VN - Ren'Py - Completed - Haley's Story [v1.1 Pre-Patched] [Viitgames]

I must admit that the slow tempo of the bro-sis relation is awesome. This Vn is really great and Im excited for the next updates. I wish all good for Devs and everyone involved in creating this little masterpiece.

The story revolves around character that is truly in love with her twin sister do he is bit confused about how others will react also his sis is also doing her best to take her heart away from her brother that's why she is making his brother indulging with other girls but she is unable to resist herself from going closer and closer to her brother the story have really good taste I can deny the fact that each girl in this game have her unique character and also a different and unique look also the story is a good feeling for all the characters in the game I personally had enjoyed the game very much and hoping to see much more progress in the game in future my good luck to the developer

The writing is weak and the game suffers from a lack of meaningful player choice when it comes to dealing with Haley. You are given some choices that will affect side characters, but all the ones about Haley don't really matter in the end. Haley always has the main character wrapped around her little finger, no matter what choices you make.

This is a big problem because the game automatically puts you into a relationship with another girl, Sandra, after Haley encourages the main character to pursue her. But then, Haley immediately tries to undermine their relationship after she decides that she wants the main character for herself. So the players who like Sandra are annoyed that Haley gets between them, while the players who don't like Sandra were already annoyed that they had to be with her in the first place. So it's a lose-lose situation for everyone.

I find Haley to be obnoxiously annoying due to what is supposed to be playfull teasing of the MC but instead comes across as passive-agressive manipulations because, well... that's exactly what it is. Haley is selfish, conniving, and insufferably needy. So if that's not your cup of tea, then you best avoid the game because when push comes to shove, the MC will always turn into a doormat for Haley to walk all over.

Most of the renders look nice, but the night scenes are all too dark to see anything. There isn't much in the way of erotic content, but the half dozen or so scenes that are in the game now do have animations. Unfortunately, while those animations are smooth, they are also unnatural and awkward. So it's nothing to get excited about.

I am gonna go straight to the point:

Pros

• Good graphics - The graphics in this game, for most parts, is good.
• Sex scenes - There are a couple of sex scenes in this game which is a good thing, as a lot of games don't include many sex scenes until the end releases.

Cons

• Story - The story was somewhat interesting in the first few releases, but then it became flavorless and dull.
• Sandra - She is a character in this game with whom you can have a relationship. I am not a racist when I say this but her character looks really bad, unrealistic, and her relationship with the MC feels dull.
• Unimportant choices - The game has a lot of choices but most of them are useless and play a very insignificant amount of role.

CONCLUSION
If you just care about the sex scenes in a game then you may want to try this one out. However, if you like some control over your story then this game isn't for you.

I would rate this game a 2.7 but that is not possible so I am giving it a 3.

This just keeps getting better ... I like the art, like the story and the characters are believable, comfortable and approachable. MC is not a douche-nozzle, Sis is not an idiot, his GF is not crazy, and for once there are a good mix of folks living happly without the lame-assed bbc drama that imho is raciest af. Good job Dev ... I look forward to more.

The renders are quite high quality and the story is good as well, but renders and story alone are not what make this game great. You can produce a cookie cutter story, which this story arguably is, but if you can make characters who feel real through their dialogue and actions then your cookie cutter story can become a classic. This is where Haley's Story shines. The dialogue and character decisions feel real and believable, especially for the main characters, and the renders high quality allows for the characters to have ranged and often surprisingly subtle expressions.

For the few downsides, the game is fairly linear at this point in time and you are forced into a relationship which not all players may be happy with. All of these problems seem to come about as a result of this game's devotion to real characters and competent story. I am happy to surrender over the top porn scenes and vast branching story lines in return for a well paced story with good dialogue and believable characters.

In short, Haley's Story knows what its strong point is and capitalizes on that strength without skimping too much on other gameplay aspects .5/5.

Hate to be critical when people invest a lot of time and effort in a project but this one didn't hold my interest.

The game consists of endless screens to click through, each with a sentence or two of dialogue and therefore the story advances very slowly. After almost inflicting RSI on my poor mouse clicking finger I gave up.

Additionally, I have no interest in banging any kind of blood relative so the story constantly trying to push you down that route got tiresome very quickly although I appreciate there obviously is a market for that kind of thing judging by the number of games catering to it.

On the plus side, the graphics are good and the avatars are attractive. Just too many screens to click through for each tiny piece of story progression.

