mother is called three different names during a conversation. It appears as if production notes were added to the script but never replaced with her actual name. How the game could be released in this state is beyond me.

3- No sound.

4- Kinetic.

5- The game ends so abruptly that I thought it crashed. But since the main menu screen appeared I assume that it was intentional.

6- Pervy grandpa Paul feels up every woman he hugs, and apparently put semen in the special sauce he made for dinner. Is this a bad thing or a good thing? I'm unsure.

Final verdict - Erectile dysfunction

I'm trying not to be overly critical here as I assume English is not the dev's native language, but this one is painful to click through.

If the dev is serious about salvaging this game it is imperative that he/she fix all the bugs and get someone to at least proof read the story before proceeding.

Good luck.

VERSION: v0.1
SUMMARY: Visually not bad, but drops ball on everything else.
RATINGS: (out of 5): ⭐⭐

NOTE: The following categories and scoring method are my own criteria and may require more context. Additionally, scoring is based on the state, and what is in the current version and not what may or may not be introduced at a later point.

1. Character (Model) Visuals......... : ⭐⭐⭐⭐
2. General (World) Visuals........... : ⭐⭐⭐
3. Animation Quality................. :
4. Character Personality(Persona).... : ⭐⭐
5. Story & Dialogue.................. : ⭐⭐
6. Writing & Grammar................. : ⭐⭐
7. UX/UI, Game Type & Mechanics.......: ⭐
8. Playtime & Pacing..................: ⭐⭐
9. Music & Sounds.....................:
10. Adult Content & Fetishes.......... : ⭐⭐

Average: X of 50 possible points giving a X% rating i.e. X stars.

PROS: - See my opinions section for details.

1. Decent renders and good looking models/characters
2. World renders and look is generic but decent

CONS: - See my opinions section for details.

1. Dialogue is poor, sentences are poorly structured and reads awkward even if you can understand and get the gist of it.
2. Plot is flimsy and off the bat you know exactly what to expect, which has been done countless times before.
3. No sounds/audio of any kind
4. UI/UX isn't great, the dialogue box has no opacity setting and covers a good part of the screen.
5. Adding to the UX, the internalising dialogue i.e. thoughts and actual dialogue often get mixed up and is confusing between what characters say out loud and think.
6. Missing names and general poor revision before releasing this AVN
7. MC is not defined, nor can he be named. That is even if he is the MC
8. Very short and only one choice during the short playthrough.

OPINIONS, SUGGESTIONS & FINAL REMARKS:

NOTE: The following remarks are my personal opinions and thoughts, which may provide more context and could be useful to the developer. (Read them or don't)

• Many bugs and very unpolished. Its actually amazing that the developer released it in this shape, one playthrough and you can find many issues that shouldn't take too long to iron out. Seems however that churning out more of the same AVNs is all its about these days.
• Needs a lot of revision and someone with writing skills to redo the dialogue/script completely.
• I am hoping players support with there brains and not their "heads" that way we can hold content creators to a higher standard if they want the cash.

TLDR:

Very rough, visually it has potential, but on everything else...it misses the mark by a mile.