VN - Ren'Py - Desire for Freedom [v0.1.2] [GNK]

I am basing this off the censored "Public Version" (star off just for hiding behind a pay wall), but the dev needs to learn better lighting, learn post editing to fix problems, and choose some better models (unless ugly people are a kink).

Ok, the main problem is the poor translation. As a non-native speaker I understand the issue, but when you decide to tell a story in another language and hope to earn money with it, you need AT LEAST some basic understanding of that language.

This feels like a pure MTL translation, because even the exposition is difficult to understand.

Here an example:

"This is Smanthas's wife and mom! She is very good, but she and her husband do not communicate importantly."

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What the dev probably wants to tell us is this :

This is Samantha, wife and mother. She is doing very well, but communication between her and her husband has come to a standstill.

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I used a translation software for that paragraph myself, just to point out that lacking translation skills might not be the only problem. - or my software is better ^^

Because of that the hole story is hard to follow.

That leads us to the next issue. The story has currently no progression. The wife is already a slut - you cant avoid that she is giving a blowjob to her new boss and her husband is already a submissive tool for her. So I dont get it why their relationship should be an issue, because for her he is already just a servitude to please her and shut up.

Then we have some continuity errors. When Alan (the husband) is applying for the new job he gets called to his boss. Then we see him standing in her office and talking to her and in the next image he is still on his way to her office.

Later when he tells his wife she knows that is boss is female - but he never told her that. Maybe this is a translation issue or its another indication for a lack of care for the project.

The renders are okish. Quite basic and the expressions are weird sometimes and exaggerated.

All in all it is a poorly made game that is hard to follow, has no real progression and stuff is just happening.

Why do I only give this game two stars? First of all, the model of the character is super ordinary, and the dialogue content is too direct. Even when the 100th picture is about, the character cheats directly and has no plot. It feels like he deliberately did it to show the readers the sex scene. To be honest, it is really like playing the slides of the last century.

I liked the story. Animations and character poses are nice.
I also found the character choices to be compatible.
I definitely think it's a game with a future.
It would be much better if the image quality was upgraded to 1080p

what should i even say...... where's the plot, the emotions and the quality. Since this game focuses on ntr , we expect some burn but no .....you cheat and have sex before even 2nd min of gameplay. Complete waste.

Well... where to start?

Two Stars might look a bit harsh, considering that basic models/presentation and so on is decent enough and the game is fappable. But it lacks anything beyond that to make it more than a quick distraction and also suffers from quite a bit of the old engrish syndrome.

The "Male Protagonist" tag is for the most part a mislabel - This is basically the usual Slut Simulator (with cucking the husband emphasis) that does not even have any build up. The female protagonist goes full slut in under 2 Minutes of game time. The so called MC MIGHT get to be a protagonist somewhere down the line if he actually gets more focus time but as of v06 he is just another background character. If anything the cucked Hubby gets just as much focus time as the sleazy Boss does.

Personally I think he is just added to appease the peeps who get allergic to anything that smells like NTR (but really not needed here as Slut Sims are pretty popular. It is when the FOCUS Char is being cucked that the tempers boil up).

Story is nothing to write home about. Spoilers ahead! (lol, not really if you played more than one Porn game before): Wife is bored, gets her slut on with the new Boss, his mates, probably other dudes as well. The obligatory Black Muscle Hunk with Horsecock TM makes his appearance. The useless, submissive Hubby gets into the clutches of a Domme Asian Lady Boss who will probably peg and cuck him before long. A daughter is mentioned that will come home soon and sure to be corrupted FAST (this game is not going for ramp ups suddenly, for sure).

But looking at the amount of content for a v06 - about 5 Minutes with skipping filler text - that might be a good thing.

If you like the themes and want a quick fap, go for it. Otherwise no need to bother, at least for a bakers dozen of updates I'd guess.

0.05

I wanted to rate this *** stars first because you can see some effort done with the renders and the characters don't look hyper-generic. The animations could be better but personally, I can live without any. Still, the English is at times so rough that once or twice I had trouble understanding what the dev wanted to express. The story doesn't offer anything original or meaningful yet, and I don't expect that to change. After a couple of updates, there could have been indeed more content. This is straight in-your-face porn from the very beginning, so not really my type of thing and therefore not something I feel inclined to support, but that didn't influence my rating.

Quality is pretty bad! Story is well... Garbage! After 6 updates now it still has barely gone anywhere and paywall to top it off LMAO. First game or not it like barely any effort into it compared to other new devs that even their first update has more playable time then this atrocity.

Since it's only the first release, I won't rate it any lower than 3/5, but there are a decent number of issues with this game. Namely, the English is very rough and the narrative is incomplete at best. The renders are OK, but this generally had the feel of a very rough demo. I think the top priority moving forward should be to fix the English errors.

My Rating (Update 0-04r)

Pros:
+ Graphics Great
+ Characters Great
+ Sex scenes Great
+ Closeups Great
+ Nice story start

Cons:
- Short
- Needs English Checked


Conclusion:
Very Good first release,wish I had the skill to do something like this,and then as a first release....Good Job.
The Game doesn't have that much background story,and the release is pretty short,but for this, you have 2 scenes that are well done and shows you where the story can go.
What the Dev has to work on, is to put the English lines more into every day talk or phrases, which comes better. (Like...baby I,m hot for your ass...as a example)
But Enjoyed the Devs first release and hope to see more of his work.

Update:
After thinking this game is starting to be a great game,i was more then disappointed with releases in the past,hardly 5 minutes of playing time,and the 04 release didn't even last 30 seconds......if the Dev thought of getting support for this game he sure more then blew it.......
Not even worth the time of downloading it.