alex andrews
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Nobody wants women to have pubic hair. Stay in the shadows were you came from.Writing seems interesting, but it's disappointing that Ali dosen't have bush at least before photoshots.
Would be suiting for her shy personality.
Never say "nobody wants", its your opinion, not from all. i enjoy with or without, a good razor fix any problems!Nobody wants women to have pubic hair. Stay in the shadows were you came from.
The crash happened when clicking on one of the red links in the scene, right as she is about to go topless. It was a link about Leo's emotions or his demeanor, something like that. Cannot recall exactly. Found the traceback, posted below.Thank you for the reports.
Did the crash happen in Scene 3? If so, and the error code popped up e0s3_Passive_Sex, that is fixed in 0.8.4.
Edit:
- Camera flashes have been reduced to the two most important placements.
- The button down pathing was actually caused by a misplaced else statement, causing the crop top branch to intercept the button down branch. It should be working in the next build (0.8.5).
- Spellings are an ongoing project as I continue to polish scene-by-scene
- If you have information on any of the other errors that popped up, please let me know.
Thanks again!
happy hear ur adding pubes! it really fits the character.Hey there! I am the creator of the game. I agree with you! I set a personal goal to release the game on April 11th, regardless of it's state. That was one of the things that got left out.
I already have a slot for it in the layered image definition that will allow me to add it in as soon as art for it is complete. Right now, I'm polishing the writing, fixing mistakes, making transitions smoother (I've already fixed the one that prevents the choice box from animating into the scene while fast-skipping).
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Thank you!
its usually the new accounts with 0 likes that try to bait. many ppl love pubes.Nobody wants women to have pubic hair. Stay in the shadows were you came from.
I really appreciate you typing all of this up. I’ve been working in my own bubble, and it’s a relief to pop the bubble and see what other people think.Great start to this game! The Female Agent general design / plot structure marries itself quite smoothly to the Life is Strange aesthetic. I also liked the sense of agency (perhaps coerced agency) the MC has. She's doing this because she wants to do this and she just so happens to like modeling. Maybe she'll 'just so happen' to like sex work, as well... It's still corruption, in a way, but more in a 'self discovery' kind of way than a 'mind break, abandon all morality' kind of way. It's nice and refreshing.
I will say, in the early phone scene between Ali and Britney, Britney comes off as a brutally toxic, manipulative friend. She ignores Ali's own concerns. She guilts her for being rich. She drives the conversation wherever she wants it to go. Now, this isn't a bad thing as long as it is intentional. If Britney is meant to be manipulative, then you did a brilliant job selling that. If Ali is mean to be naive and a bit of a doormat, placating Britney, accepting her worldview and her judgment, that's you're on target. I can totally see how this relationship can lead to Ali entering a new world of skin and sex, with Britney pushing her along.
If you wanted Britney to be genuine and a solid friend, then I just didn't buy it.
On a similar note around characterization, I assumed at the start that Ali would be a smart, competent journalism student who was looking for a 'big story' on sex workers and decides to go undercover, and accidentally gets sucked into that world. Kind of like Female Agent. But that is not the Ali on display here. This character is naive, unsure of herself, clearly not overly analytical, rather superficial and vain (her upbringing didn't help her here). She seems like someone who wants to be deep, wants to be clever, wants to be bold, but she isn't any of those things yet. She's a shallow teenager looking for direction. Dave and Britney run roughshod over her life because she's spineless. Maybe this new line of work will give her that sense of purpose and power she lacks?
Again, if your goal was to have an initially weak, clueless main character who is coerced relentlessly, then you did an A+ job. If she's supposed to be some wicked clever journalist who trades her dignity for a riveting story to really fire up her career... I'm not seeing it.
Frankly, I love the way it's set up now. Ali's somewhat spineless and submissive. She couldn't even bring herself to tell Dave off or tell him about the photoshoot and ended up just taking his dick, not for the first time (well, that's what Ali did in my playthrough, I know you can tell him to fuck off). She's not used to working hard for what she wants - she's not even sure she knows what she wants. Then Leo shows up and apparently she's good at this and it's so easy. And down the rabbit hole we go from there.
Can't wait to play more!
A few other thoughts:
And a final word of advice: choices make writing the game more difficult and then that stretches out development time. You've got a great premise, here. Err on the side of telling the complete story with some small choices along the way. Too many branches and everything goes to shit.
- Totally agree that Ali should have pubic hair
- In the Dave sex scene, he mentions taking off her pants, but her pants stayed on in the paper doll avatar. Must be a bug.
