Spoilers ahead.
When rating something you'd try to weight different aspects of it before putting down a score, however in this case the horrendous writing and story overshadow any other positives the game might have.
Feels like it was written by someone whose epitome coolness is a teen anime MC giving long winded monologue on morality and how adults suck.
Story begins with MC waking up with amnesia on a beach, witnessing a battle and instantly choosing a side with no motivation other that they were on receiving end of the beat down. After battle, being brought to the capital, this absolute genius instead of trying to learn more about his surroundings, who or where he is from, decides to join the army of a warring nation.
How hard can it be to give MC motivation? Literally add that to travel or work he needs documents and fastest way to get them is army, BOOM motivation to enlist. But no he joins for w/e to just move the plot where dev wants it.
So after being noticed by top brass because he parried an attack in mock fight(wow amazing) and getting chained up to the wall, physical and mental abuse to find out if he is a spy, MC proceeds with enlistment, genius.
Many cringe dialogs and pointless scenes later we find ourselves at the one that broke the camels back, i simply could not keep reading further.
MC debates what this war is even for and that its only there to fill rich nobles pockets. How did he come up with that conclusion, where did he even get that impression from? No scene in game showed greed of nobbles.
However what he does know about war is that its to retake the land back from beasts. That a nobles child(mage) is fighting along side you on front lines not even as officer, but a common soldier. Even bigger one is that run away slave(elf) that KILLED a nobles son and many other soldiers that pursued her, not only avoided punishment, but was offered a spot in the military, that's some extreme meritocracy right there.
Bad writing in AVNs usually diluted but sex scenes, so after you cringe for a while, you get to the 'good part' making it more tolerable. How ever up to this point in story there are no real scenes making horrendous writing stand out even more.
My tip would be either add bunch of mindless fucking scenes or a rewrite adding motivation for MCs actions and more lore on the conflict. Don't know, google writing tips for dummies or something, put some effort.
When rating something you'd try to weight different aspects of it before putting down a score, however in this case the horrendous writing and story overshadow any other positives the game might have.
Feels like it was written by someone whose epitome coolness is a teen anime MC giving long winded monologue on morality and how adults suck.
Story begins with MC waking up with amnesia on a beach, witnessing a battle and instantly choosing a side with no motivation other that they were on receiving end of the beat down. After battle, being brought to the capital, this absolute genius instead of trying to learn more about his surroundings, who or where he is from, decides to join the army of a warring nation.
How hard can it be to give MC motivation? Literally add that to travel or work he needs documents and fastest way to get them is army, BOOM motivation to enlist. But no he joins for w/e to just move the plot where dev wants it.
So after being noticed by top brass because he parried an attack in mock fight(wow amazing) and getting chained up to the wall, physical and mental abuse to find out if he is a spy, MC proceeds with enlistment, genius.
Many cringe dialogs and pointless scenes later we find ourselves at the one that broke the camels back, i simply could not keep reading further.
MC debates what this war is even for and that its only there to fill rich nobles pockets. How did he come up with that conclusion, where did he even get that impression from? No scene in game showed greed of nobbles.
However what he does know about war is that its to retake the land back from beasts. That a nobles child(mage) is fighting along side you on front lines not even as officer, but a common soldier. Even bigger one is that run away slave(elf) that KILLED a nobles son and many other soldiers that pursued her, not only avoided punishment, but was offered a spot in the military, that's some extreme meritocracy right there.
Bad writing in AVNs usually diluted but sex scenes, so after you cringe for a while, you get to the 'good part' making it more tolerable. How ever up to this point in story there are no real scenes making horrendous writing stand out even more.
My tip would be either add bunch of mindless fucking scenes or a rewrite adding motivation for MCs actions and more lore on the conflict. Don't know, google writing tips for dummies or something, put some effort.