VN - Ren'Py - Timebound [v0.3] [Lyn]

Well, overall the story seems interesting enough, nothing groundbreaking but it peeked my interest about the MC's past enough that I'm looking forward finding out more about it.

To be short and concise, the renders are good and the LIs look great, the music and sound effects are good, liked the pacing too.

My main issues with the game, and my reasoning for giving it an average rating:
- the dialogue is sometimes rough and kinda robotic, which is not huge problem for me as I think it can be easily improved on by having more experience writing the updates and later revisiting some earlier chapters (unless the dev doesn't try to improve, hopefully he/she does)

- the MC is too timid and passive for me, especially after learning he is some kind of artificial superhuman (if human at all?)

- not sure about the number of LIs but 3 of them already showing femdom vibes, one light (unsolicited face sitting) and 2 leaning on the heavy side (cum denial and a painful footjob) and one if them even promised more 'tests' so I had to go back and drop these 3 LIs because I don't find these type of characters suitable for a harem game, but this is just my preference

Not trying to bash the game, just giving heads up for other users as I think I'm not the only one who is NOT looking for submissive MC and femdom in harem games.
Overall I think this game could go to places if the MC grows up and he won't fawn over every single woman around him (there's nothing wrong with being helpful and caring) and grows to be more assertive.

Good luck to the dev!

Better than i expected renders are good, but can be improved. I really like how the story works so far, also plenty of lewd scene for a new game.
Sadly this game was not that well known, really a gem here guys.

The only thing about this game honestly is the love interests. I liked the concept of what the game is supposed to be, however I find the MC to be a bit cringy and the writing to be lackluster personally.

What ruins the game for me, is the mini games, most notably the 'game show' which takes up way to much time that could've been used for better story progression. To make it worse, the game show is faulty at best, you have to button smash to win, yet with the meter full you have to keep clicking because that somehow isn't good enough.

This game clearly had a lot of effort put into it and is honestly pretty fun. It's not a 5-star game though. I gave this rating to try to counteract the reviews that I felt were *very* biased and unfair - this is absolutely not a 1 or 2 star game.

My real rating for the game would be 3 and a half, skewing towards 4 stars.

The writing, as far as plot goes, is very mid ("villains used this <plot device> for nefarious purposes" just screams mid, sorry). The description is very "moustache-twirling villain", even without any clear villain as of now. So it's a fault with the setting setup.

Then there are some perceived inconsistencies with how the MC acts. He is suffering from temporary amnesia due to PTSD, claims to have no memories of anything (to the point of being unsure about his own name), but at certain times he suddenly remembers and/or knows things.

If there had been a brief blurb of text prior to those events that went something along the lines of "some of my memories have been popping back as of late. Guess I'm starting to go back to normal, whatever that means" it'd feel a lot more believable and immersive.

This becomes evident when we meet one of the MCs former teammates. I was led to believe the MC would have no memories of this person at all, but he instantly remembers the guy and his personality. Then they talk in private and MC says to the former teammate's face that he doesn't remember anything about him. Which is it?!

I do have a couple other issues with the game, but those aren't as objective - those are heavily tied to my own tastes and subjective opinion, so I'll keep them off the review and go over them in the thread itself some other time.

Now for positives, this game has great visuals, the writing is lighthearted, fun and funny in a "we don't take ourselves too seriously over here" kind of way. If you only like super thought out brainy plots, this won't be for you, but it's a nice and fun distraction otherwise.

MUCH better than several other games I've played that have higher ratings and have a substantially larger audience. I hope this game finds it's core audience, as I see it appealing to *a lot* of people who are into the genres in the tags.

Character design is very good, and the distinct personalities are solid.

Sex scenes... they are nice, I guess, but I never enjoyed handjob scenes, and as of now, that's 90% of what's in the game. Handjobs always felt like a massive waste of time for me, never understood why folks might be into them

The one thing that is weird and I'd advise they be remade are the "rotating animations", as they seem to stutter a lot. Looks to be a render issue though, not anything worth tanking the rating of a game for.

All in all, this game is a pretty fun and lighthearted distraction where a lot of effort was put in by the dev. I hope it finds it's audience and gets treated fairly by the users (if it gets more eyes on it, I'll change my rating to a "true" 4-star one instead of the current "trying to compensate for unfairness" one)

The characters had a depth to them and their respective interactions. I'm personally a Maya fan. I'm looking forward to more interaction with Sophia. I'm hoping she is a love interest. There are some great animations and the sex scenes are pretty hot. Overall, the plot looks interesting but it is still in it's early stages.

The creator only nailed one of the aspect of a VN, that's the visual but the novel aspect is very poor and boring.

And the choice system is as simple as Yes/No or Like/Dislike. The overview promise a journey but all you get after 20 minutes (couldn't play longer), is a normal house filled with girls wetting there panties cause they saw a guy...

Reviewing V0.1

TL;DR: The game is garbage packed in a nice package with a cute ribbon on top of it, and you can tell to yourself about how nice the package is, but the trash in the package is still there even if you ignore it.

Pros
- The graphic: The graphical level is above average, but not top quality, yet it still is the best thing about this game
- The music: is kinda good, not my favourite genre but i kinda enjoyed it.

Cons
- The writing itself is just awful: This point is more of an introduction to MC and the other characters and the plot.
- The premise/the introduction to the plot: mankind went to space due to destruction of earth(caused by wars due to lack of resources) and after a while scientists decide to...went back in time. Yes this is the problem, they couldn't handle space-travel for long but they managed to invent time-machines to go in the past(implying that they will gather resources from the past)...but wouldn't this be the reason why earth lacks resources to begin with? Meaning that the people from the future are the reason why their ancestors waged war on each other and then left earth altogether...it sounds stupid.
- MC is boring: This is a problem because i don't like MC, subjective but i've valid reasons, such as "MC is the usual pervert", or "MC gets introduced like he is this traumatized cool guy but he isn't cool at all, and his trauma got brushed off easily, aside when the developer wants us to care about MC", for example MC is so traumatized that he got temporary amnesia but it only lasted a few months, and with Celestia, kinda brushes it off, yeah sure he grieved, but a in-game day ago MC went on (through inner monologue) about "finally finding a family", we even got a short flashback(over a black screen, so no pictures) of MC surviving this traumatic event, and yet he doesn't know if anyone of his old team survived, even after he is cured of his amnesia. Overall MC is a pervert, and the first thing he does when he meets someone, is ogling them, and then complains that people are calling him a pervert.
- The other characters: IF MC is boring, annoying and overall pathetic, the girls aren't much better, believe me:
- The game is full of cheap comedy that i saw in the most boring uninspired manga and anime i've ever seen, and they all rely on MC being a pervert or some weird anime-ish misunderstanding that could be solved in 10 seconds if the characters talked about it in the most honest way possible.
- For a sci-fi game, we don't see much Sci-fi, like the spaceship? The interior is designed like an actual house...yeah sure...i bet the dev is too lazy to find the spaceship-maps.
- The grammar and some sentences must be proof-read because some dialogues were weird to read and i asked a few native-english speakers to check them for me...but nope it's just that bad.

Conclusion
No comment, really, i had no expectations and i'm still disappointed, nothing of this game makes you want to play the game, the good graphic is pretty much a bait, the characters are boring at best, exhausting at worst. The dev nailed the graphic, now he must re-do the entire writing, because it's like a horny 13years old kid wrote this while high on his power-fantasies.