The Lost One [Ren'py]
Grammatical errors throughout. Need a proof-reader: "is it" instead of "it is"; pant vs pants; Missing comas, losing prepositions, incorrect tenses, etc. English gets progressively worse. Developer not a native speaker?
Actions given in the game only have 1 choice. Checking to see the reader isn't skipping the text?
Subtle 4th wall break. Not much humor otherwise.
CG of Laura is okay. Good looking but is surprisingly 2D for 3DCG character. Complete lack of any sort of lighting effect flattens the image. Background images are the highlight of this game; good angles and interesting perspectives.
This is an introduction and nothing more. You find out the MC's name, what he does, and his home situation. There is a story hook, but it's pretty thin. The story relies completely on the reader's curiosity to find out more; which it can lose quickly if nothing interesting happens. Not sure if the plot device is an intentional 4th wall break. Could be interesting if it is....
Bottom line: There is nothing here yet. I spent more time on this review than on the game.