Well, there we go, my review:

Out of pure curiosity, I decided to download this game and I must honestly say, that I have been positively surprised.
It does not seem to be quite as well known as one might think it would deserve to be, after having completed the current build. (0.25 in my case)

First off: As the title may suggest, the main character of this game seems to be not the actual playable character, but Haley. This is quite uncommon, since most games of this genre seem to be entirely focused on a playable protagonist. Hearing this could make one think, that the playable character is merely an observer, which quite frankly is not completely true. He is an active part of the story, yet he is not alone in that role, considering most engagements are at least subconsciously initiated by Haley.

The characters and their models:

Protagonist:
quite protective of his sister, yet intimately rather reluctant - If it were not for Haleys allusions and hints, their relationship would never develop as it does. - Looks like a somewhat athletic and decent looking guy of maybe 19-21 years (They are twins, although I am not sure, how old they are exactly)

Haley:
very extroverted, playful and jokingly teasing towards her brother. - extraordinarily attractive redhead (I guess, that's preference) desirable figure, looks quite natural (2 hours older than her brother)

Jack - Haley's (former?) boyfriend
Dull plain appearance - rather submissive behaviour - feminine to some degree (the hair doesn't help here)

Victor:
Playable character's superior at work
Squash partner, acquaintance --> friend
Muscular black man, apparently homosexual

Sandra: (girlfriend)
Black women, about the same age as the twins, extensively conservative (prudent?), loyal, trustworthy

Lisa (friend of Sandra)
adventurous, sexually open-minded, ignorant of other's feelings

Adriana: - (Haley's boss - PC's possible Sugar-Mama)
her husband committed adultery multiple times, yet for some reason she seems to be emotionally attached to him - quite interesting concept (female sugar-daddy), sexually a stereotypical Milf

The story itself:
Brother and sister share an apartment, since they both found employment with the same company. Sexual tension between the two of them mixed with some suppressed romantic feelings at least on Haley's side.

Critique and Praise:

- outstandingly believable characters
- well written plot
- typical sibling humour
- slow but intense build-up
- enjoyable renders
- properly integrated sex scenes

- choices seem to be of secondary importance, although this will probably change

All in all a very solid game, most certainly with the potential to be one of the best.


Thank you for your attention.

A realistic story, decent renders, decent writing, beautiful characters, a great developer, and a perfect incest romantic game! choices in this game do matter a lot to open some scenes, which is a great quality of a visual novel. So highly recommended to try this one out and I'm looking forward to play the next updates.

Excellent art and characters. The writer knows how to properly build up dramatic/erotic tension in the story. For this reason, this game might not be right for those looking for more instant gratification, but for those with a bit more patience it can be very rewarding.

The author of the english dialogs is kinda genius! I didn't skip any part of this VN (even when it was pitch-black sometimes), simply because of the excellent writing! I mean, there are decent renders with various expressions, too, but "this" dry wit sorta teasing between siblings which ever gonna raise tension, lust, affection... that's a new leap in quality to me (v0.25)

v0.25
Really good start into the story, a long one but not boring.
There are several good characters with deeper story behind them. From which Haley is one of the best of them.

MC is not a huge perv, twin sis neither. Their love starts slow and sweet..

There is no grinding, just a nice story to watch

+++++ PROPERLY, REALISTICALLY WRITTEN. 'Nuff said considering most of the stuff I see here.

- Forced into one deadweight relationship I wouldn't have gotten into in the first place.
- Wrong labeling of a few dialogs.
- No significant impact of choices yet, but the story is in its early stages as of now.

There are plenty of VNs all across F95z rated 4+ but are actually riddled with amateurish writing and sleazy screenplay. Sometimes their dialogs make me put my palm to my face and whisper, "Somebody please shoot me."

But not this game.

As a student of literature, I know good writing when I see it. The writer of Haley's Story knows how to tell things without telling them. Convey words between the lines. There hasn't been a single other game here that convinced me that a relationship was real. In this one, you actually feel it. The writer plays more with the emotional tension than a sexual one and, boy, do they succeed. That alone is what I was looking for in all the VNs of these genre.

So far so good. No sexual content but surprisingly decent writing for a porn game. Pretty humorous. The relationship between Haley and the MC feel organic, which is rare for a porn game. Renders look good as well. I really hope the sex content is good or at least, the writing continues to be this good.

Pros:

- Haley is amazing: looks, personality, and chemistry with MC - all A+. She might be my favorite female character from all the games I've played, and I don't even like gingers.
- All models look hot and original, not refurbished from other games.
- All characters have their own unique personality and story.
- The story is good and flows well, no awkwardness.
- MC has unique dynamics with every character.

