Hi everyone!
This is the very first playable scene of my upcoming 18+ mystery/comedy visual novel. Yes, it uses AI for visuals, but I've worked really hard on getting things like consistency and the right vibe correct. And I'm hoping the AI imaging will help in making sure I will be able to update fairly consistently, instead of having to learn Daz3d for instance.
I kind of have the broader picture of where the story will go in my head. But it's my first time creating a game, first time working with Ren'Py as well.
You play as a young man about to start his first real job in IT at a modeling agency, while living together with your stepsister Ember. Scene 1a introduces their relationship, mixing humor and 4th wall breaks with emotional backstory, and setting the tone for what’s to come.
As the story continues, you’ll step into your new workplace as an IT-employee at a modeling agency, meet your best friend Mark (a photographer at that same local modeling agency), and slowly get pulled into a bigger mystery surrounding a missing model and some questionable secrets. Along the way you’ll balance everyday banter, romance options, and branching choices with a storyline that blends humor with mystery.
Things I’d especially like your thoughts on:
- ** Visuals:** I know AI doesn't sit well with everyone. As mentioned, I worked really hard on it so I'm hoping that shows in the results. I'm also curious how you feel about the different type of visuals. Some are full-size backgrounds with a character in it, other are a fixed background with one or two characters "on top" talking. I'm wondering how you feel about that and if the switch between the one and the other feels right.
- **Pacing:** Does the scene feel too fast, too slow, or about right?
- **Tone:** Is the mix of humor, narration, and emotional background working?
- **Character introduction:** Do you get a clear sense of who the MC and Ember are, and their relationship dynamic?
- **Writing style:** Does the narration feel natural? The scenes with Ember are maybe over the top with the humor, outside the house it will be toned down a bit.
- **Technical flow:** Do the transitions between lines and scene changes work smoothly?
- **Audio: ** There's no audio at the moment. Is background music something that is popular?
So I’m mainly looking for overall impressions and suggestions for improvement, not polished yet. Thanks a lot for any feedback you can share!
This is the very first playable scene of my upcoming 18+ mystery/comedy visual novel. Yes, it uses AI for visuals, but I've worked really hard on getting things like consistency and the right vibe correct. And I'm hoping the AI imaging will help in making sure I will be able to update fairly consistently, instead of having to learn Daz3d for instance.
I kind of have the broader picture of where the story will go in my head. But it's my first time creating a game, first time working with Ren'Py as well.
You play as a young man about to start his first real job in IT at a modeling agency, while living together with your stepsister Ember. Scene 1a introduces their relationship, mixing humor and 4th wall breaks with emotional backstory, and setting the tone for what’s to come.
As the story continues, you’ll step into your new workplace as an IT-employee at a modeling agency, meet your best friend Mark (a photographer at that same local modeling agency), and slowly get pulled into a bigger mystery surrounding a missing model and some questionable secrets. Along the way you’ll balance everyday banter, romance options, and branching choices with a storyline that blends humor with mystery.
Things I’d especially like your thoughts on:
- ** Visuals:** I know AI doesn't sit well with everyone. As mentioned, I worked really hard on it so I'm hoping that shows in the results. I'm also curious how you feel about the different type of visuals. Some are full-size backgrounds with a character in it, other are a fixed background with one or two characters "on top" talking. I'm wondering how you feel about that and if the switch between the one and the other feels right.
- **Pacing:** Does the scene feel too fast, too slow, or about right?
- **Tone:** Is the mix of humor, narration, and emotional background working?
- **Character introduction:** Do you get a clear sense of who the MC and Ember are, and their relationship dynamic?
- **Writing style:** Does the narration feel natural? The scenes with Ember are maybe over the top with the humor, outside the house it will be toned down a bit.
- **Technical flow:** Do the transitions between lines and scene changes work smoothly?
- **Audio: ** There's no audio at the moment. Is background music something that is popular?
So I’m mainly looking for overall impressions and suggestions for improvement, not polished yet. Thanks a lot for any feedback you can share!
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