VN - Ren'Py - Completed - Haley's Story [v1.1 Pre-Patched] [Viitgames]

My review is based on the 0.35 version of the game.

I view Haley's story as one of the "must play" vns right now. The story and the sex scenes aren't anything special, but the game shines in the scenes between the two main characters. There's a certain "authenticity" and maturity in the way they interact with each other and the world, which is something really special compared to the numerous other similar games with the incest thematic. The lack of music and being forced into certain narrative choices should be addressed, but the overall good impression remains. If I have to give it a score it would be 4.5/5, but since I can't the game gets a 5/5 from me with the idea I'll change my rating later on if things take a turn for the worse.

Edit: After update 11 (0.50) there's a quick switch in the game's narrative direction, that's very different to the original concept, pitched by the devs and experienced during the first 11 updates. I can't recommend this game any longer as I feel the story's progression has deteriorated, so be warned.

I can honestly say this is one of the best written relationships I have encountered on this site. The brother and sister twin duo effortlessly switch between playful banter, satirical takes on popular culture and looking out for one another.

But underneath their sparkling dialouge hints of their desires erupt in a way reminiscent of Victorian era romances. Heaving bosoms, sidelong glances and Mr Darcy's tight jodhpurs seem to be the ancestors of this story. That the devs have managed to capture this with static images and a few lines of text is a testament to their ability. Kudos.

The story and other characters, while engaging enough, are really a support framework to hang the central relationship off. All the girls are beautifully rendered but, once again, it's Haley that steals the show. It's a game that I eagerly await the updates for.

Good virtual novel, for sure. Sexy atmosphere, Great artwork and a solid story make this particular title a must have. It's still somewhat early in the development and shows a ton of promise. Shame if this one were to be abandoned.

Amazing story if a little slow but the romance really works just wish the night scenes were a little bit lighter as it was hard to see. The models were beautiful and the scenes were well designed along with a great variety of meaningful choices

Great game!! Superb story, characters, details, animations

Really very happy to give this game a try

The story is about twins who fell in love in-spite of giving numerous try to not to...
The story is very deep and if developer wants to stretch the story he can do it very easily !!

V0.45
The Story is slow paced, it shows a brother sister that enjoys sticking it to each other, while at the same time caring for each other.
It has Potential, However, there are a few things that really need addressing

The Good:
Well written story, slow paced.
The girls are for the most part really good looking
The Sister, is very Pretty, her personality is warm and caring, even though she would like to come across as other then.
The MC is mature, and is not portrayed as someone who cannot make a decision, or make up his mind, which is refreshing.

Now for the Not so good:

Now for something thats been mentioned: Being Forced into a relationship with Sandra... Really this should be a choice. As pretty as she is, some of us really have our preferances Elsewhere.
She is Nice and all that But, if you got no real interest in someone why start something with them in the first place? Its Unnecessary IMHO

To the VN Dev I have this to say: Please consider making it a choice and any future VN's you put out, Make things like that a choice...

I must admit that the slow tempo of the bro-sis relation is awesome. This Vn is really great and Im excited for the next updates. I wish all good for Devs and everyone involved in creating this little masterpiece.

The story revolves around character that is truly in love with her twin sister do he is bit confused about how others will react also his sis is also doing her best to take her heart away from her brother that's why she is making his brother indulging with other girls but she is unable to resist herself from going closer and closer to her brother the story have really good taste I can deny the fact that each girl in this game have her unique character and also a different and unique look also the story is a good feeling for all the characters in the game I personally had enjoyed the game very much and hoping to see much more progress in the game in future my good luck to the developer

The writing is weak and the game suffers from a lack of meaningful player choice when it comes to dealing with Haley. You are given some choices that will affect side characters, but all the ones about Haley don't really matter in the end. Haley always has the main character wrapped around her little finger, no matter what choices you make.

This is a big problem because the game automatically puts you into a relationship with another girl, Sandra, after Haley encourages the main character to pursue her. But then, Haley immediately tries to undermine their relationship after she decides that she wants the main character for herself. So the players who like Sandra are annoyed that Haley gets between them, while the players who don't like Sandra were already annoyed that they had to be with her in the first place. So it's a lose-lose situation for everyone.

I find Haley to be obnoxiously annoying due to what is supposed to be playfull teasing of the MC but instead comes across as passive-agressive manipulations because, well... that's exactly what it is. Haley is selfish, conniving, and insufferably needy. So if that's not your cup of tea, then you best avoid the game because when push comes to shove, the MC will always turn into a doormat for Haley to walk all over.

Most of the renders look nice, but the night scenes are all too dark to see anything. There isn't much in the way of erotic content, but the half dozen or so scenes that are in the game now do have animations. Unfortunately, while those animations are smooth, they are also unnatural and awkward. So it's nothing to get excited about.

I am gonna go straight to the point:

Pros

• Good graphics - The graphics in this game, for most parts, is good.
• Sex scenes - There are a couple of sex scenes in this game which is a good thing, as a lot of games don't include many sex scenes until the end releases.

Cons

• Story - The story was somewhat interesting in the first few releases, but then it became flavorless and dull.
• Sandra - She is a character in this game with whom you can have a relationship. I am not a racist when I say this but her character looks really bad, unrealistic, and her relationship with the MC feels dull.
• Unimportant choices - The game has a lot of choices but most of them are useless and play a very insignificant amount of role.

CONCLUSION
If you just care about the sex scenes in a game then you may want to try this one out. However, if you like some control over your story then this game isn't for you.

I would rate this game a 2.7 but that is not possible so I am giving it a 3.

This just keeps getting better ... I like the art, like the story and the characters are believable, comfortable and approachable. MC is not a douche-nozzle, Sis is not an idiot, his GF is not crazy, and for once there are a good mix of folks living happly without the lame-assed bbc drama that imho is raciest af. Good job Dev ... I look forward to more.

