I like what's going on here, but the title doesn't fit what's happening.
The title should be closer to "Losing Norman's Harem" instead of "Your Harem will be mine" which would imply you're playing an antagonist character there to cucked the MC, Norman.
Really, you're just some entity witnessing Norman get cucked, and slightly influencing him to either get more cucked or getting him some scraps.
I think the writing is engaging enough to read but it might benefit from focusing on how your choices makes thing worse for Norman. Like if we had to really make him lose his harem to the "ugly bastard" archetypes you see hinted at.
The setup is there, where you got impossible charming handsome MC, and your goal is to fuck him over as some random entity.
I do like the characters though. They all fit an archetype that will satisfy a decent amount of people. I personally really like the look of the therapist character. 10/10
The title should be closer to "Losing Norman's Harem" instead of "Your Harem will be mine" which would imply you're playing an antagonist character there to cucked the MC, Norman.
Really, you're just some entity witnessing Norman get cucked, and slightly influencing him to either get more cucked or getting him some scraps.
I think the writing is engaging enough to read but it might benefit from focusing on how your choices makes thing worse for Norman. Like if we had to really make him lose his harem to the "ugly bastard" archetypes you see hinted at.
The setup is there, where you got impossible charming handsome MC, and your goal is to fuck him over as some random entity.
I do like the characters though. They all fit an archetype that will satisfy a decent amount of people. I personally really like the look of the therapist character. 10/10