VN - Ren'Py - Word of Mouth [S1 v0.0.7F] [Le Gato]

S1 v0.0.7F

Sorry to say this but very immature storytelling. The concept and idea is really good but extremely poor execution, First off, be ready to have blue balls for a good 3-4 hours. All interesting scenes and relationships develop much later. At least if the way they develop was mature, this would have been enjoyable, unfortunately the plot is so flimsy that it breaks early on and becomes super boring.

S1 v0.0.7F

Writing is horrible:
So many internal dialogue a la "i should take a bath" "ah, the bath was sooo good"
These ppl are talking so much to themselfs that i thought the should take meds against the voices....

Graphics:
Ok-ish. Nothing to bad but also nothing to talk about,

Choices:
Nearly non existent. After i had my time with all the inner voices, i just started to skip and there are nearly no choices at all and even then, the feel like they dont matter at all.
Imo its a kinetic novel and only a VN in name.

This adorable little tale has grown IMO by leaps and bounds! The reason it's a '4' instead of '5' is multifold:
1- the younger women sometimes seem as if they were transposed onto a picture and shrunk. BUT -- this is not the case with the model of Aria, whose character and story is luscious. I hope somehow Elizabeth's "sister", especially, and her actual niece can be made to look more real and less "I shrunk the lady" look.
And 2- the dialogue can seem somewhat wooden at times.
But, really, I LOVE older/younger FF lust/love, and I applaud your determination. You go, girl(s)!

Finally, a lesbian AVN! Bravo! We can see a real improvement in the production throughout the story, both graphically and narratively. We also have to be careful not to rush things, as the scenes are a bit too fast and should have options: kissing, caressing, 69, etc., touching a particular body part, licking, breasts, etc. This would enhance the lesbian aspect, which is too often reduced to brief intercourse and a final squirt. Since there are a lot of young girls, it would also be good to implement a learning system, obviously.
Finally, we should also consider improving the usability with an integrated walkthrough that better explains important points such as dominance or submission points and branching; a possible character renaming and a gallery?
It's a nice surprise for me, and I congratulate the developer and I'm putting this AVN on the radar! Long live Elizabeth and Holly! 4/5 for the effort and the theme !

Very nice VN with female protaginist and a lesbian path. The story starts somewhat slowly with intzroducing a cast of female characters and setting up the plot. But then, it picks up steam with the different chacters getting together and their paths overlapping. The art is well done, the story is intriguing and the choices are fairly straight forward. The story is linear in nature. It is light entertainment.

I really like the author's writing style, every character is likable, and the author is particularly good at depicting the emotional changes during character interactions. I've always believed that excellent erotic games shouldn't just be about piling up sex scenes, but should have more logical emotional expression. Richer emotional descriptions can make the game characters more vivid and the story more engaging.

Great game can't wait for more as it is very teasing and anticing with great story i give it 5 stars as it is very deserving of it. Especially if we get the mother daughter aunt fucking each other talk about hot hot hot

[Review as of version 0.0.4F]

Redheads & Lesbians & Incest. Oh my!

Things I Like:

+ Pure lesbian action. Only males are minor characters, such as an ex-boyfriend and a cheating husband, that provide background narrative.

+ Scenes are from an omniscient perspective, so you see all the characters and sometimes their thoughts. This is great, because the MC is so cute and it would be a shame not to see her in the scenes.

+ MC is a smart, kind, and caring woman. Sexually adventurous, but not a slut or a predator.

+ Multiple female protagonists. Many scenes with different groupings of girls, where you make decisions for different characters. Good variety of body types.

+ Slow burn. Action so far is a lot of teasing, kissing, and masturbation. Story is building up relationships between several different pairs of characters.

+ Older women with younger girls. Relationships developing based on seduction and gentle persuasion rather than corruption or coercion.

+ Incest being set up for aunt/niece, mother/daughter, sister/sister.

General comments:

* Story so far has little drama. Some potential conflicts about business practices and mystery about some characters not knowing how they are related to others. This isn’t a criticism. Story is fine as a light-hearted romp with beautiful women developing relationships.

* I like this VN so much that I am supporting the author on SS. Author posts weekly dev updates and so far releases come out every 1 to 2 months. Author quickly responds to comments and suggestions, and is active in this thread.

About WoM [S1 v0.03.F], I am writing this review.
So far the story is relatively simple, within which the lewd scenes are soft core (which I myself like) . The storyline so far is casual and quick, but there seems to be a great conspiracy about Ms. Combell, the MC's former boss, and her attitudes on other young girls. Her interior monologue was also confusing at the early stage of the story.
There seems to be more secrets about MC and her sister's family, relative to Ms. Combell.
Conclusion, this is a soft core lesbian story, which has good potential so far. I am looking for more work on the story telling.

PS: I don't mind more intense plots about MC with the young girls.

loving the game so far keep up the good work . there are not to many good lesbian games out there every female protaganist is always a dumb slut that gets used happy to see something else for a change

Quite enjoyable so far. Played S1 v0.02.F. A good bit of content in the game. Play 3 and a half days of scenes. Only one H scene though.

Really beautiful character models across the board and we get quite a few good angles and close-ups. Dev does seem to have a bit of a foot fetish, so that might turn some folks off. Lighting seems very heavy on a camera mounted spotlight at times. There is an odd vignetting around the models in the centre of the screen in a few moments, but not all the time. Otherwise, the visuals are superb. Excluding the small noted section of Blender renders.

The characters have interesting personalities. Not fully fleshed out yet, but we definitely get an idea of who each character is. Not the most depth I've seen in a game, but most of that seems to be there as setup for some amazing H scenes later on.

Personally really liked the family aspects. Some history there that I very much look forward to exploring as the game progresses. And the promise of an even larger family hiding in the wings has me so intrigued.

The antagonist is interesting. IMO, it could be removed and we could just have a nice sweet slice of life story here just as easily. We're still early days so exactly what each antagonistic force is after is still unclear.

The script could definitely use some work. A proofreader would be a good start. For instance, MC does not seem to have a bath in her apartment but keeps saying she's off to have one in several early scenes. A lot of the dialogue and thoughts can feel quite forced and unnatural. Hopefully, that improves as dev gets experience, but I still recommend a proofreader.

Overall, I enjoyed it. I like what's here and I definitely want more. Keep up the good work and try and elevate the few flaws if you can.