VN - Ren'Py - 16 Years Later! [Ep.14 Full] [Wetdreamwalker]

(as of version 0.1)

although a bit too early in development to make any valid assessment, this is so far a good story. that being said, i hope Dev will keep it on a solid track, with reasonable conflicts and on a good rhythm or Beat.
i see there’s a lot of room for improvement, though; i’ll point up a couple ideas:

• Language: it would be good to have an English native speaker proofreading the text itself, for there are several issues — especially gender related ones;

• Cinematographic approach: the fade-out / fade-in is indeed a nice technique; yet, it is overused and a bit too slow. perhaps Dev should experiment with different tempos (lengths) and retain it to ply only on special moments;

two more things:
it was nice of Ricoh to code a Walkthrough for the game; as far as i see, it works flawlessly.
i wish Wetdreamwalker (Dev) good luck with this novel, and hope this review may've helped those who read it.

cheers, all.

It is pretty cool. I like the renders and looking forward how the story grows. I hope there is more like the "father/daughter"-thing. There is a part in the game, the scene while the MC talks to his two daughters, Tegan and Felicia. They talk about the aunt and the character changes from "her" to "his". That was a little akward