VN - Ren'Py - Unexpected Consequences [v0.10b4a] [Dream Cloud Entertainment]

It's not exactly terrible, I just couldn't find a reason to like it

The game spends waayyyyy too much time focusing on the MC's ugly scrunched up face where he seems unable to portray correct emotions

The models are pretty good, fairly varied but as always fall into the cringe trap of half of them having tons of tatoos and piercings, short hair and manly features. But heh, I guess there must be an audience for that.

The renders are decently done.

The writing is hit and miss, there's no engrish but a lot of failures - confusing effect and affect, your and you're etc.

The story is what brings it down honestly. The mc is an absolute cringy coward. For some reason women throw themselves at him despite this. He has to constantly spend money on them in every instance, to get any attention. When sex does happen it's because women dont have free will, not because any relationship has been built up.

Also, it is basically kinetic. the player has ZERO control. It's either see content or pick the option that passes time with no content. In situations like eg peeking, MC because he is such an insecure coward immediately has to talk to them about it

Legitimately one of the worst VNs I've ever played. Let's go through it:
Story: Have you ever played the sandbox-harem game Love Sex & Second Base? Then congrats, you've also played Unexpected Consequences, because this game essentially takes every character and scene from that game, changes the names, makes the writing WORSE, and then pretends like it's the dev's own creation.
Story rating: -7.5/10

Writing: Being able to write dialogue is a huge part of making a story believable. Every one of us has had conversations in real life, so it's not too hard to write two characters speaking to one another like actual human beings. How does Unexpected Consequences manage this extremely basic aspect of storytelling? Well, here's a snippet from the MC's first night out with the two main LIs the day after he met them for the first time (direct quotations from the game) -
Idiot MC: Sorry to keep you girls waiting
Girl copied from Andrealphus' work: Hi MC, I'm glad you're back, I was starting to worry about you.
Other plagiarized girl character: Yea, what the hell took you so long?
Idiot MC: I'm not going to lie to you girls, I was having sex with a woman I just met. This was totally out of character for me, this strange feeling came over me and I just couldn't resist her. After we made it out of the bathroom it was like whatever came over us vanished and we both instantly regretted it.
Plagiarized girl: Y-y-you what?

Yes. This is how bad the writing is. Rating: -1,000/10

Visuals: It's pretty standard 3d style renders. Not as good as the top tier stuff, but a little better than average. Oh, and the MC looks like Frankenstein's monster, but without the green skin.
Visuals rating: 5/10

So what do we have? This is a VN that reads like an 11-year old's fanfiction. There's no original ideas anywhere, the dev just rips off a better game and made a much, much worse copy. Add it all up, and we've got....
OVERALL RATING: -1,002.5/10
First time I've ever rated something a negative number!

well where do i start. I love what you have so far.
The story is decent. I do hope to see the MC knowing how to shoot guns. Having both parents be agents seems like the girls and MC would know how to defend themselves or atleast basic pistol knowledge.

Having the MC having a gun license(and a firearm) would fit into the story and could make for some interesting things to happen.

But all in all i like the story and where i believe your going with it.

As a AVN, this one isnt bad at all. the plot seems abit, far fetched. but lets see were the story takes us.
i ain't no master in spelling and grammar etc... but i find this one, to be not bad in that regards. yeah there's a few misspellings or sentences that make no sense. overall though, easily readable and understand the context.

Renders arent too bad, seen alot worse. though a few of the females have some cheek issues....l looking at you jamie.

animations are fine. again middle of the road, seen far worse and honestly its a plus it has them. theres afew that dont bother at all.

the characters though seem abit stiff and wooden. the poses and especially eyes, need improvement. alot of repeated scenes and animations but with a different female model. but thats okay.

liking the VN sofar however, will see how it goes.

The one downside sofar, and major factor in giving only 3 stars. choices seem to be pointless, hte dev has placed the girls for this harem, and theres no choice in weather you want them or not.

perfect example for me, is Mia. wasnt a fan of her look or tatts. so i rejected her everytime and left her out. she asked the MC out on a date. i refused.
next few scenes, the girls are talking about your upcoming dates. and sure enough the MC goes on a date with Mia, despite rejecting her.
i gave her a bad date so i didnt get the lewd scene. but mattered little, the next morning she is now your girlfriend and going around telling everyone so.

this annoyed me greatly, what was the point in even asking then. does that mean all the other choices i made, mean nothing either. is this really a Kinetic novel instead?

Ill keep following it and see if it picks up, but i dunno, really dont like the Mia model that is forced on you.

Ok my initial thoughts seeing as it is still early devlopment, the renders are good, the characters are a bit cliche (basically all are ok with each other f**ing the MC).

Writing is a bit meh, but that may improve over time not a bad start plenty of scope to get better in the future and there is not a bad amount of content available so far.

Will watch this one as it grows but its certainly not a bad game by any stretch.

3 stars for now but it has got some very good potential, don't give up Devs, this is just my opinion i rarely play games still in infancy but this intrigued me enough to play it early.