Pretty good game, but has a lot of bugs. Here's a list of what I remember:
1) Got an error when trying to progress through the game night for Kiara. More specifically, clicking "Continue" threw me a popup error when conversing with Sam during the aftermath. This is really bad since it locks me out of progression.
2) Entering the La Lune (I could've gotten the name wrong, but at any rate it's one of the buildings) leads you to a page with bugged buttons.
3) You can get stuck if you check your phone too early, think it's during the first or second day of the game. Clicking "Turn the Phone off" does nothing.
4) Mental construct seems completely broken, when I first gained access to it and tried to build the first two construct, clicking the buttons seem to do nothing. But when I check the Vault, I noticed I got a tonne of duplicates. The mental construct page is straight up bugged later on.
5) You can repeatedly dive into Blaire's dream until infinity when she's sunbathing during the weekend, and exiting afterward (if you do it past late night) throws you to a blank page.
6) In Blaire's dream, if you go the store room again and check the shelves again, the button where the key item is cannot be clicked again. Also there's an extra line break somewhere in the rest of the items.
Some QoL stuff I think is really necessary:
1) Show skill progress. I had to guess what level my Chemistry and Woodwork are at because there's no indicator anywhere.
2) Block off access to certain things to avoid bugs from happening. For example, blocking off La Lune until you gained access to it would at least prevent players from hitting the dead end. I'm also not sure if I'm supposed to be able to trigger the shadow that trains your Breaking and Entering event before I got an event that tells me that it's necessary.
3) Inform the players that your skill can no longer be trained in a certain area (Stealth, Telepathy) and that they should move on to a different location.
4) Fix gambling. Currently it seems like I lose 90% of the time no matter what choice I pick (16 Telepathy and 11 Stealth as of current playthrough) or how high my Skills are. May even need a complete overhaul because what's the point of being able to choose between play safe, be cautious or go big when the text doesn't actually give you any hint AT ALL as to which choice is better at a given time? If there's at least a line of text such as "opponent A B C is nervous on the inside", then the players would know that it's probably a good idea to go big. This also shows that you're actually using Telepathy to cheat and win. Right now there is none of this, and it feels like trying to play cards with your eyes closed.
5) Reduce the grind. I understand that when the rest of the girls and systems etc are added you'll probably be able to improve the effect you have on the girls etc (like instead of the standard +2 when you enter a dream, you can upgrade it to +10), but right now it feels unnecessarily grindy, and this is despite exploiting the weekend "infinite" dream bug on Blaire. Just reduce it now and increase it back to what you feel like is proper balance later.
6) Give an option to change font/background color. Did you account for colorblind people who might want to play your game? Also, The font and background color are both black when saving/loading from the main page. Have to go to Index/Vault/Phone first and click Save/Load if I actually want to see what the text of the saves are.
And finally some suggestions:
1) I normally don't suggest this to text-based games because the themes they contain are incompatible/focused elsewhere, but this is a mind control/hypnotism game where you can dive into another person's dream while they're sleeping, so I thought it might fit. Please consider adding sleep molestation/sex scenes in the future.
Since day 1 your snobby neighbor is sleeping and suntanning in full view (in her garden, but still), and after you're granted access to her house, she sleeps in a skimpy bikini right next to you, like come on it's weird not to have at least an option to touch her breast while she's asleep. Also you have the abilities called Stealth and later on Breaking and Entering, so surely some voyeurism are planned, right? I think it would be a wasted opportunity not to implement it, even as just a mini scene for each girl. For example, Glassix, another mind control game allow you to break into the girls' home and molest/fuck them when they're deep in hypnotism-induced sleep (with incremental progression).
2) Add a hypnotism ability, the dictionary one where you induce people to sleep/sleep-like state. This seems practical. You want to enter another person's dreams, but you can't always guarantee that you can catch them sleeping because of range and stuff. And what if you run into an insomniac? So it's only logical that you want to train to induce people into sleeping, excluding more direct methods such as sleeping pills. If you think it breaks the world's logic - I know you mentioned in your writing that it's incredibly difficult for Super to directly interfere with one's mind or something - then just make it the real life version. I'm sure you can add a scene where, when you first enter their dreams, you leave a suggestion in their minds that makes them want you to help them with their sleeping problem or something.
3) This isn't really a suggestion per se, but more of an advice. Right now you have an intriguing-as-fuck plot (for a sex game) that I would read even if you remove all the sexiness from it, so definitely don't give up on it. I really want to know if Sam is ever going to get back to his body, if we might have a boss fight, if we might get to the women dorms of the Super headquarters wink wink etc. It's also why I think you should reduce the grind; I spent 68 fucking days learning the system and chasing Blaire only (cuz Kiara bugged out) and I still haven't hit the end of her scenes. I can't imagine how much longer it'll take when the rest of the girls are added, and that is without accounting for the main story.
All in all, the game has huge potential, and since there's no images I can actually use the power of my imagination to imagine the girls instead of watching some really outdated / terrible porn actress gifs / images. I hope everything goes well for you!
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