VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - Unexpected [v0.5 Ep. 2 - Part 2] [XPECTED]

The game looks very good though everything else is a mess. The dialogue is very hard to understand and is very immature and juvenile. Can't be said much of the story either because up until now most of it has been character introductions and recaps. Whatever story is there does not make much sense and is so hard to understand because the English is abysmal. If the English becomes readable this could easily bump up to 3 stars as it already is. If the writing and the dialogue actually improves this can very easily be a 4 star or maybe even a 5 star game.

My Rating of this Game is:

Pros:

- Nice Graphics
- Easy Game Play
- No Grinding

Cons:


Conclusion:
I Like the Story so far, no grinding Gameplay, and the story has something like a Thriller to it so far....
The Graphics are good, and the story is being told pretty good, but for me there is the kick missing that I had with perseverance....Sorry...but I believe there will be fans out there that will get there jollies out of this Game.

Last Words:
Worth the Download.

Great potential but is currently being wasted. Terrible writing, dialogues make no sense at times. Characters aren't consistent. Good renders but aren't utilized well in "hot scenes", which makes everything dull and mediocre.

About 80% of this is character introductions for people that aren't in the story yet. Throw in grammar so terrible I can barely understand what's being said half the time, and I just can't bring myself to care about the plot. The biggest positive about this game is that the male characters don't look generic or ugly... too bad I can't say the same about the female characters since several of them I recognize from other games.

I'll try to keep it short.
Visually, this looks really good. Technically, it is sort of flashy, which takes up quite a lot of time, the menu is slow, transitions are slow, etc..

The dev obviously has talent for rendering and also knows how to work with Ren'py, however, sometimes less is more. Remove a bit of the fancy stuff, make the menu simpler, but faster and leaner.

Then we have the main problem, the story isn't particularly bad or good, but the writing is awful. I can't speak for the quality of the original language, but it is definitely really verbose.
What I can write about is that the translation is bad. Probably just an automatic translator. The difference between even a good one and a person translating the text is that all automatic translators simply translate basically word for word. They often don't understand which of the different meanings of one word is used in the original and so translate it to the wrong one, they also usually just follow the sentence structure of the original language and some languages built sentences in a completely different way to English and that results in writing you literally have to translate again in your head to something understandable.

For the life of me, I cannot understand how people can rate a VN like this with four or five stars.
Sure, the visuals are fine, but you don't need to play a VN for visuals, you can find tons of animated films and render sets online on every porn site.

I would rather play a VN with mediocre visuals, but with good writing, than play one that looks good but is so badly translated it is barely understandable (and that's only IF you put in an effort).

This could be a fine game, if the dev finds a good translator and an editor who helps them to remove filler and unnecessary, repetitive dialogue and explanations. A story isn't better because you use more words for it, on the contrary, a tightly written, precise story can often be the better choice.
Let your visuals speak for themselves and only add flavour and spices, like in sex scenes, fe.

I regret downloading this. I downloaded it because I am interested in Sci-Fi. But ugh, no thank you. I didn't like the writing style at all. It was difficult to follow, boring, and annoying. So I just gave up and held down the CTRL button to skip. The Prologue and Episode 01 are both extremely long so I never even got through all of Episode 01 before I gave up. I was hoping that there would be some good looking females or some interesting scenes (during the skipping) that would get me to go back to my last Save and play the game slowly. But there was nothing interesting. This might be a game for some people, just not for me. I want to give it one star, but I'll bump it for two stars because I can tell a lot of work went into it and this might be in someone else's niche. By the way, the skip button doesn't always work. It was annoying trying to skip through the game and it not working constantly, having to press spacebar or left click till it worked again, and repeat.

Visually it looks stunning. The environment doesnt fit the text sometimes here and there but that's fine.
The story seems interesting and includes some heavy subjects... I think... because the translation (English) is so bad that I don't understand a quarter of the text. And when I do, the text contradicts itself ( the missing gambler dad, two sentences later, is actually not missing. He's a crook cop in prison - but he actually isn't crook because keeping from bad guys is good (?), so they frame him ???? ). At least that's what I understood. There are better ways to put this together. Don't get me wrong, the sentences look grammatically correct, but when you make paragraph with those sentences it's a confusing mess. You "can" figure out what's going on, but figuring out the mystery of the story would have been more fun rather trying to figure out what's being said.
I assume the nuances of the language is being lost in the translation. Someone with a better understanding of english "needs" to look into this. There is great promise in this, but currently for me, it's unplayable.

