VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - Connected [v0.2.5] [ChainZero]

The best thing about this game are the renders. However, what this game suffers from immensely is that the author doesn't follow one of the most important rules about writing: "Show, don't tell." There's a lot of meaningless text of the MC just describing and thinking about other people. For instance, he goes into a text-laden monologue about the type of person Ayano is... But then through Ayano's actions, I feel like she's not even close to the way the MC describes her.

I also wonder if the author even knows what it's like to be adopted or has known people who are adopted. For a story that's trying to to be serious, the whole adoption plot lacks one important aspect: why did the birth Mom leave them up for adoption? I've known an adopted person and one of their struggles is "why? why did my birth parents not want me?" In this scenario, the birth mom had all the time in the world to contact her children and yet she only does it when she's on her death bed. Sounds pretty selfish to me; so much so that you'd think it'd be courteous of her to actually explain why she put her kids up for adoption to begin with. However, none of this is explained and all you get is meaningless text that has almost nothing to do with anything.

All in all, there's a lot of fluff going on here and seeing this visual novel makes me realize the need for why editing jobs even exist. Editors are the type of people that remove much a the meaningless text. There's a lot of rambling in this game and lots of things that get repeated in different words. it was a slog to get through.

Well, I tried this game because of the looking of the character. They seem different than what we usually see. I mean the face are really great. It's not "too much".

I played the 0.1 & 0.2, there's not a lot of content but that's ok because they need to introduce the story & the characters.

I think the story will be great but i'm not into the i...cest, I really hope it will be optional.

The writing seems right and I'm already immersed in the story.

For now I put 5 stars because :
+ Good looking girl & unsual face
+ Story seems to be good written
+ Render seems okay

I just really hope the game will have possibility to choose the LI

i just played this game. been very intresting. Ofcourse there is lots of texts still the story is intresting so doesnt matter as long as the story is great!

So 5 stars goes for this one and i hope the best for the developer and hope he gets some good supports to bring some other unique features in this game.

What i would suggest is maybe introduce some great milfs like with a little size of breast and butts. the rest is fantastic.

Best of luck for your upcoming updates!

A nice start.

This game is about a very realistic slice of life, it is heartful, beautiful, blissful and could be nostalgic for some...
But if you were looking for an epic game, or a fuck fest game...well go back to the search list. Not this one.

The pace is slow, very slow. But the story seems deep, very deep.
You have a lot to read, but the writting is very good, and even if it can be boring at times, I still recomend to read most of it so you can fully immerse yourself into the story. The personality of the MC is kinda neutral but also natural at the same time. The girls are interesting and realistic. The renders and animations are good for the little we can see. The music is quite nice, not everyone will like it tho'

Why 4 stars ?
Because the game at the moment still feels uncomplete.
It lacks "fun" and "humor",
I believe the pace is a bit too slow
What am I going to do ? My favorite girl is the sister, damnit -_-'
159 renders of the dog is a bit too much... don't you think ?
If I want to see labradors, I have youtube for that

Anyway, this is just my first impressions on 0.2, when the game is more advanced, I will make my final review.
I can see that game has a big potential, and I want to enjoy it more.

Really like what the game has to offer so far. Renders look fantastic and the character models are pretty unique from what I can tell.
Two things that really enjoy about the game:

1. Character development and dialogue. There's a ton of internalization with each character and the conversations between each one feels relatable and unique. With many games the conversations can be a little be awkward sounding and cringey, but here it works with each characters quirks, like in the case of the exchanges between Charlotte and the MC when they first meet.
2. The character models are some of the best I've ever seen. The ass-to-thigh and ass-to-hip ratio is realistic and doesn't look like two boulders set atop two sticks. This is a big issue I've had with many games, the proportions are just too cartoonish, but here they are extremely well done.

That said this is a game I'm looking forward to getting more updates on and will most likely be receiving my first ever donations. Cheers mate.

Amazing game. Its like those top games out there rn that really focus on the story. Its a steady paced game that's taking its time to give meaning to the characters before putting in any adult scenes. Just hope it doesn't take too long for that.

i'm rating this game highly straight off the bat, i was tempted to with the launch version, but 0.2 just cemented that desire further.

this game is gorgeous as fuck, models are all good, renders are high quality, even background sections are done really well, with background characters if needed, and no empty streets/cities to save time like you'd usually see in other games.

plot is interesting so far, the relationship building looks like its going to be pretty good, with good character building aswell, in both motivations and how characters interact with one another. Genuinely feels more like a romance drama thats beginning to flesh out its characters rather than just a typical porn game on the internet.

I'm incredibly tempted to donate so the author can actually be able to spend lots more time developing this game further, however i can't do that right now. but, as soon as i'm able, i'll definetly be doing so. However, if you can actually afford to donate, then i'd highly reccomend you do so if you really enjoy what this game has to offer so far

Pros: Gorgeous women (easily 10/10), a non-standard model for the MC, great facial expressions and eyes that show the feelings and/or inner struggles of the characters in situations, the characters feel "real" which is a great kudos to the writer, the story is not cliche and seems interesting. I love the dialogue and the different personalities of the characters.

Cons: None (except I would have wished it was complete already so I could enjoy the entire journey right now).

TL;DR: 2 updates in, this already feels like a potential new all-time classic. Please support the developer on Patreon.

The story looks promising.
I love the renders a lot, will definitely pledge for this game.
Love the interactions between characters and also with Lola.
She is real cute.
The BGM is amazing and relaxing, really suit the story flow.

Looking forward for 0.3 for sure.

