VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - Corporate Culture [v0.7] [sqwl]

This game is a pleasant surprise.
Very nice visually, but you stay for the story and the protagonists.
Alice is the prototype of a kind and beautiful girl, unreachable.
Elsa has a lot of character, she is the ice princess.
The male protagonist is not stupid. With a story of overcoming and we can go modeling with choices his character.

The writing and dialogues are quite good.

Amazing game, have no clue why this dev has so less patrons.

Pros -
- Renders are top notch.
- Story is interesting
- Almost no grammatical errors
- Relationship dynamic between the two main characters is refreshing
- You actually see the MC try and become better, instead of relying on a 1 foot dick like in many other games

Cons -
- None so far.

I just wish that the updates were a bit faster, but I guess that's because the low patron count.
Someone needs to update the tags asap, the tags make it look like there is little to no content, which is false. This game easily falls under male dom, corruption, female dom, teasing and romance.

Easily one of the most underrated games out right now. The renders are great and the story really draws you in. It feels realistic/plausible, and the characters are being created in a way that makes you care. The dev is obviously dedicated to the project and I will look to seeing the popularity of the game grow.

I read it in one sitting

1. The art: Alice's feet render makes me realize I might have another fetish, and Elsa is also very lovely.

2. The story: Never a dull moments, at least with Alice or Elsa route (I haven't tried other route). I went through the background of MC, Tommy and the PT guy without feeling a drag. The sexual tension is ever persisting, and I am torn between Alice and Elsa. I am a big fan of your humor, sqwl.

I am thrilled to see the battle of wit between Eddie and the boss, as I have never been satisfied with how they solved situation in any other medium.

3. Spelling errors occasionally happen, IIRC there is once they call the character in the wrong name. Grammarly may help

4. You might want to make the thread yours, the game "What A Legend" could do that, also include the patreon link in your profile.

Good work Sqwl, I bid you good luck with this game and your future work.

A great start, the MC has a lot (a lot!) of growth potential, the characters are interesting, the story compelling and it manages to delve into its character's psychology without overwriting it; I wish the best to sqwl and this very promising game.

I really enjoyed this game, as I tend to enjoy corporate environment games in general! The girls are done very well with beautiful art, and the story is going at a pace I tend to like. (I don't need it super rushed immediately to a sex scene within two or three scenes) I really am curious to see how the story goes moving forward!

My only ding - and this is coming from a female perspective - is the main protagonist. He just doesn't look good. At. All. The girls actually turn me on more than the guy and that says something. So, my hope is that in the future he can get a makeover and improve physically over time, etc.

From start to end the game kept my attention. Although the grammar is not 100% at least it is not the worst. The renders are amazing, along with the storyline. Even though the VN is just getting started it has huge potential. With time it will get even better.

Im gonna leave it a t 4 stars cause i like how its written, i like the relationships and theres nothing that feels odd or out of place or out of character.
Also the writing in general, the way is consctructed. Storytelling

There not much content and only one route that has something lewd in.

So 90% of those 4 stars go to the writing and the other one to the girl choices. It doesnt have much, but is really pleasant to read.

This VN has a pretty solid potential.Rendering and models are topnotch.Story is refreshing and pretty interesting.I guess the only "CON" I can see here is lack of more music during the scenes but oh well,it is still negligible if we are captivated by the story overall and scenes that are to follow(improving the lines is not to much of a hassle and I would offer my services in correcting the typos and structure of sentences ).All in all you are on the right track sqwl keep it up.

ps-Elsa is waifu material <3

The author did an amazing job at writing a truly sad, pathetic MC. If you want to simulate wallowing in your own internal anguish then this is the game for you. Unfortunately, it's not my thing so I give it (v0.2) 3/5 stars. If I enjoyed cringing every two seconds I would probably have given it 4/5.

Best storytelling of all erotic games I have played. Awesome characters, great story, fantastic graphics, beautiful women, you name it, this game has it all. If I was slightly richer I would have supported author with all the money I can provide. You can see, that creator knows what he is doing and does it excellent. Can't wait for new updates to see continuation of this engaging story.

The average star rating is so high, but I got disappointed.

The female characters are very beautiful, but that is because the game uses the most beautiful models of DAZ.
Of course the rendering is great, this cannot be denied.
Above, 5 stars.

But what about MC? It uses a model that is often used as a passerby in other games...
MC is an ugly man or even a loser. What is worthy of these super hot women?
The sense of substitution in the game is very bad.
Above, 2 stars.

And is this an erotic game or a corny love game?
At the current 2G file size, there are almost no sex scenes...
This game is too far from the main focus.
If there is no sex scene, just make a pure love game...
Above, 1 star.

