VN Ren'Py Hearts on Parole [v0.1] [Magnum]

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Are the eyes the only issue?
In general the faces, but the eyes are most likely the biggest culprit.

And, just to add something - I have already seen someone writing a paragraph of what you can do or should do so that they play the game - since you are new to this, do the game YOU want to create. Because this is also the game that makes YOU happy to work on it.
 

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I guess I wasn't as clear as I had hoped. I was trying to ask the questions clearly without coming across as overly aggressive. But, still, thanks for the answers and I'll try to be more clear so you can answer what I was actually asking.

1. I only play games that are harems, so if it isn't one I won't be playing it, and if you haven't decided then I will wait until you do before trying it. Having incest is just a bonus. Incest with Mc and a girl he is related to specifically, not random other people doing it. But incest is not required for me to play like a harem would be. The same for pregnancy, a bonus to any game, but not required for me to play. Though if you are going to allow the Mc to creampie the girls then please don't ruin it by having the girls talk about getting morning after pill and things like that. They aren't real people, they don't need to say anything like that to explain why they will or won't get pregnant. If you don't want pregnancy then it won't happen, you are the storyteller. You don't need to rob player agency to justify not having it. But if you want to let players chose to give creampies then let them have the illusion of pregnancy at least by not undercutting it with dialog that ruins the moment. Like "I'll get a pill," or "I'll just abort it," or such.

2. I was trying to ask if other characters would be having sex with girls in the game. This is the main point of all the rest of the questions. I do not play games where other men are shown fucking girls that the main character can end up with. I don't even want to see girls that will never be love interests for the Mc having sex. Nor do I want to hear about it. I have no interest in a game with a bunch of random sex scenes. Every added cock reduces my enjoyment. I like to see the main character's story, not a bunch of other people's sex lives. It isn't entertain to me, and it actively turns me off and makes me drop a game.

Likewise, I don't enjoy hearing about a girl's sexual past more than is absolutely needed. I can deal with it if it fits a moment, especially if it is important, like knowing Jujen's past, but if it is brought up all the time, as if it is supposed to excite me, well it doesn't and in fact it turns me off. For example, if a girl says, "I fucked a guy last night, but he was nowhere as good as you," I'd honestly consider dropping a game for something like that. She could say, "You're so good, keep going, I love it," and the same things gets across, she is really enjoying it, but I don't have to hear about some other guy fucking her to get to that feeling. I don't want to hear about it, and I want to see it even less so.

Similarly with darker things. If a girl has rape in her past, for example, I don't want to hear descriptions of it and I'd rather it just be left vague and left up to my intelligence to fill in the gaps. You shouldn't assume the readers need everything spelled out. To finish the example: if a girl was raped in the past, you can just have her say, "I was... assaulted," or "I was attacked, it was... bad." Players are smart enough to understand what you mean and this is far closer to how real women talk about such things. And you for sure never NEED to show a girl being rapped unless that is something you want to have as a core fetish of the game. I worked on a college campus for almost twenty years as a trauma councilor and girls who have been assaulted don't go into graphic details. That is something that happens in rape fantasy fiction because the more descriptive the victim is the more the person reading it gets off on it, it isn't how real talks about it go. And that history of mine, listening to the times when girls (and even some guys who had been victims) finally do actually, fully, describe what happened... it makes it tough for me to play games with that subject matter treated as a fetish without being prepared for it.

That is all just as an example, of course, I don't know what types of girls are in the game or planed so that specific thing might not come up, but again, it is an example. I hope you understand what I was getting at by using it.

Some advice, one storyteller to another:
I have written for several AVNs and I am actually working on my own. I also have some published books (not adult and I try to keep that work separate from this hobby). You are in control of the story, not the other way around. If you want a story where there's lots of random sex scenes with random people and the Mc is a cuck and watches other guys fuck his girls and you want to force the players to see other people's sex scenes you can do that, but don't lie and say, "The story demands it." Or "The narrative just went that way." The story doesn't have a gun to your head. You are in control, not the story. Likewise, if you want to have a harem game with pregnancy, where the main character and his love life is the focus and there aren't a bunch of random sex scenes with other people fucking like shitty porn has then that is what the story will have, because you are in control.

So I guess to summarize my questions:
My main question with 2, 2.5, and 3 was are YOU, as the creator and controller of the story, planning to include sex scenes that do not involve the Main Character or not? If yes, will those scenes involve character that the main character can fuck at any point in time? If it will be that way, then I will leave now. If you want other people's sex scenes but they will be side characters ONLY, then will it be FULLY AVOIDABLE, as in I will be able to skip seeing it without missing any story information. I am neither a voyeur nor a cuck, so watching anyone else's sex life other than the main character's actions is of zero interest to me and if the main character is going to be cucked then I will just leave now.

