Ren'Py - Completed - Franck and his slave [Week 2 v1.0] [Dezgemadev]

  1. 2.00 star(s)

    katmandomo

    Version Reviewed: Week 2 v1.0

    Overview: A woman is a slave to a big old teddy bear and has some sex.
    Story: 90% of the dialog in this game is effectively "lets go sex" "we having sex" "we sex good". There is a very brief mention that maybe the girl is a slave because she broke the law and it's a possible punishment in this world, but it hardly seems like a punishment as the guy takes her out to fancy restaraunts/brothels to learn about anal sex (that she's been begging for) from a pro. There's some class warfare stuff in there as well, but it comes and goes like the wind. Even by porno game standards this one has a thin plot.

    Graphics: Need work. Clearly this is an inexperienced dev trying his best but there is constant clipping, models float around without gravity, the deformations are horrific at times, and it gets that "first time with DAZ" grain a lot. This game is chock full of animations, but most of them are pointless. Lots of spinning around the model while she just stands there. There is also animation during the sex scenes, but it can edge into horror territory as the dev clearly struggled with the deform mesh for her labia. As you might expect the guy pulls out his dick by having it clip through his pants.

    Gameplay: None. Pure VN. There aren't even any "do scene/don't do scene" choices. It's fully on autopilot the entire time. It least it doesn't make you wait too long for some sex scenes.

    Sound: I normally don't comment on the sound because half of the time I play these games with the sound off, but I would like to make a shout out to one of the worst songs I've ever heard. It plays multiple times and it's always ear destroying. Other than that assault on the ears the game is silent.

    Conclusion: Clearly a first effort, but the dev is trying hard. There's a good 20-30 minutes of content in there. It's pretty vanilla so far but I have a feeling the dev wants to encompass more fetishes.

    Final note: How are you supposed to say the guy's name? Fran-seek?
  2. 1.00 star(s)

    peter12378

    Bad English, bad story and bad visuals.
    Bad Visuals: I do not care that much about them. But instead of doing horrible animations, just stick to the images. They are still bad, but ok as long as the rest of the game is good.
    Bad English: It is ok if the language is not perfect. But it must be fluently readable. Here, we just have simple sentences expressing stereotypical content. Thats a list of statements, not a story.
    Bad Story: Might be influenced by the bad graphics and bad english. But for me it does neither seem original, nor well-written. What is left is a stereotypical standard story that is badly written.

    -> Write in your own language. Get a translator. Ditch the animations. And really think of a story first.