VN - Ren'Py - Give Me a Sun [v7.5] [Namco15]

Review Ver. 0.3

This novel is by far the best I had the pleasure to read.
This is a story-driven novel and is paced like good movies/books, the plot is slowly revealed and slowly build-up (IMO it makes it more intriguing and interesting). I'm not gonna lie, it can be sometimes hard to understand but overall it's still very comprehensible. Don't worry too much about it though, It's still early in development.

The render are amazing (with no boring static shot and nice panties shot) , all the girls are drop dead gorgeous.
And those h-scenes are something else, I rarely saw VN with scenes as exciting and hot. They are transpiring sensuality, intimacy and passion witch is extremely hard to convey in images form with no voice-over or animations. It's totally impressive coming from a new dev.

I never read those novel with the sound turn on except this one. The second I've recognized Deathstars's Synthetic Generation lyrics I knew I had to start over with the sound

TL;DR :
Awesome story, amazing render, excellent music and overall hot Sapphic-ness

I highly recommend this
thank you Namco15, you rock

Very good stuff so far ( I'm mid 0.3 ). Impressed by overall production.
Are you a team or Lone Rider?
Intrigued by it being more of a mystery puzzle than outright muff diving fest.
It is almost better with the teasing half covered tits, seethrough knickers and almost visible pussies and to keep the tension of the viewer at an almost boiling point ( Dione's sudden arrival put a hold on the "wet sex" ) as cliffhangers.
Storywise it's still a bit confusing to get a grip on where one's at on a timeline as it jumps back and forth in space and time as well as the characters appearance changes a lot from child, teen to adult. I think I'm slowly but surely getting a grip on what's going on.
I, unlike several other male posters, have no problem with this being, so far, a strictly FF novel apart from the fact that there are male characters around ( not many so far ) as fathers. I have to assume that their biology classes in school do not differ too much from our earthling education.
Another reflection: If the Silver eyed Witches are it's own ethnic group then are the males called witches as well?

Very, very beautiful production though some transitions are a bit slow.

The different characters are just that! Different body types and facial forms makes this VN a very nice R&R from the otherwise majority of "super model" VN's around F95.

Excellent fucking brilliant job you've done!!!

English: 2
User Interface: 4
User Experience: 3
Art: 7
Dialogue: 2
Story: 3
Opinion: 3
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Avg: 3.43

If you speak English, this is one of the most frustrating reading experiences you'll ever have. I can't imagine this is any better in the Dev's native language, but there's so many issues here I don't know where to begin. Pacing issues, poor dialogue, complete lines that are unnecessary, and just random or useless exposition that give you none of the details you'd need to understand what the fuck is actually going on. And the dev continues to use an hpunch or vpunch to lines like "???" or "!" At the current time of writing, I haven't read other reviews yet, but ALL of them better be "Durr, me rate 5 for pretty models." (Which is still not a good reason to rate anything five stars.) Because the only thing, in terms of story, this has going for it is the premise. Even the names of the two opening characters are unpronounceable, and there's even a line where the loud one's name is completely spelled wrong. "Metxil." And the default names for the girlfriends? "Isilynor" and "Eridani?" Naming characters by slapping your keyboard is not the way, my friend. And I think this is gonna be a long review from me because there is just so much to unpack and just highlight why it's frustratingly bad. That being said, TL;DR: The poor translation added to the poorly emphasized time jumps, "aided" by the laziest excuse for a visual timeline made in MS Paint that doesn't give you decent information, makes this a headache and a half to read. But we all know why most people will "play" this.

The story opens up on two sisters that aren't the main character, which I will actually say is a cool way to start a story. It's a shame it opens up with the DUMBEST decision making I've ever seen in my life it's actually laughable. Aysu and Metztli (No, those aren't spelling mistakes just bad names) are struggling to survive a post apocalyptic world and Met trades all her gear FOR A FUCKING SMARTPHONE. On top of EVERYTHING later on, it's "revealed" that Met is deaf. AT NO POINT up until MC points out that she's deaf, does she show signs of it. She even reacts to sound made by the phone that start this whole rabbit hole of a story. But only after one or two of the bad lore dumps in the form of stories about "The Maker" and Silver-Eyed Witches. The maker, more than likely, building up to a city-wide harem for the devs inferiority complex of a self-insert. And it's all made a little messy to look at by the over-used pencil drawing filter. Anyway, Met solves some puzzle on the phone, it makes a loud noise and this demon looking thing attacks and they're saved by MC and another woman.(I also want to highlight that Aysu exclaims "FEAR!" in her mind lol) And MC's introduction is with the tired ass Die Hard reference that makes me roll my eyes painfully hard.

