I want to give this 3 stars but I think this has the potential to become great so I give one more star to push it upwards
The graphics are just nice , it's koikatsu, nothing out of the ordinary
There are however some interesting image effects for lack of a better word
Anyway as of right now (v 0.3) I think this game is more of a "story" game than a porn game, and this is perfectly fine, if the author reads this I would like to tell him that he (or she) shoudn't feel pressured to put sex scenes in his game if it derails from the story or doesn't fit into the narrative
Now to the sore point : the writing
It's kind of weird actually because there are some passages where it's well written, and some passages with mind-shattering typos (sorry dev, I played this a few days ago and I can't go back to tell which ones). I think it's safe to assume the dev is not a native English speaker (neither am I, nobody is perfect) so maybe ask for help on this matter
Another thing I want to bring is the utter idiocy of certain situations, we get the mc is traumatized by something in his past, and that he's got a particular fetish, but that does not in my opinion explain with he behaves so irrationally at times, I will adress the worst point of this game that made me enraged (yeah, I raged like a mad boar on a ren'py VN at 1AM, first time for everything I guess)
there are some spoilers ahead but I will try to be vague
When a certain character is lying in her blood and he goes to help her only to be tackled and assaulted, he doesn't try to get off, lets himself be used and pathetically cums in his pants, and then stays downed for a veeery long time (might have been a few seconds, but narratively it feels like an eternity)
I understand that he kind of likes to be dominated, but I would think that saving his friend takes precedence (I'm weird like that)
To be fair, I had a great time with your game until this particular moment, this was excrutiatingly stupid and unbearable (to the point of me popping my review cherry on this site after 3 years of lurking)
TLDR for the dev : find a corrector for the typos, make the MC less of a wimp and a dumbass, and you'll do great
The graphics are just nice , it's koikatsu, nothing out of the ordinary
There are however some interesting image effects for lack of a better word
Anyway as of right now (v 0.3) I think this game is more of a "story" game than a porn game, and this is perfectly fine, if the author reads this I would like to tell him that he (or she) shoudn't feel pressured to put sex scenes in his game if it derails from the story or doesn't fit into the narrative
Now to the sore point : the writing
It's kind of weird actually because there are some passages where it's well written, and some passages with mind-shattering typos (sorry dev, I played this a few days ago and I can't go back to tell which ones). I think it's safe to assume the dev is not a native English speaker (neither am I, nobody is perfect) so maybe ask for help on this matter
Another thing I want to bring is the utter idiocy of certain situations, we get the mc is traumatized by something in his past, and that he's got a particular fetish, but that does not in my opinion explain with he behaves so irrationally at times, I will adress the worst point of this game that made me enraged (yeah, I raged like a mad boar on a ren'py VN at 1AM, first time for everything I guess)
there are some spoilers ahead but I will try to be vague
When a certain character is lying in her blood and he goes to help her only to be tackled and assaulted, he doesn't try to get off, lets himself be used and pathetically cums in his pants, and then stays downed for a veeery long time (might have been a few seconds, but narratively it feels like an eternity)
I understand that he kind of likes to be dominated, but I would think that saving his friend takes precedence (I'm weird like that)
To be fair, I had a great time with your game until this particular moment, this was excrutiatingly stupid and unbearable (to the point of me popping my review cherry on this site after 3 years of lurking)
TLDR for the dev : find a corrector for the typos, make the MC less of a wimp and a dumbass, and you'll do great