- Jul 10, 2020
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You guys sure love to make a mountain out of a pretty harmless piece of criticism.
I said your writing is immature, and I said your main character is one of the best examples of that and the main problem.
Really, everyone that has lines of dialogue here is a problem, none of them are actual human beings, they're clearly tools to further something first. Do you know how VNs do this whole "You can choose your answer"? They actually still try to make the character's part of the world they "live in", they're not "us", not totally, but your main character is a Mary Sue that ruins any type of interaction by basically showing his overwhelming, but never explained, soothsaying skills.
No one speaks like he does, in real life, I mean, if anyone could, they would either be a god or the most arrogant individual to ever exist. No one speaks like the first "bully" we meet either, at least not in real life, unless they're a tad bit retarded, is she from a manhwa maybe? How did she get here?
Also, psychology? What, you made a shy, introverted character with quirks that you never show but only speak about briefly, and now you think you can mention that seriously?
Here's my advice, re-read your dialogue, in both English and Spanish, and think about it more. I mean, maybe you want to finish the game faster or you think because it's a game, you need to rush it, but you could use character development for more than moving the story at mach 6, hell, you can have a lot more to write about if you took it slowly.
- Aug 3, 2020
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Mmmm... yeah, I can see your points, and I could improve that if also we can avoid over-work, even if I think that you are overthinking a game that is just starting and in alpha phase, in some points I can see what you say, maybe you never test the game before hit F95 ZONE or in the first spanish builds without translation, but that dialogue with the bully has change and would change on the future because I never feel satisfy about that, actually, with some parts of the script, but the game has to keep going and improvements are going to be small. Like for example, on the first versions when the first stage was finish, asking Evan to play videogames was not in the game, was implemented when we work on the second one.
And yeah, was pretentious for me mention that I study psychology, I bring that up because my projects had some of that in some way, and it sounds like a justification instead of a reason for the elements in the game...
Now, code wise is hard to modify the game because making changes on the script ruins translations files, so, back from the 0.1.5 I was thinking about program two games, one in spanish and the other on english, wich can be a pain. Also, the game has a lot of alternative dialogue depending on the interactions, we can try but the ramification would multiply the script... but well, even before this version we think about that.
And yup, that is feedback.
Something wich we can work.
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Thank you very much~ n_n
I have more content in mind for the first and second stage, also for the next stage, stay tuned~
It's good that we could reach a civilized consensus, you're also right that it's in Alpha, but I tend to ignore that part because Alpha/Beta used by independents or independent studios tend to not be used properly. Would you want people to just come to you and praise you all the time because "Hey, it's an Alpha, so it's good enough for that." or would you like someone to show you what can be done "better"?
Then again, maybe your intent was exactly these type of characters, then I have nothing to say, and I'm also done replying here since I said I won't be playing further, so there's nothing more for me to comment on, as I said previously, good luck and I hope you get what you want with your game.
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Thanks~
And believe me, I hope that too, this start as an Artificial Academy 2 clone and now I have more to do~
- May 26, 2017
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looking good, i liked it btw Evangeline is such a Cutie <3
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From now on, after consulting our patrons, we decide to make public all the update reports of the game, in order to show to non-patreon members the progress of the game~
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- Feb 10, 2018
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i find this game by accident and this is a great game with an interesting begining of story. I look foward to the next update of this game 
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Working on the second important event, all the writing for the next build is done, currently we are working on corrections and sprites placement~
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- Mar 18, 2019
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We recieve some mix opinions about Evangeline, the intention was making her cute even if her appareance, oufit or body aren't gorgeous. That is why Sack, our artist, draw Evangeline expresions and reactions the cutest posible, we are really satisfy with her~
We really appreciate that, thanks for your support~i find this game by accident and this is a great game with an interesting begining of story. I look foward to the next update of this game
Thank you very much, we see some people expecting something good from this game, we don't want to disappoint those expectations, at least those that are reasonable~
Overall we are really sorry that we are taking so long for the next update, I lost my job on the pandemic and Sack has a busy life, we try to overcome some difficulties but the game is still progressing nevertheless~
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Small update, the next build is done, we are making some corrections before release it to Patrons and also correcting some parts of the Machine Translation, aslo we want to release the translation files for the next big update, details in the post~
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New version added to the main post, also, a small update about the next update and the first erotic scene~
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Is there a list of planned fetishes or anything like that? I don't want to sound like a dick, but I really don't want to get invested in a game, only to later find out that it's something I'm not interested in.
- Aug 22, 2018
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It's a romance based date sim.
Not going to be much in the way of kinks if any at all given the no sexual content tag.
- Jun 25, 2017
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Well there's apparently going to be some kind of sexual content added next update, so wait till that one drops to see if it's what your interested in
The 'no sexual content' tag is temp. The patreon literally says that December is going to be focused on erotic content. Romance doesn't mean you don't get up to some freaky shit.