Moving on, MC decides to bring the twins to her city because they're "impressive" but all they've done is make poor life choices and bicker. MC says they show abilities, but at no point can you the player see or pick up on it. Then, they unceremoniously go back to the city,(on her "black mamba" jeez are you kidding me?) There is another lore dump in here, but it's all nondescript words, "The Kingdoms," "The Ancients," "Defective." And there's another blatant lie about getting rid of defective people because MC is maimed later on for having green eyes. A lack of focus here. Back to the plot, MC flirts with them to an annoying degree, and runs away to town just to jump in the first set of flashbacks about her three girlfriends that can thankfully be renamed as, once again, the names in this are still abysmal. And the entire "drama" between Isil, Eri, and MC is because MC didn't want to take a picture with her gfs? If it's anything else, it's flat-out not explained. Then cut to MC getting bullied and maimed by other soldiers after MC was introduced as some badass. So along with pacing, timeline, and lore issues, this suffers from poor tone as well. You go from suffering in the wild, to demons(?) attacking, to Die Hard/Futurama references, melodrama, to bullying, and abuse all at drops of a hat.

After MC gets her arm cut off, it jumps back 12 hours, only to do yet another flashback inside the first one? And there's a choice that says the same nonsense word for both options?! Who is making this? And it's followed by MC spouting a bunch of movie references that somehow causes MC to create a religion somewhere because... reasons? And then Dione shows up and I swear no line of dialogue between MC and Dione has anything to do with the line before it because the conversation makes almost no sense. And then they talk about some random tournament THAT DOES NOT MATTER, and it's literally just a set up for a "joke" that's a reference to Naruto. My god. And it doesn't seem to get back to the present in this update, so in 12 hours MC moved in Dione, performed espionage about... something? Traveled to another continent (and back), reminisce with her twin, and reminisce and have sex with Meg (which creates further plot-holes).

The fact is, nothing about the writing makes any sense. And I'm sorry even my review even feels like it jumps from idea to idea too quickly, but these are all being paraphrased by me fairly chronologically.The only time I fully understand something, is when its a dumb reference to anime, movies, or songs. And when I do notice those (like the drawn out, DATED rip of Life is Beautiful) I just get annoyed or angry. Whoever has proofred any of this, improved nothing. Dev, you need to sit down with someone who ACTUALLY speaks English, tell them the story, and let them go over the dialogue with a fine toothed comb so any of this actually makes sense. As of right now, this is a disjointed mess and needs a serious rework. You can barely tell who's speaking, so many points in the narrative literally have no impact on the overall story, and if it does, the English is so poor it makes no sense. My advice, ONCE AGAIN, WRITE THIS IN YOUR LANGUAGE THEN HIRE A TRANSLATOR, AS NO ONE IS BENEFITTING FROM A VISUAL NOVEL THEY CAN'T READ.

So, in summary, I think I made it pretty clear how I feel about the English. The UI/UX is pretty much default Renpy outside of a few minor changes. The art is good, I mean most of the girls have that "inflated fake boobs" look, but it's a bunch of Daz assets, it's hard to make them look bad. The Dialogue and story you can barely read and I already did my tirade. So my opinion is low.

TO THE DEV: Hopefully you read this first, if you haven't already read the rest of this and are fuming at me. Hire someone to translate this for you. And I mean HIRE someone. Not a fan that says "Oh sure, I speak English" I mean someone that will actually make this a legible story. And if things change later I'll happily come back and change my review. Like I said before, the premise is interesting, "Post apocalyptic world with a race of people that are trying to save a dying planet." But it's suffering from everything else. Best of luck.

This game doesn't have many bad aspects at all. Good renders, good music, cool setting (very unsubtle references to Claymore lmao).

However the one thing it does bad, it does so in a very jarring and disrupting way. The main issue is, as others pointed it out, the storytelling. While the story itself seems very interesting and unique, the act of conveying it to the player really isn't going quite as planned.

First and foremost, the pacing is for one pretty confusing, but most of all inconsistent. Sometimes story events will be chained very quickly, while sometimes dialogue will be stretched out for some reason. The delivery of plot points in dialogues is also extremely vague. I'm all for a story that relies on the player's interpretation, but the problem here is that the other components of the storytelling don't follow suit to this design choice.

Second, the programming itself seems kind of janky. Sometimes during dialogues, some characters will say something that obviously should've been said by the locutor instead. It does happen quite a few times, but all it takes is for it to happen just once to spread doubt in the mind of the player. As soon as one realizes there hasn't been much proofreading, the player finds themselves doubting each and every line of dialogue, wondering if something should've been said by another person. This obviously makes keeping up with the vague storytelling even harder.