- In the Leo photo shoot, I did not have Ali wear a bra, but she mentioned taking off her bra in the scene
- In the final phone call with Britney, I think Ali should be showing a bit of camel toe in the panties she's wearing. I don't know, maybe that's just personal preference, but they seem like the kind of material that might cling like that.
- Should Ali find modeling / exhibitionism a turn-on? I imagine there needs to be a kind of sexual awakening as part of her progress. Didn't see any of that yet, but her libido should start to fire up in situations like this more and more so as the story progresses
- The current model for Ali looks slightly East Asian in terms of her face (half Chinese half European was my read of her). Can we in a later version of the game make some slight edits to her face and skin? Nothing so complex as Female Agent's clunky 'choose your country' thing, as that's difficult to then code into the story. I would just like to make Ali more pale and with different eyes. Otherwise the model's perfect.
- Art for clothes is excellent. No issues there.
[/QUOTE]The crash happened when clicking on one of the red links in the scene, right as she is about to go topless. It was a link about Leo's emotions or his demeanor, something like that. Cannot recall exactly. Found the traceback, posted below.
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The error that I was able to just ignore, was for the flash forward scene with Dave, I think that was what was supposed to be there. I kept refusing to call or text him and she said something about how the relationship was doomed to fail. In the error text, it seemed there were three possible scenes that were supposed to play, depending on choices, I imagine. I think one was like "cold sex" or similar.
Thank you. This is already fixed in the upcoming 0.8.5 build."ScriptError: could not find label 'e0s0_P2'." Crashed to desktop. Traceback.txt attached.
Happens when clicking on "concern" in the following line:
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also: typo "genuine" instead of "geuine"
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So I"m an idiot and was looking in the wrong place for the Android build tool. Anyway, found it.Android please
Check out TFGames. Mental transformations like becoming more sexual, life transformations like becoming a sex worker, and minor physical transformations like tans, makeup, tattoos, they all count as 'TF.' It's a pretty active site and new releases can posted on the front page for a while.Anybody know good Subreddits to post my game launch on?
Reddit accounts for about 40% of my clicks so far.
I’ve posted to: r/renpy, r/interactivefiction, r/avn_lovers, and r/lewdgames.
What about other platforms?
Thank you!
Thank you! I made a profile but I won't be able to submit the game until I meet the post criteria. Tonight I'm focused on smashing bugs, so it'll be a job for tomorrow.Check out TFGames. Mental transformations like becoming more sexual, life transformations like becoming a sex worker, and minor physical transformations like tans, makeup, tattoos, they all count as 'TF.' It's a pretty active site and new releases can posted on the front page for a while.
"Ali’s libido will start kicking up soon. Remember, at this point in time Ali is experiencing pressure from a lot of directions. It felt more natural to have her experience relief at the end of the shoot, rather than arousal. Now that she knows it’s not the negative experience she expected it to be, there’s room for new reactions."I really appreciate you typing all of this up. I’ve been working in my own bubble, and it’s a relief to pop the bubble and see what other people think.
The pubic hair system is coded in, and will go live in 0.8.5. It’s built to be expandable to allow hair/eye color customization, etc.
I already have an “overlay” system that currently only handles the blush. In the next episode it will handle “tan”, “sunburn” and “wet” skin overlays.
Should be easy enough to add skin tone adjustment since the system to handle it already exists, but I’ll have to look into it more before I make promises. The base body may have to start paler, with overlays to go darker. It’ll require testing.
Eye type might be a challenge because the current expression system isn’t built to handle player-defined types (though it’s not out of the question). The additional art is also a factor.
For the phone call with Britney. Agreed.
Ali’s libido will start kicking up soon. Remember, at this point in time Ali is experiencing pressure from a lot of directions. It felt more natural to have her experience relief at the end of the shoot, rather than arousal. Now that she knows it’s not the negative experience she expected it to be, there’s room for new reactions.
As for choices. I agree with you. I’ve seen my share of VNs branch into World Tree proportions and take half a year or more to make any progress.
I’m still exploring exactly how I want to handle long-term consequences. And this is a big reason why the prologue scoped tightly and structured in scenes. I wanted to experiment with limited carryover to see how many threads I can invisibly snip to manage growth, and how much work is actually involved in accounting for all of these variables so I can better estimate the work-load involved.
The Ali in the prologue is very much exactly as you described her. I wanted to start her in a place where she has lots of room to grow. How her friends and family develop and react alongside her? That’s a secret for now.
I’m at my “real job” right now. So I should probably stop typing this and get back to work.
Thank you again for the write up.
For a long time the name was “Off the Record”. Until I learned about the other well known adult game by the same name.Where did the name come from? What does it mean? And what's your plan for the future of this game?