Prologue Rework (August 24th): Renders are very good and story is only an introduction of characters that work for Haru. Hope the game in future updates has choices that matters and have impact on the story and with the relations of the girls, hope we can see more girls in the future, hope there is more choices to choose (instead of 2 to have 3) in the future, sometimes when we save then we cant pass the dialogue only pressing inside the textbox works, hope all the girls arent slutty. The game has potential but the dev needs to know what kinda story he wants to tell and not get lost and implement choices that matter on the game for both story and relation with girls.

v0.1 Prologue

As of now, the game is still in its very early stages. There is no content yet, so it's hard to give it a rating right now.

But the following things are already noticeable. The renders are very good, the models also look good. The game has music but not continuously, which is a bad decision. The only thing more annoying than no music is when after 2 minutes of silence, 30 seconds of music follows only to have 2 minutes of silence again! The music should play continuously (except maybe for a few special moments).

The story may have potential, but it also sounds very cliché. The big problem the story suffers from is the writing! The writing is often illogical (a 5 year (years not months!) old just accepts a random woman as his mom after his dad murdered his own mother before his eyes and he knew since he was born?!), bad or poor. And the author absolutely needs to work on the spelling, grammar and the sense of sentences! Many sentences simply do not make sense! Often I had to guess what he meant, because it was simply incomprehensible.

Version 1.0.1
Music: Tolerable although kinda repetitive.
Visuals: Pretty fucking good, I rather like the look of the animated menus.
Gallery included though it needs implementing.

So... why the one star?
Your choice of caffeinated beverage WILL LOCK OUT CONTENT.

Saying the decision to make a FUCKING COFFEE CHOICE block what choices you can and can't make is retarded would be an understatement.

Let me guess, "the affects are described", right?

Yeah, still a stupid decision and still one star. Though I'll probably raise the rating assuming that particular idiocy gets fixed.

The game initially gave me a very good first impression.
The slick visuals of the intro, the menu design and the sound seemed to indicate, that there's a professional at work.
However, that initial enthusiasm quickly evaporated as soon as the first couple of lines of dialog crossed the screen.

Now, I think people can be too strict when it comes to non-native speakers.
The world is a big place and you can't expect everybody to be perfectly fluent in English. I'm certainly not. So people should learn to be a bit more lenient on the internet and not throw a fit anytime misspells a word or misplaces a comma.

But there is a point, where a text becomes simply unintelligible and you can no longer understand, what is going on. And unfortunately, this is the case with this game. There are tons of sentences that were complete nonsense and seemed more like a G**gle translation gone wrong rather than something written in English.

Ren'Py is a storytelling platform. If you barely speak a language plus you're not a good writer in the first place, you've chosen pretty much the worst platform for your skills.

Now, the game looks good, sometimes even great.
The characters and backgrounds are nicely designed, but below the surface there are even more problems.

Some camera angles are really weird and uncomfortable (the bathroom scene at the beginning!), when the camera moves too close to characters or cuts them off.

Further the game has what I like to call the "Curse of the Disappearing Text box", where, anytime the background image changes, the text-box disappears for no reason. It's really annoying and once you notice it, you can't really un-see it. What makes this even worse is when you click, wait for the picture to change and the text box to reappear and it doesn't happen because the game suddenly expects you to click again mid-transition.

I'd strongly suggest the developer focus on the visuals exclusively and find someone to rewrite the whole story from scratch because even with a better translation, there would still be problems with the writing (character motivation & development, plot points etc.). .

As things are now, the game is a more pleasant experience by ignoring the text altogether and just focus on the pictures.

TL;DR: a lot of efforts put in the wrong way. Really stupid and boring game.

The story is ridiculous, like something from a bad comic book. The details are either hazy or totally unrealistic, like someone can come and steal or destroy all the information with all the backups in a huge company project (already being manufactured!), and then just leave and never be caught because he did it all while remaining totally unnoticed (by anyone, by any CCTV or security log...)

It's just nonsensical.

Dialogues are longwinded, often stating and repeating obvious things, like, "Ah well, now we are in the cafe, just as you suggested". I mean, yeah, I see we are in the cafe, why does it need to be stated?

And there are lots of fade effects and 2 second pauses, so the simplest thing like getting a cup of coffee at the airport requires several minutes of reading and clicking and waiting for pauses and reading and clicking:

noora "Well..."
noora "...Should we have a coffee before we go?"
noora "Of course, if you want..."
noora "...Besides, it'll take away our tiredness."
mc "Sure, why not?"
noora "Let's go then..."
...(some long travel)...
mc "Ah yes, we're here as you suggested."
mc "I wonder how you'd like your coffee, young lady."
noora "Hahaha, I'll have an espresso."
mc "Coming right up."
...

And then that "super bright" assistant of yours asks you FIVE times if you would go to the speech tomorrow. I mean, why would I answer a simple question 4 times?

