The story is a little too childish for me. At first, I saw a great intrigue in prospect. I said to myself, we are going to discover the characters with the introduction of their story and the links either with the MC or with his family. Their involvement in every part of the plot, but until the end of Chapter 6, even the Mc's background is barely revealed. The dialogue is superficial (still lots of spelling, grammar, etc.), and...well, everything about this game is superficial. The NPCs know things they've never heard of, and everything is confusing to the point that it becomes impossible to delve into this story. Also impossible to develop a relationship with a particular LI, and the same for a possible harem mod. The dev has to concentrate a lot more, and write the whole story, before launching, rather than writing bits of story on a corner of a paper tablecloth. It is clear that the ambition of the dev far exceeds its capacity in the field of writing. It's quite ironic given the profession of the Mc. I'm not saying that meanly. The story is good and has a lot of potential. Here, all the characters are intriguing down to the smallest details of their lives, and every information about one of them is thrown like a bomb, and then a great upheaval in the story is expected, but we remain suspended without knowing if this implies other consequences. A simple narration at the introduction of each character would suffice to understand what their position was before the Mc fled from his home and how they evolved during his absence. Then, we would have to develop the paths of each LI separately to make them possible, rather than suggesting that the Mc wants to fuck anything with two legs. There are also other issues such as the plausibility of events. For example, a simple punch in the face as a prison guard is worth a week of survival for the Mc, while letting his girlfriend Miru get fucked buys him only one day? Really? Without mentioning the fact that Miru seems to be part of a yakuza family, which masters the art of combat. She would like to kill Danna, the woman she was cheated on, but she lets herself be fucked by an inmate without question, to save her boyfriend? seriously? That she agrees to make deliveries for the gang to save the Mc's butt remained reasonable, but the rest... We don't believe it for a second. On top of that, she disappears without giving any explanation to the Mc, after doing all that How his 20-year-old twin Leia became the boss of several nightclubs, or his friend Dana the same age became a famous lawyer who earns 6 figures a year... I mean Wow! What incredible women. All this remains possible, but it is necessary to deepen the explanations to make this story coherent. Also, the female dialogues need to be reworked. Not all women talk like truckers, damn it! In short, there's a lot of untapped potential here, and it's going to take a lot of work to give this story the immersion it deserves. The new version has better renders and animations, but so far I don't see any improvement yet, just some changes. That said, I personally find the new Miru (closer to its sister in the first version) much more beautiful. Their relationship seems much better too. Naughty games and a lot of complicity between them. I like it and I hope these changes are a sign of a good evolution. Hopefully these changes will be better oriented, to fully exploit the full potential of this game. I rate 3/5, because I guess a lot of ideas for improvements. The images are beautiful, and the scenes are well done. Some scenes are really funny. The cousin who swallows the umbrella in the bar, or the girls who are completely stoned who fight with a raccoon. I wish good luck to the dev. If he deserves to be criticized, he also deserves to be encouraged to give so much richness to his game, in accordance with his ideas.