I agree with the feedback saying this feels more like a linear story than a choice-based VN, so many of the decision points can probably be removed/cleaned up in the future. That said, Ayumi is one of the best netorase FMC designs I've seen in a long time (both looks and personality). The artwork has the expected AI quirks but I've been enjoying the scenes. It's a very slow burn, but that's a selling point for me rather than a drawback. The characters and setting provide a series of early slice-of-life stories that won't make it into a 2-hour movie script but are great for these running VNs where you want to learn about and spend time with characters.
One warning to fans of a specific type of sharing story: I don't think readers looking for a self-insert "sexually empowered" MC will love this, as your avatar is very passive, has a threeeee (inch long) dog, and both girls spend most of their erotic dialogue drooling over your best friend's hog that fits a baker's dozen of yours in it by volume. Your childhood friend calls your dick a salad and his a steak and that's basically always the sentiment around your dude's member. Size isn't important, but it clearly is - "Oh, yours is good too tho, MC" vibes. I personally wish there was more sexual equilibrium in the group as I vehemently hate the "stand in the corner and be a cuck with a microdong then get a handjob from your tired GF" carousel stories, but it feels like the dev understands relationship dynamics (to keep Ayumi attractive to the reader throughout the story) and plans to balance content for fans of different types of sharing. It does feel like the FMC is doing everything with the MC in mind and is genuinely in love with him, which keeps things light and feeling fun even though the scenarios get a bit too cucky in theme for my personal taste.
Anyways super impressed with Ayumi and will be 100% locked in for future updates!
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v0.5.31 EDIT: I prefer the overall "feel" of the original intro to the new version, but there are a lot of improvements in the remake. The bus stop scene is my favorite new addition and highlights how Tori's relationship building is a step above other NTRS authors. Ayumi's personality still shines in the new scenes. This is one of the rare VNs where my kinks don't really align with the MC's so far, but I keep checking back and enjoying it for the writing and character personalities. Hope for less focus on sausages as the kink variety opens up in Act 2!
One warning to fans of a specific type of sharing story: I don't think readers looking for a self-insert "sexually empowered" MC will love this, as your avatar is very passive, has a threeeee (inch long) dog, and both girls spend most of their erotic dialogue drooling over your best friend's hog that fits a baker's dozen of yours in it by volume. Your childhood friend calls your dick a salad and his a steak and that's basically always the sentiment around your dude's member. Size isn't important, but it clearly is - "Oh, yours is good too tho, MC" vibes. I personally wish there was more sexual equilibrium in the group as I vehemently hate the "stand in the corner and be a cuck with a microdong then get a handjob from your tired GF" carousel stories, but it feels like the dev understands relationship dynamics (to keep Ayumi attractive to the reader throughout the story) and plans to balance content for fans of different types of sharing. It does feel like the FMC is doing everything with the MC in mind and is genuinely in love with him, which keeps things light and feeling fun even though the scenarios get a bit too cucky in theme for my personal taste.
Anyways super impressed with Ayumi and will be 100% locked in for future updates!
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v0.5.31 EDIT: I prefer the overall "feel" of the original intro to the new version, but there are a lot of improvements in the remake. The bus stop scene is my favorite new addition and highlights how Tori's relationship building is a step above other NTRS authors. Ayumi's personality still shines in the new scenes. This is one of the rare VNs where my kinks don't really align with the MC's so far, but I keep checking back and enjoying it for the writing and character personalities. Hope for less focus on sausages as the kink variety opens up in Act 2!