Final but not least, what annoyed me the most is that the story sometimes seem to establish unspoken rules, just to totally disregard them later. For example, a character may act some way in a scene, and then act totally different in another scene. This makes any sort of comprehension way harder than it needs to be, because any social cue, character trait, plot point or anything else the player picks up by reading between the lines becomes totally unreliable.

In short, while the setting seems very interesting, the game as a whole is very not interpretation-friendly, despite this being the main way of delivering the plot.

There is an incredible amount of untapped potential in this one, so I'll stick around due to the game still being early in development. Regardless, the game is still very hard to play for anyone at the moment, so just keep this in mind if anyone reading this gives it a go.

I really like this story, keeps me looking for more

renders are great, characters are all compelling on their own

the only thing I can say that is not perfect is the story can be hard to keep up with, the memories/flashbacks can be .... unsure of what is going on

BUT ..... after playing through it again (to refresh my memory those same flaws now make sense, we are getting some back story and it is great

looking forward to more from this game, and wish the Dev all the best

Tldr; this VN deserves a much higher rating. It should definitely be a 2nd page VN, and I welcome it on the first page when all translation issues are fixed.

Why would you look at a dude's pecs when you can look at another set of tits that thinks, and is practical, like a dude?

If you are put off by the "female protagonist" tag, don't be. In the middle of her watching the news, she comments, "I want to lick those perfect tits", well my thoughts exactly! Or "Now the corny talk is over, let's fuck"

Yes, she is still a girl, which works great as she looks stunning in every scene, but she can also have meaningful and flavorful conversations with the LI's instead.
(It also makes it one of the few VN's where you get and want to see the MC.)

Regarding other reviews about story and lore:
This is a story-driven VN and is paced like good movies and games. You only get some of the information at the start, jump right into the action, and learn bits and pieces along the way, so you get the satisfaction of figuring it out yourself. After update 0.3 I have enough bits and pieces to get essentially what is going on and see the story patterns emerge. But perhaps it does not work with this format where updates takes time and that not all lore questions were answered within an update which upsets people.

The story itself is unique and good (even more spectacular since being a harem AVN), and I don't get why people are so harsh about it. I recommend NOT (looking at you humanstickobserver) rewriting any of it.


Regarding poor translation:
I have to admit it WAS an issue but the dev is doing a lot to make it better, and in update 0.3, much of it was solved and not enough anymore to deduct a star for it.

The Renders are amazing, full of little details and even Jokes. So much so that I started to play this one (for the first time since starting to play AVNs) on "auto", as it would make me look longer at scenes to take it all in.

The MC and LI's are beautiful, unique and cute, and their behaviour brings them alive.

In summary, this VN deserves a much higher rating. It should definitely be a 2nd page VN, and I welcome it on the first page when all translation issues are fixed.

I recommend it on renders alone.
I recommend it even more if you like story-driven VN's.
I recommend it even even more if you like to watch lesbian porn, as you get double the good stuff .

I wish NAMCO15 best of luck!

Girls are stunning. Renders are amazing.

Poor translation notwithstanding, the story is utterly incomprehensible.

Too much is happening too fast, with jumps back and forth in time, but nothing is defined. Who are we playing as? What races or people are in this world/ Who or what are the clans? What, in god's name, is anything that is happening?

Creating your own world and lore is fantastic. Writing your story so that it takes prior knowledge of that world or lore for literally ANYTHING happening or being said to make sense, and it doesn't matter how deep or well thought out your lore is. It is just a mess when presented to us, because we are given no framework, no context, and no solid footing to approach things from. Everything just... fucking happens.

I'm sorry, I REALLY wanted to get into this and enjoy it. Sadly it is as I've already said, incomprehensible.

Unless the dev makes some Earth-shattering changes in how the story is told (and I do not mean in future chapters, I mean doing a complete re-write of EVERYTHING released so far) none of the story, or dialog, is worth trying to work your way through to achieve even a minimal understanding.

The ABSOLUTE BEST thing you can do with this game is to turn on skip, and skip through everything until you find scenes you want to fap to.

I have no idea why people are dinging the language; perhaps the feedback is on prior versions. This is no ESL game.

The art is familiar (Daz?) but nice, the characters are endearing (although there are a lot of them), and there seems to be groundwork for an interesting story here (medieval plus fantasy plus sci-fi plus post-apocalyptic plus space plus ????).

