VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - Virgin Father [v0.05] [Knighthood]

IT is not taht the game itself is bad, i can not know for sure. The bad thing i can point out is the illusion watermark, i mean that i could see the short time i played which was the introduction...

Seriously, its not that i am not able to understand what the text is trying to say, its just that your English is really bad, i thinking google translate but i actually thought it could do a lot better then this.

It takes away any potential enjoyment, so, the main recomendation would be, either releasing in english as optional so at least native speakers of your language could enjoy it, or remove and release it better translated.

Im not native English speaker and i make tons os errors, but the english of this game is really something else.

I really did not enjoy this.

The game set up is for a slow burn where you get invested in the relationship between the father and the daughter. That's fine, but this needs some decent writing to get the reader to actually be invested. However, the writing is proper terrible.

The writing will pull you out of any immersion almost every single sentence. Here's a nice example ("father" just came"):
" You are too energetic, you just came out once but it doesn't make you weak anymore.".

The tone does not fit either, the writer makes jokes, breaks the 4th wall regularly and directly uses "funny" sound clips or music stolen from Nier to set the scene.

It gets a bit more enjoyable after you manage to skip the introduction, but there are plenty better games than this.

This game is so boring the MC is a dumb ass loser who is trying to be funny but he just not. the characters designs are mediocre at best the writhing is atrocious the story is just not believable and that even while using (porn game logic) as for 0.5 there is no sex scenes in this game also dev like to have the girls molested In front of mc because that's edgy i guess i'm giving this game 1 star just for the effort this game is not for me and i'm saying that while my favorite genre is (Dad daughter) so i can't recommande this game.

story are good when i play it .. but im waiting for this game 1 year ago just update now ..
i hope that the maker are still OK and continued this project
when i review this game are many scene are changing but it looking good when akari know about his background i know the MC isnt real father but this story are good

I'm upping this to four stars after the re-do. The Engrish seems to be gone and it maintains it's good humor. I don't love it enough to call it five stars, but it's a good fun game and well worth the time.
First release review- I am cautiously, very cautiously optimistic about this. Yes, there's some Engrish. Its unfortunate, but tolerable.

The core idea here, a virgin who starts to live with a girl who thinks he's her father due to mom shenanigans is actually quite novel. I'm interested to see how this goes. The girl is cute too. The first pervert moment was genuinely funny. That said, its quite short and its far, far too soon to see whether the dev's skill as an author will be able to be worth the engrish going forward.
update 2: remains 3 stars. Writing is still pretty funny in a meme'y way. There's one sound effect in particular that was wonderful. The music is good. One potential problem besides the Engrish, the game hasn't made me care about "daughter" yet. She was pretty much constantly overshone this update by her friend. We'll see how that develops.