If you don't believe me, count it yourself:

noora "Well... I'll tell you what..."
noora "..Why don't you join me tomorrow instead of spending your time alone at my house?!"
...(That was asking it the 1st time)...
noora "And this would be a great opportunity for you to touch base again with Keen, huh?"
noora "Unless, of course, you have something else to do — I'd rather not go alone, either."
noora "I get bored by myself in crowded environments. I wouldn't go at all if it were up to me, but there's my mother..."
noora "...Will you come with me?"
...(That was asking it the 2nd time)...
mc "(What am I going to do all day tomorrow? Alone...)"
mc "(If I go with her, I can see Keen again after a long time.)"
noora "I guess you're thinking, have you decided?"
...(That was asking it the 3rd time)...
...menu: "Go with her"...
...(That was answering it the 1st time)...
mc "Okay, I'm in."
...(That was answering it the 2nd time)...
noora "Huh?"
...(That was asking it the 4th time)...
mc "I said, okay, I'm coming."
...(That was answering it the 3rd time)...
mc "And you're right, this is my chance. Also, we'll have a good time, I guess..."
noora "So now we're going together tomorrow!?"
...(That was asking it the 5th time)...
mc "Yes, we're going together tomorrow."
...(That was answering it 4th time)...

Seriously, you need several minutes to answer ONE SIMPLE QUESTION.

This manner of narration gets boring very quickly.

The user interface is flashy, with nice animations, but that makes it slow, and you need a lot of clicking and waiting (compared to standard RenPy) just in order to save the game. So it feels like some additional waste of your time.

Some choices that you make have no logical connection at all to their consequences. Quite the opposite, the seemingly best choice (of those nonsensical sorts of coffee) leads to the worst consequences (by limiting your choices).

Girls are not really beautiful. There is one cute girl (the barista), but she doesn't seem to be a love interest, so that's just another annoying detail.

And Noora - that assistant of yours, dumber than a sack of potatoes, who needs to be told 4 times to understand a simple "yes", with her grotesque "Hahaha"s, eternally pouted lips and stupid facial expressions, is my love interest?

Well, the renders are of good quality.

Sounds? There are some good ones, but put on the loop they quickly become annoying. And some music is just unpleasantly noisy.

The coding is sloppy (like "jump" instructions followed by unreachable "return"s).

Conclusion: don't play that.

Version: 1.0.1

Loved it!! The graphics and scenario are amazing. Have no doubt about that, guys. If you're interested in technology themed stuffs, I highly recommend it.
I don't know if it has a connection, but Noora is the spit of that girl from My Sweet Neighbor. Their characteristics are so familiar too. That's a nice reference if it has any connection.
The storyline might come complicated to you at first, but keep playing guys. I'm sure you will get the story better while playing it.
Can't wait for the next updates, good luck for the XPECTED staffs!

It's the first project of the developer ig. Although it's the first one, I celebrate him with my whole heart. The graphics are excellent, especially 18+ scenes are bitchin. Even if I find some parts funny in the story, it isn't enough to drop any stars. I hope you guys keep up with the same quality in the next updates <3

Well, I just finished playing it and I just loved it!

I must admit that it has excellent storyline. Its storyline is not familiar with other many games. It was the strongest point that catched me. I felt like watching a movie or something while playing it.

Secondly, the way it does not contain NTR has received my attention and like. I personally would not prefer my crush to get f*cked by someone else lol.

Also, there are so hot chicks! I think I am in love with Shay. Oh, it is the other point that the game is not familiar with others because I have not seen a girl modelling like Shay has, in the other games. I celebrate the designer at this topic.

I am impatiently waiting for new updates, guys. Thanks for your efforts!

Amazing renders, and a lot of care appears to be put into each scene. The pacing is going well and looking forward to where the story leads. Over all definitely a game and visual story worth investing time in. Highly recommend for those interested in the genre. In my top 5 current adult game downloads. Definitely worthy of a growing fan base, this creator does not disappoint.

PS: I am the patron/support for this game. 10/10

It's hard for me, because it's very short but it's amazing. The characters and backgrounds is wonderful.

and the milf is hot. I have to say this

There are still spelling errors. But all that's left is wow.

Recommended.

Excellent game, the story is very nice, good graphic and the milf is hot, well done! Unfortunately the game is too quick: this idea should be developed more and become a longer story. It will be a great game!

Renders and overall story seem interesting and with a lot of potential. However I think that the dev should proofread his work, maybe show just the text/script to someone and ask for feedback, I believe that would improve the quality by a lot.

It will definitely become a wonderful game in the future. The operation in the background looks nice and different. I prefer this realism to the ridiculous relationship indicators. The animations are great but I think it could be much better with different angles.

Story: 4.8/5
Spelling: 4/5
Renders: 5/5
Potential: 5/5
Gameplay 4.5/5
Animations: 4.7/5

Good job!