VN - Ren'Py - Unexpected Fate [v1.0] [conilesh]

VERSION: 1.0
SUMMARY: Right off the bat this game screams half baked.
RATINGS: (out of 5):

NOTE: The following are my own criteria and may require more context, so keep an open mind.

1. Models: 4
2. Animations: 0
3. General Visuals: 3
4. Characters: 2
5. Story/Pacing: 2
6. Writing/Dialogue: 2
7. UI & Gameplay: 3
8. Content Quality: 2
9. Sounds & Music: 0
10. H-Content & Fetish: 3

Average: X of 50 possible points giving a X% rating i.e. X stars.

PROS:

1. LIs look at least decent, the aunt has a nice voluptuous look to her but a bit young maybe. Cousin also looks nice with the hourglass kind of figure and nice ass.
2. Environment looks detailed enough, but the home kinda does not feel like a home, its a bit too clinical.

CONS:

1. Lighting, not sure whats going on but the MC looks like he has hair but also not because the lighting makes his scalp light up like a Xmas tree.
2. MC looks like he escaped from a detention center, hair cut, white t-shirt, barefoot, not a bag with his luggage nearby...does living in a village = homeless? Apart from that the MC has a baby face and his default expression is one of a kid who lost his favourite toy...
3. Writing is just stiff and awkward. The intro of why the MC is at his aunt just reads poorly, it has no substance and sounds too scripted.
4. Spelling and grammar need work.
5. Dialogue is also strange in that the MC seems to be talking to himself and not internalizing, using maybe "MC thinking" during that dialogue would be better? Also even his thinking feels weird and awkward, just does flow nicely or seem realistic, like a porn star trying to act.
6. Unable to change the MC name
7. No sounds or music.
8. MC is off the bat a pervert who has no issue spying on his aunt then the moment she leaves raids her draws to sniff her panties...porn logic much? Same about how he stairs and pervs on his cousin immediately when seeing her.

FINAL REMARKS, OPINIONS & SUGGESTIONS:

• Whole game feels clinical, fake, stiff, awkward, like the pieces do not fit together properly. Almost like watching some bad C rated movie. e.g. Eli coming into the house, the way she talks, stands and acts towards the MC, you kinda want to know where her charging station is because she acts like a robot.
• Game story, the way it written and plays out feels forced and fake with elements that I can only attribute to some kind of porn logic. There is no relationship development, slow corruption, natural progression make it all too obvious and awkward for me.
• Is Eli adopted? She shares no visual similarity to the mother...
• Is there a reason the MC likes to getting himself half way off then stop all the time?