Which brings me to the biggest problem here. I have NO idea what's happening. There are like ten plots all interwoven with constant jumps in time and place. By the end, of 0.2, the VN is was starting to feel like a demo reel of many very short vignettes, none of them circling back to each other. This would be challenging to follow even if all chapters of the VN were released at once, but having this come out in chapters that could be separated by weeks/months makes this feel like a deal-breaker.

I've often wished that VNs/games would be released in layers, rather than in chapters. For example, release a short story about one character with basic art and no choices (a VN); then add choices and more art in the next release; then add a subplot with a new MC for the next release; etc. It would be a lot easier to keep up with games like this over the months/years. This VN would be a perfect game for it. Tell Celeste's story start to finish (no time cuts/etc.), then layer in more characters and flashbacks and player choices over future releases.

If this was truly an intro then there was a ton of content. Good job to the dev for making this story interesting.
PROS
Renders are good
Characters are attractive and have depth
Story is interesting
CONS
Writing needs some help, but only a little bit
The flash backs there
Summary
Although this is a good VN with a sloid story, the writing needs some attention. Not a lot mind you, but it is noticeable in some spots. With a quick clean up this could be fixed.
Characters have depth in their development and I can see them getting better as the story continues.
I recommend this VN. It is interesting, and the models are sexy.
Good luck to Namco15 with further success on this project.

I played for maybe half an hour and then had to stop because the English language and the quality of the dialogue are just not good enough. You can clearly see that GmaS wants to create a diverse world, with its own mythology and history, in which the "Witches" play a central role. But many dialogues simply seem infantile. This is partly due to the fact that the English language is very badly used, both in terms of the choice of words and grammar. I think if the developer were to run the texts through DeepL, it would immediately be a leap in quality. On the other hand, the style of the conversations seems very "childish", not how adults would converse.

And that really hurts both the atmosphere and pacing of the game. So much so that I only mention in an aside that the renders are really impressive, I like the transitions and fight scenes are well staged. There really could be a lot to be said for GmaS, but the linguistic shortcomings dramatically push the experience down.

The looks of this game are incredible, the renders look fabulous but the story seems a little odd so far. While the Setting of the story is really intruiging it is quite hard to follow. In this first version the story seems to jump around timelines really fast and its hard to follow how and why things are happening. The start seemed quite linear but then it went all over the place. I hope in future updates the story will be easier to follow because right now its pretty hard to immerse yourself in the game. Apart from that the game looks like it really has potential and got nice music and sound even tho the silent periods could be less and or shorter in my opinion.
Its definetly worth checking out and we will see where this goes

Played version 0.1

I don't get the story. Renders and poses are nice though.

The dialog, setting and story are really confusing to understand.
I'm totally lost as to what's going on with this setting. It gives the impression that the dev threw in every scenery they had available without much explanation as to why or how it fits together.

But let me start at the beginning: We're first left with two redhead sisters out in the wild hunting wildlife to survive. Let's call them Not-Aloy and Not-Aloy's sister. Okay, seems like a fantasy setting. Gotcha.
Not-Aloy's sister is playing with some weird future tech-tech device she traded for her gear. Okay, fantasy setting with ancient advanced tech or something. Not-Aloy fits right in. Gotcha.
They talk about some stories of a maker and some witches and we get to see some story delivered by an artful filter.
Then tech-tech device somehow creates a ruckus, which the sister somehow hears (despite being deaf as we're told later on) and that lures some monster that takes her... hostage(?). It's somehow intelligent or something.

Cue the sudden appearance and disappearance of our MC (or at least I think that was her), she literally just vanishes and reappears multiple times, killing the monster and strolling up to both girls in her tight biker / commando outfit like it's nothing. We exchange names and somehow those sisters' names are significant. So I guess she's some fetish magic witch, okay.
MC calls in some flying Uber drone service (I'm sorry, what?) to take sister away into some fabled tech-tech city. While that's happening we're being told the MC is a witch and she's able to sense emotions and has magic. Or something.
MC and Not-Aloy drive away on MC's bike (sure glad bikes are whisper quiet in the future) and end up in Night tech-tech city.
Both sisters just take all of this in stride having a shower and just accept that they're supposed to live here now. I'm officially confused.

The entire setting of the game now shifts. From this point on we're only following the MC in this tech-tech world. There's some backstory and flashbacks that follow but I'd given up at this point skipping through most of the barely understandable English dialog.
There's cosplaying in this world, real-world posters of games and computers, some form of witch police force, head sets and other tech-tech and yet characters have elf like features, magic abilities like being deaf and yet being able to hear and talk with people, regeneration abilities...
It's completely opposite to what's been shown in the intro with the sisters.