Review for version 0.2

Love the fresh and good written story
you can feel the emotion in characters with great facial expresions
the game has a beautiful golden lab so that's a 15/10
all the girls are very pretty and likeable
renders and animations are on point
Music is also very good, relaxing and fitting for this story

can't wait for 0.3

Great game so far !

Story 10/10
Dialogs 10/10
Characters 10/10
Renders 10/10

May add incest too later on...
The potencial is huge in any direction,
an original story made with great care.
Hope to see update soon.
Very Enjoyable !

Pretty good start for a 0.1b
- Nice MC (not an as**ole but neither a dormat boy scout)
- Good renders
- The story is too early to judge but started with the right feet.
- Your friend is amazing,annoying (in a good way) ,cute
- Short content but worth of playing it
- The mc and Alana(shoir black haired girl) have an amusing bros-more than friends-less than family chemistry.

Hoping we meet the rest of the cast judging by the others girls in the cover/main menu pic.
Can't wait for the updates already.

I said you should give it a go

Well for the begining the game is very good for the 0.1 version. Not any fuck fest game where random shit is happening around. Game has some uniqueness in it and is not a typical vn. Storyline is also unique and would love to see how the choices you made impact the game itself and the storyline. The game has great quality animations and renders are well worked. Surely putting the game in my list to play. Plus point Game has no minigames . Also there is dog in the game damn now thats realism and efforts , liked how game portrays it like a real pet that loves you and it also keeps an eye on your food like any pet does lol .

0.2 review:

This update was honestly phenomenal. There were many characters and possible LIs (I would assume) introduced and they all look beautiful. A lot of game just re use models and it can feel very similar to other games but most characters look and feel unique to me. On top of all that, I actually enjoyed their personalities. There were some similarities between the characters but they all seem to have very noticeable differences in how they act making this game feel far more natural than many others. This game isn't just a bimbo fest or something, all the characters are portrayed realistically with flaws in their personalities and all.

The update moved the main story forward quite a substantial amount and set the stage for exciting new relationships, including possible platonic and even something more with some characters. This game has limitless potential if it continues along this route. Absolutely recommended.

Old review:

I have to say, I am very impressed with this game. The dynamic between Ayana and MC is awesome. They seem to have a natural relationship obviously far beyond what friends normally have. It is a bit strange for them both to be so close but to also be fwb. I am more curious than anything else to see what will come on their relationship. Hopefully it will make sense.

Also there is an awesome dog! Anyways, this game looks very promising. Very early stages but the groundwork has been laid and hopefully after a few updates, things are still looking this bright.

Definitely recommend trying. Even when considering this is only the first release.

An excellent beginning. I kept waiting for the MC to suddenly turn into the normal twat but he's likable and aside from those "I AM RUS" track pants not someone that looks like they were beaten in the face with a mallet shortly after birth. Great storytelling, believable backgrounds

0.2 Damn, dev didn't dissapoint. Each render is great. Each character is fuckable so to say. There is one little character which isn't to my taste. The mother. If you played the game then you will know why. Besides that we got introduced to several promising girls. Especially a sister.
Damn, she is beautiful. Her two friends. One which is bi so there is a promise of a threesome at the very least. The second is interested in MC, sexually. Generally it didn't dissapoint and even gave Us a better story than I predicted.
0.1 For now we had mature, heartwarming introduction into the story. I don't know how to describe the relationship of main characters. They are not related by blood yet they have a relationshio very similar to sibilings. At least from Mc's point of view. Besides that this story has good pace, nice narrative, dialogs and plot. From graphical point of view, there is not much to add. Its very good. For now we got nice teasing solo scene with main female character. Which shows great potential.

If said game will keep the same level of all future updates. Then we will get one juicy piece of erotic visual novel.

Incest is in the works. Which for me is a nice sign. Besides that, they can marry. If I am not wrong. They simply don't need to tell the judge that they are related. Future girls that didn't appear in this part of the game of course.

0.1 is pretty good. Well written characters so far. Only problem was a bit to much of an introduction(given by MC thoughts) for Ayana(1st girl). I think is better to discover the personality of the characters for oneself instead of being told she is like this or that

Can't say I've reviewed very many but played a lot and for a 0.1 release it's good, really good. Scratch that it's fcuking amazing. Loved the renders, the model/s look fantastic and the few animations too! Definitely keeping a close eye on this... Sooo can't wait for the next update! Keep up the great work Dev!

So I played v0.1 of the game and here are my thoughts

Pros:
+Good Renders
+No annoying sounds
+Well written easy to read english
+Storyline and pacing make the events fit with the characters

Cons:
-Short yeah it's a .1 but it's about 10 mins worth of content could have used another version worth of content before release
-Only one character is introduced other then the MC and makes up 99 percent of the content at this point
-Love interest is annoying and playing the MC

So yeah for me I didn't like the love interest and not because she is immediately introduced as having dated someone else beforehand and contantly moans to the MC about her breakup. For me she seems selfish and expects the MC to keep his life on hold while she figures out what she really wants eventhough the game is supposedly supposed to be written with the MC in mind his whole life seems to revolve around her.

I suspect the game is likely written by a woman not that there is anything wrong with that but no guy is going to put up with that kind of arrangement for years on end without looking elsewhere and eventhough the MC is the MC the dialogue prespective of the relationship is heavily slanted infavor of the LI.

It's almost like the guy is a soft-cuck. So I rated it 3/5 for this reason.

For now I'll be giving this game a 4 star, still unsure about the Mc's race so the use of the N word kind of confuses me, not a bad start though, the renders are great and so are the animations, just need to fix it up with the lightning here and there. I look forward to playing the next version

Edit: After playing the newer version i've decided to give the game a 5 star! Amazing game indeed, keep up the excellent work ChainZero.