It should go without saying, this is all just my opinion. You can and will make the game you want. But please, just be honest. Make the choices, as soon as possible, about important issues and then be clear and honest about them. I wish you the best whatever you decide to do and I will wait for your answers before I make a final choice about sticking around to see where things go. If the game isn't for me and my tastes then that's okay, I'm sure you'll still find an audience. And if that is the case then I won't pester you or stick around. But if lines up with the types of stories I like then I'll be happy to stick around. (y)

Hello again, alright let me try answering all of this

1. I will say the possibility for a harem is likely. I am still figuring out how to impliment that and this is just the first update. Incest is just a straight no because Byron isn't related to any of the girls. If I do impliment pregnancy I would probably make optional.

2. Other characters having sex with the girls besides the MC, very likely probably not. I can't say no for certain right now, it's just way too early for that. There are two girls that have been shown that the MC won't get with. One is a rather important minor character for the plot and the other is just a namless NPC used briefly in a scene. I literally just took a stock character from HS2 for that. Otherwise I have been using monocolor sillouttes for stuff. The MC is very much not a cuck though. Nor do I plan on implimenting random side girls just for him to fuck. That would just be weird and there are plenty of girls in the game as is.
 

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Just got caught up with the Dev, and I see the Dev is already aware of the character designs. Yeah, did feel a bit rough, specially that one MC meets in the gym, those cheeks, but as far as story goes, very nice. If I was to pick an early fav in the characters, probably be a toss up between Rachel and the Secretary, can't think of her name, but did like them both. And I did enjoy this. Thank you and looking forward for more!!!
I'm actually quite fond of gym girl and her cheeks. I thought it made her stand out lol. But I am not opposed to workshopping characters to get them looking better.

Sierra? Girl with Heterochromia?
 
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I hope dev sees this and answers. is there any chance of allowing us to rename MC in the future?
Hello I do see this. The answer is no. Byron is a set character. He is not a self-insert for the player and allowing him to be renamed kinda takes away from the intended nature of that.
 

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In general the faces, but the eyes are most likely the biggest culprit.

And, just to add something - I have already seen someone writing a paragraph of what you can do or should do so that they play the game - since you are new to this, do the game YOU want to create. Because this is also the game that makes YOU happy to work on it.
Hello and thank you. I do intend on making the game I want to make. Which, fortunately, does allow for a degree of player choice. Granted Byron is his own character and will do things within that character at the end of the day.

Could you elaborate on the eyes a bit more? My intention was to have each girl have different eye types and sizes because well, they're people and people are different.
 

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I'm actually quite fond of gym girl and her cheeks. I thought it made her stand out lol. But I am not opposed to workshopping characters to get them looking better.

Sierra? Girl with Heterochromia?
It specially stood out to me after they walked in on his dancing. I thought at first she was holding her breath to keep from laughing.

That's it, Sierra, dang, must have been starting to get tired that I couldn't remember that. Specially because earlier on I thought of the Game Company. ;)
 

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My full responses are in spoiler tabs so as not to bog down the thread with walls of text, cheers: (y)

In general the faces, but the eyes are most likely the biggest culprit.

And, just to add something - I have already seen someone writing a paragraph of what you can do or should do so that they play the game - since you are new to this, do the game YOU want to create. Because this is also the game that makes YOU happy to work on it.
Since I think I'm the only one who was, "writing a paragraph of what you can do or should do so that they play the game" I'm guessing you're talking about me. :ROFLMAO:

I address what I think is a (possible unintended) mischaracterizing of me in full in the tab. But no worries mate, it's not a huge deal, cheers, ;)

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Hello again, alright let me try answering all of this

1. I will say the possibility for a harem is likely. I am still figuring out how to impliment that and this is just the first update. Incest is just a straight no because Byron isn't related to any of the girls. If I do impliment pregnancy I would probably make optional.

2. Other characters having sex with the girls besides the MC, very likely probably not. I can't say no for certain right now, it's just way too early for that. There are two girls that have been shown that the MC won't get with. One is a rather important minor character for the plot and the other is just a namless NPC used briefly in a scene. I literally just took a stock character from HS2 for that. Otherwise I have been using monocolor sillouttes for stuff. The MC is very much not a cuck though. Nor do I plan on implimenting random side girls just for him to fuck. That would just be weird and there are plenty of girls in the game as is.
First off: Though I still haven't tried this yet... Personally, just from the previews, I don't have any problem with your unique take on the character's looks. Having a unique style is not a bad thing and can help you stand out. Graphic and character design are usually secondary to me as the story and its content matters most for me. But that's just me.

