You're fine, I've seen some seriously horrible stuff. Like I've seen stuff I where I wish it was MTL that murdered it, but its just really terrible grammar sometimes. You are not even close to the bad mark. Don't sweat it too much, I am just happy you have legit proofreaders.Thanks a lot for the feedback, it's fixed.
No I didn't know it until now, basically, it was added to hide some posters that could have been a copyright problem.일장기의 의미를 알고 적습니까?
What if you could get revenge on all the people who wronged you and get what you always desired....
Pretty sure the MC just goes back in time. Not another world.is this an isekai of porn games?
Dude you are going too far, all the characters were imagined on koikatsu by myself and my artist was inspired by that to make the characters.To put 'Great artwork' as comment is questionable. The style for the redhead girls looks like carbon-copy from a certain manga, '100 Girlfriends' by Nakamura Rikito, down to the mole below the mother's left eye. The style for the white-haired girl also looks suspiciously similar to Elizabeth from 10 Deadly sins. That, and the fact that there's no artstyle consistency in the rest of the characters is quite suspicious.
Might need to wait and see for the HCG, at this point there's barely enough content for this to be called a game.
I would actually suggest a ; hereI don't see anything technically wrong with the fourth picture, I don't know what that person is on about. However, it's better to use a "." instead of a comma there. In truth the sentence itself is awkward, while not really wrong, but its not really natural. I would suggest something like this:
"No wonder Noriko calls me a parasite. I am one." <---I'd actually add a bit more to this but I need more context. This is just makes it worded more naturally and splits it with the period. The "I am one." part should probably have a bit more to it, but that is dependent on context.
Just ignore him. He's speaking out of his ass to seem contrarian. Don't even know where he got the idea that the white haired girl looks anything likeDude you are going too far, all the characters were imagined on koikatsu by myself and my artist was inspired by that to make the characters.
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would be great if he made a character that looks like one of the characters in either of thoseJust ignore him. He's just speaking out of his ass to seem contrarian. Don't even know where he got the idea that the white haired girl looks anything likeYou must be registered to see the links. And from what I've seen the redheads have no single reference toYou must be registered to see the linksseeing as they look nothing like the girls in there.
Lmfao that would've riled him up to type away further although I'd enjoy a good parody reference here or there.would be great if he made a character that looks like one of the characters in either of those
a big early fuck you
Both work, but they have the same purpose. It depends on how formal you're trying to be. In this case in the game a ; would probably be better, but I'd still err on the side of caution and just use a period. It connects the two thoughts together better with the ;, but again, I based what I wrote on the fact I have zero context.I would actually suggest a ; here