The renders are quite high quality and the story is good as well, but renders and story alone are not what make this game great. You can produce a cookie cutter story, which this story arguably is, but if you can make characters who feel real through their dialogue and actions then your cookie cutter story can become a classic. This is where Haley's Story shines. The dialogue and character decisions feel real and believable, especially for the main characters, and the renders high quality allows for the characters to have ranged and often surprisingly subtle expressions.

For the few downsides, the game is fairly linear at this point in time and you are forced into a relationship which not all players may be happy with. All of these problems seem to come about as a result of this game's devotion to real characters and competent story. I am happy to surrender over the top porn scenes and vast branching story lines in return for a well paced story with good dialogue and believable characters.

In short, Haley's Story knows what its strong point is and capitalizes on that strength without skimping too much on other gameplay aspects .5/5.

Hate to be critical when people invest a lot of time and effort in a project but this one didn't hold my interest.

The game consists of endless screens to click through, each with a sentence or two of dialogue and therefore the story advances very slowly. After almost inflicting RSI on my poor mouse clicking finger I gave up.

Additionally, I have no interest in banging any kind of blood relative so the story constantly trying to push you down that route got tiresome very quickly although I appreciate there obviously is a market for that kind of thing judging by the number of games catering to it.

On the plus side, the graphics are good and the avatars are attractive. Just too many screens to click through for each tiny piece of story progression.

Well, there we go, my review:

Out of pure curiosity, I decided to download this game and I must honestly say, that I have been positively surprised.
It does not seem to be quite as well known as one might think it would deserve to be, after having completed the current build. (0.25 in my case)

First off: As the title may suggest, the main character of this game seems to be not the actual playable character, but Haley. This is quite uncommon, since most games of this genre seem to be entirely focused on a playable protagonist. Hearing this could make one think, that the playable character is merely an observer, which quite frankly is not completely true. He is an active part of the story, yet he is not alone in that role, considering most engagements are at least subconsciously initiated by Haley.

The characters and their models:

Protagonist:
quite protective of his sister, yet intimately rather reluctant - If it were not for Haleys allusions and hints, their relationship would never develop as it does. - Looks like a somewhat athletic and decent looking guy of maybe 19-21 years (They are twins, although I am not sure, how old they are exactly)

Haley:
very extroverted, playful and jokingly teasing towards her brother. - extraordinarily attractive redhead (I guess, that's preference) desirable figure, looks quite natural (2 hours older than her brother)

Jack - Haley's (former?) boyfriend
Dull plain appearance - rather submissive behaviour - feminine to some degree (the hair doesn't help here)

Victor:
Playable character's superior at work
Squash partner, acquaintance --> friend
Muscular black man, apparently homosexual

Sandra: (girlfriend)
Black women, about the same age as the twins, extensively conservative (prudent?), loyal, trustworthy

Lisa (friend of Sandra)
adventurous, sexually open-minded, ignorant of other's feelings

Adriana: - (Haley's boss - PC's possible Sugar-Mama)
her husband committed adultery multiple times, yet for some reason she seems to be emotionally attached to him - quite interesting concept (female sugar-daddy), sexually a stereotypical Milf

The story itself:
Brother and sister share an apartment, since they both found employment with the same company. Sexual tension between the two of them mixed with some suppressed romantic feelings at least on Haley's side.

Critique and Praise:

- outstandingly believable characters
- well written plot
- typical sibling humour
- slow but intense build-up
- enjoyable renders
- properly integrated sex scenes

- choices seem to be of secondary importance, although this will probably change

All in all a very solid game, most certainly with the potential to be one of the best.


Thank you for your attention.

A realistic story, decent renders, decent writing, beautiful characters, a great developer, and a perfect incest romantic game! choices in this game do matter a lot to open some scenes, which is a great quality of a visual novel. So highly recommended to try this one out and I'm looking forward to play the next updates.

Excellent art and characters. The writer knows how to properly build up dramatic/erotic tension in the story. For this reason, this game might not be right for those looking for more instant gratification, but for those with a bit more patience it can be very rewarding.

The author of the english dialogs is kinda genius! I didn't skip any part of this VN (even when it was pitch-black sometimes), simply because of the excellent writing! I mean, there are decent renders with various expressions, too, but "this" dry wit sorta teasing between siblings which ever gonna raise tension, lust, affection... that's a new leap in quality to me (v0.25)

v0.25
Really good start into the story, a long one but not boring.
There are several good characters with deeper story behind them. From which Haley is one of the best of them.

MC is not a huge perv, twin sis neither. Their love starts slow and sweet..

There is no grinding, just a nice story to watch

+++++ PROPERLY, REALISTICALLY WRITTEN. 'Nuff said considering most of the stuff I see here.

- Forced into one deadweight relationship I wouldn't have gotten into in the first place.
- Wrong labeling of a few dialogs.
- No significant impact of choices yet, but the story is in its early stages as of now.

There are plenty of VNs all across F95z rated 4+ but are actually riddled with amateurish writing and sleazy screenplay. Sometimes their dialogs make me put my palm to my face and whisper, "Somebody please shoot me."

But not this game.

As a student of literature, I know good writing when I see it. The writer of Haley's Story knows how to tell things without telling them. Convey words between the lines. There hasn't been a single other game here that convinced me that a relationship was real. In this one, you actually feel it. The writer plays more with the emotional tension than a sexual one and, boy, do they succeed. That alone is what I was looking for in all the VNs of these genre.

So far so good. No sexual content but surprisingly decent writing for a porn game. Pretty humorous. The relationship between Haley and the MC feel organic, which is rare for a porn game. Renders look good as well. I really hope the sex content is good or at least, the writing continues to be this good.