Cons:

- One unavoidable relationship. - Dark skinned characters are sometimes hard to make out in certain setups.

Even though I have downloaded somewhere in the hundreds games from here this is still probably my favorite the characters have the cute factor mixed with the sexy and sweet and the story so far has been simple but great as well I can't help but fall for these girls especially Haley

Let's start with the good stuff:

The renders are nice, although scenes with dark-skinned characters (Victor and Sandra) tend to be way too dark.

Haley's character is quite enjoyable. She's headstrong, smart, cheeky and also pretty relaxed.

The playful banter between the siblings is refreshing.


Now for the stuff I didn't like so much:

Haley isn't that attractive to me.
Her face looks strange (especially her botox lips) and her facial expression frequently reminds me of a scary Chucky doll.

The story.
From the beginning we already know the outcome. To keep things interesting, we should have either been given meaningful choices (like which girl to date) or a feeling of threat we could possibly lose Haley to another guy - or both.
Haley's Story gives us none of this - instead we get pretty much railroaded through the story and the little choices we have are for the most part cosmetic.

We also get forced into a relationship with Sandra.
I like Sandra, but forced relationships are a terrible idea.
It's never really explained why Sandra and the MC are dating and what they see in each other - there's almost zero chemistry between them. Especially the MC doesn't seem to have any genuine feelings for her.
In fact he ALWAYS shows the same blank facial expression - even during scenes when Sandra is cuddling with him.

Speaking of male characters: They are either wimps, creeps - or gay.

Jack is portrayed as an one-dimensional laughing stock with one purpose: getting dumped.
Haley doesn't even want to spend time with him or properly kiss him - he's just an annoyance to her.
So why are they even a thing?
To me that's just terrible, low-effort writing / character design.

Richard (another one-dimensional character) could have also been a threat, but it gets immediately defused because Haley isn't interested in him at all.

In the end the only interesting male character is Victor - and of course he's gay because… reasons.

It also feels like the dev had a basic plot idea, but then didn't pay too much attention to the consistency / details of the story, like:

Dinner at Adriana and Richard
The whole scene felt so out of place… Richard openly hitting on Haley while his wife and her brother are present. The MC talking in an extremely unpleasant way to Adriana, something that should have got him instantly fired. And Adriana, up to this point cool and professional, suddenly swearing and then jerking off the MC under the table. It felt like a scene right out of a JAB comic. "Bizarre, but not in a good way" (© Avaron1974).

At the pool
The girls' skin shines like the MC emptied 2 bottles of sunscreen on them (just to be completely dry again in one of the next renders) - and then out of nowhere he's fondling his sister's boobs. Seriously?

Emergency room
The MC carries his injured sister all the way to the next emergency room. Pretty convenient it's just around the corner, so no driving involved, nope. Haley is totally in pain, but the moment the doc states nothing needs to be done about her ankle (not even ointment and bandage - what kind of doc is she?) Haley's instantly fine again...


Conclusion:

Haley's Story is a visually appealing VN with a charismatic main love interest and some refreshing banter.
Unfortunately, the player gets pretty much railroaded through the story - and choices don't seem to be very meaningful.
On top of that some (especially male) side characters are just poorly written and many story details don't feel very believable.

I must say this VN has everything to become a masterpiece, a classic,really incredible renders and animations, the writing is also a key factor here, absolutely amazing so far, the slow burn with Haley is great, she conquered me so easyly, the only Con i can say for now is the forced relashionship with sandra, i really dont want to be anything but friends with her, you either are nice to her or kinda of a dick, so i hope you can dump her eventually to pursue the other girls, there is absolute no fucking way that i would chose Sandra over Haley, Haley always wins with me.

Excellent story,. Not a game that is going to just instantly throw you in there where you are banging girls left and right. You really feel like these are 2 people working through their hang ups. Might be my personal favorite plot in a story yet.

FINALLY! A sister in an adult game that seems like an actual living, breathing human being with depth of character and a real personality. Haley is probably even better a sister and a better character than an adult game deserves. She's cute and sexy, without having a large boob or an ass, which seems to be the definition of beauty in most adult games. But, you know what, even if she were not cute, I wouldn't even mind, because, as one of my favorite writers once mentioned in one of his books that once you like a person, they start to look more beautiful. The story seems to revolve around her, more focus on her than the MC. So, "Haley's Story" is an appropriate name. Don't see an incest tag, so I'm just anxious that we get to romance her in the end. I can't wait to see where this story goes. Kudos to the developer. You sir/ma'm DO really know how to make a good character.