(Review as of v0.2)
-The main character's design is bad. It looks vector based, flat, and boring.
-There is way too much writing for very little pay-off. It suffers from the mentality of "I'm making a comedy game" but everything is just toned as comedic, without any actual jokes or anything funny. "It's a porn game, it's not supposed to be serious" is a flawed perspective for a creator to have when these projects takes hours and hours and lots of work. This wreaks of that. Have some pride in your project!
-There are so many screens without any art, and the prose isn't strong enough to justify that.
-The best art looks copy/pasted or AI generated.
+I like the designs for Hermoine and Beatrix in the banner
This isn't completely hopeless, but there's only room for improvement here.
-The main character's design is bad. It looks vector based, flat, and boring.
-There is way too much writing for very little pay-off. It suffers from the mentality of "I'm making a comedy game" but everything is just toned as comedic, without any actual jokes or anything funny. "It's a porn game, it's not supposed to be serious" is a flawed perspective for a creator to have when these projects takes hours and hours and lots of work. This wreaks of that. Have some pride in your project!
-There are so many screens without any art, and the prose isn't strong enough to justify that.
-The best art looks copy/pasted or AI generated.
+I like the designs for Hermoine and Beatrix in the banner
This isn't completely hopeless, but there's only room for improvement here.