The dev seems really talented on the visual front but everything story related is a mess right now. I'll be sure to follow the progres. Lesbian harem games are really rare and I just hope the dev can find some help to make their story more understandable and coherent.

This gets a 3.5... The story and setting seem interesting and the renders are very good... But the English is bad and the story progression is very confusing... The bad English make the confusion even worse... If this can be improved this seems like a very interesting game...

An absolutely incredible start of a game (review as of v0.1)! The renders are amazing as can be seen in the preview pics but they are also part of a very original and intriguing story featuring a truly lovely protagonist in appearance as well as personality. If you're not instantly turned off by a female protagonist or the elven ears (which I myself was sceptical about!) and value girl-on-girl scenarios this is a must play and I'm really looking forward to how it continues!

Very beautiful, lot's of hot girls and fetishistic imagery. Also for first release this is very long.
However the game lacks focus, there are too many jumps in settings, too many characters. Scenes lead nowhere, when it get's interesting it just cuts to completely different scene.
But it sure has potential and is a feast for the eyes.
Rating based on V0.1

I don't like guys so only games with lesbian-exclusive characters do anythiing for me

But I just couldn't get into this one, the writing is atrocious. Maybe the plot and characters have something going for them, but it's really hard to tell when they're hidden beneath objectively bad writing filled with enough mistakes to make it incoherent.

Renders are fine, fetishes work for me but it feels like one of those machine translated games even though it isn't.

Pretty good renders and an interesting sci-fi setting. Really good demo. The only problem I can see so far is the planned kinks. A lesbian only focused game is quite niche imo.
I hope you find your target audience because you have a very promising game on your hands.

Normally, i have any interest in lesbian erotism. I like mainstream movie with lesbian theme, But see two girls fail for the flesh. My interest is under the minimal level.

I begin by tank @Namco15 for not going in a vulgar porn stuff but focus in erotims and sensuality and put priority in the story telling. The story have the first place and the MC do not fuck like a rabbit without reason. She is in relationship and in love. This is clearly show.

The developper take a lot of big risks and this time he paids.

The character of Celeste (The MC) is strong and weak in the same time. This is a simple clue of how rich and complex the story are.

In case is not still clear. I do not like lesbian stuff normally. But i'm, now, an unconditional fan of this story.

I can write a lot of stuff. But is already tell. I do not repeat what is already write. This time i do it short.

I finish by give to @Namco15 the biggest honor i can give. The storyteller title.

I played a lot of games here but only this game made me write a comment. I am incredibly amazed. I just lack of words to describe how much this game impressed me. There are a lot of good games no doubt, but this is something completely different level. Idk what exactly hit me so hard: fascinating graphics, fresh and interesting setting or complicated and intriguing plot with lots of stories behind it. Maybe all together. But im sure this is the best game i played from this website. And probably the only one i read from the first word to the last. I couldnt stop when i start the game until i finished it. As for the plot one of the great thing about it - its a perfect dosage of elements in it. There is epic stories, adventures, fightings, politics, humor, romance, light dialogues etc. All of them on their places and nothing is too much to make the story ridiculous. The plot unfolds with a lot of questions and understatements, keeping the intrigue. That makes me feel i am reading not some cringy words written just to show another porn scene, but something like a real literature, something really deep and worked out. I'm sure it even could be a foundation of a decent novel (i mean a book), if all of the storylines and backgrounds will be developed nicely.

This is not a porn game, this is a novel, where erotic is secondary to the plot. Honestly, i used to see this type of games focused on "serious" plot as a bad thing, because absolute majority are extremely stereotyped and boring. This is not the case. There are 2-3 games here when i felt something similar to this game in terms of storytelling, but neither of it had such great arts and twisted plot. Visually speaking there is a highest quality i have seen so far, incredible renders and characters. Erotic element are incredible too. I am not a fan of "lesbian-theme" but top quality renders make scenes very excited.

But i have to say, beside of delight author gave me with this game, i also felt deeply frustrated and even depressed at the end. You know, this feeling, when your favourite film, series or book finished. And the date December 2024 in the "future updates" section kills me completely. Its just very sad we have to wait such enormous time for continuation. It really hits badly when you get intrigued like hell and then you find out the next update will be in a 2.5 years. I know its good to make large updates, but if the waiting have to be such long, maybe it make sense to update more frequently but with less content? Just to feed the intrigue you make with the plot. By the way, this version (v0.1) took me a couple of hours, so this is not a demo - its a complete chapter.

Dont know how to play anything now. All of the games now look like some low-quality (in every aspect) clown porn compare to this. Yea, sorry for being hyped asf. I am really really hope we will see future updates as soon as possible.