Thanks again for taking the time to have this back-and-forth. If you'd like to continue then feel free to read the tab below, if not it's okay, best of luck whatever choices you end up making, (y)

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Hello I do see this. The answer is no. Byron is a set character. He is not a self-insert for the player and allowing him to be renamed kinda takes away from the intended nature of that.
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Just my two-cents on that.
 
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Hello I do see this. The answer is no. Byron is a set character. He is not a self-insert for the player and allowing him to be renamed kinda takes away from the intended nature of that.
follow up question. would you be against it if someone were to make a patch that lets us rename him?
 
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follow up question. would you be against it if someone were to make a patch that lets us rename him?
It's funny, in my post above yours I talked about naming the Mc and literally said to the dev, "...someone will probably just make a patch for doing it..." if he doesn't, :ROFLMAO:
 

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It specially stood out to me after they walked in on his dancing. I thought at first she was holding her breath to keep from laughing.

That's it, Sierra, dang, must have been starting to get tired that I couldn't remember that. Specially because earlier on I thought of the Game Company. ;)
I honestly think that's just lighting at play. She does look odd in that scene but at the gym looks pretty decent.

I'm glad you likeSierra
 
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My full responses are in spoiler tabs so as not to bog down the thread with walls of text, cheers: (y)


Since I think I'm the only one who was, "writing a paragraph of what you can do or should do so that they play the game" I'm guessing you're talking about me. :ROFLMAO:

I address what I think is a (possible unintended) mischaracterizing of me in full in the tab. But no worries mate, it's not a huge deal, cheers, ;)

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First off: Though I still haven't tried this yet... Personally, just from the previews, I don't have any problem with your unique take on the character's looks. Having a unique style is not a bad thing and can help you stand out. Graphic and character design are usually secondary to me as the story and its content matters most for me. But that's just me.

Thanks again for taking the time to have this back-and-forth. If you'd like to continue then feel free to read the tab below, if not it's okay, best of luck whatever choices you end up making, (y)

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Just my two-cents on that.
The reason I'm being vague and not 100% is because I just don't know yet. It honestly depends on how the story plans out. I am leaning towards no because how I am currently planning things it's not likely. Now if sharing does occur it would most likely just be the girls sharing Byron. Byron sharing the girls? I don't have that planned.

Now as far as the naming things go, I'm looking at this as a Geralt type character where he is a set character but there are different things and choices that he could make within his character that's still belivable. Yes, i cannot stop people from self inserting and to answer the other post, if people want to make that plug-in and rename him, yeah I can't stop that. I would prefer it not happen but people are gonna do what they want.
 
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The reason I'm being vague and not 100% is because I just don't know yet. It honestly depends on how the story plans out. I am leaning towards no because how I am currently planning things it's not likely. Now if sharing does occur it would most likely just be the girls sharing Byron. Byron sharing the girls? I don't have that planned.

Now as far as the naming things go, I'm looking at this as a Geralt type character where he is a set character but there are different things and choices that he could make within his character that's still belivable. Yes, i cannot stop people from self inserting and to answer the other post, if people want to make that plug-in and rename him, yeah I can't stop that. I would prefer it not happen but people are gonna do what they want.
Appreciate the answer. The girls sharing the main character would be assumed since I advocate for a harem. In terms of fetishes and what most people when they say they don't like sharing it means the main character sharing girls. (y)
 

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The reason I'm being vague and not 100% is because I just don't know yet. It honestly depends on how the story plans out. I am leaning towards no because how I am currently planning things it's not likely. Now if sharing does occur it would most likely just be the girls sharing Byron. Byron sharing the girls? I don't have that planned.

Now as far as the naming things go, I'm looking at this as a Geralt type character where he is a set character but there are different things and choices that he could make within his character that's still belivable. Yes, i cannot stop people from self inserting and to answer the other post, if people want to make that plug-in and rename him, yeah I can't stop that. I would prefer it not happen but people are gonna do what they want.
it's good you're keeping an open mind in regards to some aspects. it shows you are willing to listen and consider some ideas. I've seen games where devs refused to allow that and they don't survive very long whether it's due to not enough attention or people saying things the devs don't like and them going dark on the forums
 

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it's good you're keeping an open mind in regards to some aspects. it shows you are willing to listen and consider some ideas. I've seen games where devs refused to allow that and they don't survive very long whether it's due to not enough attention or people saying things the devs don't like and them going dark on the forums

I'm just one guy and I know my work can always be better. Ultimately I'm going to make what I weant, but I want it to be enjoyable.