I was looking for a really interesting office/corporate story and damn, this delivered it. I was surprised with a genuine, realistic plot. I appreciate a good premise of a story and an interesting MC in a game. His situation was realistic and different from the usual average games.

Onto the game itself. Quality is supreme, attention to the detail for each render is noticeable. It is obvious that the amount of work for each render was much more than the average games. Everything looked amazing. Characters are the same case. Every female model was attractive in their own regard, nice collection.

Next to the dialogues, I really liked them. The writing of both the story and each dialogue felt natural. Each dialogue felt unique because of main characters have certain characteristics and dialogue shows them nicely. Conversations with the Elsa and MC's Ego especially were on a whole new level. I loved the interactions between them. And the comedy, oh it was gold. Certain jokes and situations made me laugh a lot constantly whole playthrough. How MC and his Ego interacted was really fun.

Overall I loved this game, plot was interesting and most of the characters are fantastic. I don't mind a slow burn game if the story itself is worth to listen. There are too many glorified porn-slider VN's in here as it is, I'm glad this one in particular, wasn't the case.

I dont want to spoil anything but the game is shaping up to be extremely interesting and fun. Dialogue between MC and Elsa is brilliant love chemistry there. There are grammar issues but its fine, this isnt English class and im sure will be fixed so ignore it. Characters look great, writing and plot is great and engrossing.

Cant wait for more.

Elsa best girl so far.

The characters are good. You almost feel bad for the MC which is expected with the on point naration. The woman are good looking too. Especially Elsa (don't know if she will be a love interest but hell she caught my eye better than Alice)
Excellent! Dev needs more supporters and it's worth it!

Reviewing: ver .0.3

Very promising start! Good character models, graphics, writing is believable, plot is good that I felt invested in, with a likable mc.

The story: You are an office worker with a negative outlook on yourself and your surroundings that then falls in love with the company ceo's daughter. You then proceed to improve yourself in order to boost your self confidence and hopefully win her over. Along the way female love interests appear. Sadly, however you get stood up on a date and used by your boss at work to get a promotion... so now you're transforming for another purpose and gives a good reason for your descent into madness as you begin to talk to yourself and act douchey if you decide to do so.

The music is not distracting and fits the scenarios they are in. mc is relatable and not a super perv. character relationships are believable and natural. The MC was made to look unattractive with the weird hairstyle in order to emphasize how different or unappealing he was at the start of the narrative and does change his look in v.0.2. Worth your time! Looking forward to more!

Superb game! Graphics are good, characters believable and the writing is very good, I got totally hooked. It's still low on the kinky stuff, there are only two sex scenes (which might be ok since it's 0.2) but there are literally no other moments where you're involved in something even vaguely erotic.. hope that will change with the developement of the protagonist.

Perfect! I really, really like this game. The only thing that tops the nearly-perfect rendering is the story, the buildup and the choices itself.

I started playing with 0.2 and looking forward to further updates! It also has a high replay value because there is no scoreboard or whatsoever, but you see the results in your choices by small differences in the scenes later. I really love it!

Very, very nice game. Awesome writing and really good renders too.
But the thing that got me the most was the writing...the story, it even made me think about some things.

Besides the awesome story, i have to compliment the sex scenes too, few scenes until this point, but they're worth it. The sex scenes combined with the story gives you this satisfaction feeling that makes the whole thing awesome.

Also, if i'm not mistaken, the game seems to be recent, but it already has enough content do "hook" you.

Forgive me for my bad english.

Copy-paste of what I wrote in the thread:

I don't get all the criticism. This game can be ab-so-lute-ly brilliant.
Unlike other players, I found the premise fantastic. This guy has some serious issues, and with Elsa's help we'll be able to shape his future personality. I agree with what ZagorTeNay wrote above me, there's much more to this game than meets the eye. Those inner monologues were amazing. There's nothing left for us but to hope the dev will continue the story as superbly as he introduced it; I'm already hooked and can't wait to see what happens next.

Apart from this, on the artistic front this might not be the best game ever but it's indeed very, very good. All girls are gorgeous (of course they look similar to other games, they're from Daz!) and the variety of angles, environments and situations is more than satisfying.

The game lacks animations but, as I always say, if the dev doesn't have the skills or gear to create them it's better to stick to lots of sexy still renders. The first sexual encounter was a bit rushed, the scene didn't last long and wasn't very hot. However, the second one was hot as hell despite its not having animations. Lots of angles, good build-up, nice sexy descriptions in the text, etc.

Oh, I almost forgot to say there's a lot of content already for just v.0.2 of the game. If you enjoy reading and take your time, probably 2'5-3 hours gameplay.

Suggestion for improvement: as always, a scene replay gallery; and some tweaking to the UI and main menu to make them even more unique and visually attractive.